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Scriptnotes, Episode 471: Sing What You Can’t Say, Transcript

October 6, 2020 Scriptnotes Transcript

The original post for this episode can be found [here](https://johnaugust.com/2020/sing-what-you-cant-say).

**John August:** Hey, this is John. Today’s episode contains some strong language, including lyrics sung by our special guest.

Hello and welcome. My name is John August.

**Craig Mazin:** My name is Craig Mazin.

**John:** And this is Episode 471 of Scriptnotes, a podcast about screenwriting and things that are interesting to screenwriters. Today on the show we welcome back one of our favorite people. Rachel Bloom is the award-winning co-creator and star of Crazy Ex-Girlfriend. Welcome back, Rachel.

**Rachel Bloom:** Thank you for having me. I’m so excited to be back. I was just listening to Scriptnotes yesterday.

**Craig:** Aw.

**John:** Aw.

**Rachel:** It is one of my delights as I continually, endlessly clean my house which is now all I do. And it’s such a good excuse to love cleaning.

**John:** Aw.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** Last time you were on the show we talked about better portrayals of sex onscreen. And this is possibly confirmation bias but I feel like I’ve seen some better portrayals of sex onscreen and I want to credit you and us for at least people thinking about how they’re portraying sex onscreen.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**Rachel:** I mean, it’s definitely all us. And it’s definitely specifically that conversation that we had, obviously.

**Craig:** And probably mostly me.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** It was us.

**John:** It’s mostly Craig.

**Craig:** [sings] Mostly me.

**Rachel:** Yes!

**John:** Now today Rachel we want to talk about songwriting. I want to talk about the art of songwriting and the business of songwriting because you have some opinions about how songwriters are paid and not paid for the work they do in Hollywood. And let’s try to solve this problem as best we can over the next 45 minutes.

**Rachel:** Oy, OK.

**John:** Oy.

**Craig:** I know.

**John:** And in a bonus segment for Premium members I want to talk about revivals which is what musical theater calls reboots. And what things should be revived, what things should not be revived, and how we’re thinking about stage musicals in this time.

**Craig:** I mean, I’m all for this. This is a dream come true. This is my kind of episode. I might actually listen to this one.

**John:** Ha-ha. That’s how good of an episode we’re going to have.

**Craig:** Yes.

**John:** There’s actually news this week. So we’re recording this on Friday morning, so obviously the thing that just happened was that Trump got COVID. We’re not going to talk all about that, but there’s other stuff that happened this past week.

**Craig:** Yeah. Let’s talk about anything other than that. Please.

**John:** Anything other than that. So this past week the Hollywood Commission on Eliminating Sexual Harassment and Advancing Equality released a survey of nearly 10,000 workers in the entertainment industry. So this commission is the Anita Hill Commission. The one that Kathleen Kennedy helped set up. It started in 2017 on the heels of #MeToo. And so this was a big survey of people working in the industry. It got released. I didn’t hear people talking very much about it, but I want us to talk about it because we were talking about this quite early on.

We’ll put a link in the show notes to this, and both the article is about it and the actual link itself. It’s a beautifully illustrated report. I think this report is 18 months too late at least, and I don’t feel it actually has a lot of very actionable information.

**Craig:** Mm-hmm.

**John:** But let’s talk about some of the information they have in there. So, only 35% of survey respondents believe that a powerful individual such as a producer or director would be held accountable for harassing someone with less power. But there’s an interesting gender split there. 45% of men believe that someone would be held accountable whereas only 28% of women have that same belief. So, again, that seems to track with my experience is that men don’t think the situation is as bad as women think the situation is.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** One good thing the survey did is they talked to people across different areas of the industry. So they talked to people in talent agencies, commercials, film and TV, live theater, and corporate. There really weren’t big changes in any of those different categories. So, no matter where you’re at you had a similar kind of experience.

And less than half of workers felt that they noticed progress since the #MeToo movement began.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** Is any of this surprising to either of you?

**Craig:** I mean, not to me. I think that there is a pretty clear direction that this is pointing out. The part of it that seems particularly useful, at least from my point of view, is the part where they’re saying, “Look, there is just simply not high enough of a number of people who are being victimized who feel comfortable enough to report.”

So the conventional wisdom is everybody is constantly reporting everything. And everybody is inundated with by HR complaints. But in fact in reality that is not the case. And that people just are still reluctant to speak out in our business when they are being victimized. That is something that does feel actionable in terms of reshaping the way that the mechanisms work.

I mean, I think that there is value in these kind of like people feel questions because it does show that there is a total lack of trust among the traditionally victimized people in Hollywood that Hollywood is going to fix itself. And so in this case we’re talking about women and we’re talking about racial minorities, people of color. They’re like, yeah, we didn’t really think anything is changing and we don’t think it’s going to change. And I don’t blame them for that.

On the other hand, I’m not sure why there was so much emphasis on how do you think things are going, because really what I kind of want to know is how are things going. And from what I can tell they’re not going well but maybe going a little bit better? Rachel, what’s your feeling?

**Rachel:** You know, I’m thinking the same thing. What are those actual stats? Obviously, I mean, I have a lot of thoughts on this. I don’t even know where to begin. But I think the first thing is are there stats on complaints. Are there anonymous stats that the HR departments of each studio, for instance, could release to us? Now, I know that that gets touchy because having been in a position of power and very familiar with the HR system it’s a very separate confidential process. Litigation can be involved. People getting fired can be involved. So they’re very, very secretive about it. But I think that like, you know, secrecy breeds a system that doesn’t fix itself sometimes. So I also would be interested in the actual stats.

That having been said, it’s weird because – OK, so first of all I talked to someone the other day who is writing on a staff and the showrunner on that staff is hostile to women. But not in a way that’s like, “Hey sugar tits. Or like I’m not going to give you the script because you’re a lady.” You know, it’s stuff that you can’t articulate why.

Like if you were to write down what they said it’s all – it’s all kind of this dog whistle hostility that you know something is wrong but because it’s not like out and out harassment it’s hard to articulate. And I think that that’s what makes – when the pressure is on you to report something you can’t just call HR or people might feel that they can’t just call HR and be like, “There’s just this feeling of hostility.” You have to have these concrete things because they’re keeping a record of the things said.

And having been in situations where there’s something off and you can’t articulate it and you start to question well maybe it’s me. Maybe I’m just overly sensitive. I can see a world in which we’ve gotten a lot of the actual offenders, right. Assumedly. We’ve gotten a lot at least of the blatant harassers. The fucking rapists. The out and out racists. Now you’re in this I think with some people this second tier. It’s definitely inappropriate and harass-y and bullying, but it’s less like tangible. It’s much more like contextual. And that’s a lot harder to report and scarier to report. And that’s why it falls on people in power to question their power and privilege because ultimately it’s like your personality fucking sucks.

That’s when we get into like change your personality. Change your leadership style. And some people I think are unwilling to examine that. And then also as far as like people’s reluctance in reporting, I saw up close what happens when you report. So basically a couple years ago there was this program called the CBS Diversity Showcase which still exists. And every year – now they just call it CBS Showcase which I think is a huge improvement.

But basically it’s a big sketch comedy show put on by CBS every year showcasing diverse people. Basically anyone who isn’t–

**Craig:** A white guy.

**Rachel:** Straight, white, and white women, too. Straight white men and women, basically. But then it also includes differently-abled people in that. And I being in the comedy community had a ton of friends who did this. And for years I heard horrible stories about, I mean, racism, fat shaming. I mean, the straight up use of the N-word.

I’d heard all these stories. And so when I actually started working for CBS, because CBS was the studio of Crazy Ex-Girlfriend, I got an invite to the diversity showcase that year. I was like, man, now I’m in a position of power here. I’ve got to say something. And so I went through – but it wasn’t on behalf of me. It was on behalf of like a bunch of people. And so I went through this process. And so it started out by asking various people, hey, are you aware that the diversity showcase is terrible? And no one at CBS was aware because it was in its own bubble.

So then they said well here’s who you talk to at HR. I talked to HR and they said, OK, well here’s how you have people come report. Here’s our actual reporting line and then here’s our anonymous reporting line so people can call in anonymously.

So then I sent out some emails and I posted a thing on a couple private Facebook groups saying, hey, various people have been complaining about the CBS Diversity Showcase for years, I just want to let you know CBS has, I’ve been assured, a strict non-retaliation policy if you complain. Because the worry is with people complaining – because it’s not like people – people knew in theory they could complain. I don’t think they were necessarily given the numbers to HR, but they theoretically knew there was a way. But they were afraid because the whole point of this showcase was to expose them to casting directors and people who could hire them. And the worry is well if I complain I’m going to get taking off of those casting lists, which is going to defeat the purpose.

Or, if I complain what if this whole program gets taken away? So, all I did was give people numbers and emails. And what was interesting is otherwise very outspoken people were like, “I’m afraid to complain,” because of those exact things. Sure, you say CBS has a strict non-retaliation policy, but you can’t prove to me that I wasn’t suddenly removed from a casting list. There’s no way to actually record that. There’s no way to actually record how various casting directors or heads of casting are going to like, if they’re thinking of a role, to just like not think of me. There’s no actual way to monitor that. And then god forbid this program gets taken away if this blows up.

So eventually the program did change. But what happened was, because this was in the wake of #MeToo, some independent publications, I want to say it was like The Wrap and I think it was Vulture – I could have that wrong – they were separately talking to people about sexual harassment, which I hadn’t heard about, from one of the heads of the showcase. And then the racism and kind of homophobia and sexism kind of came along with that.

So, I’m still not sure – my point being, because the showcase did change. And it changed for the better. I’m still not sure if that was HR dealing with the racism and the things that people I think had reported based on me giving – because I know some people did call in with complaints based on the numbers I gave them. Or, if people were like, you know what, I’m just going to go straight to news sources because that’s the only way to get things done. I actually still don’t know and I still work with CBS. I want to have faith in that system. HR was very nice to me when I spoke to them. Obviously the situation didn’t affect me, so there was only so much I could do and so much that I could share.

So I don’t know what came first. If it was HR dealing with this or if someone had to leak it to The Wrap to actually affect change.

**John:** Well, one of the things I hear you talking about is we talk about sexual harassment, which is obviously how this all started. We also talk about racial disparities and racism that’s happening. But there’s also just kind of abusive behavior on the behalf of showrunners or executives or other people. And I do feel like if we see a change from 2017 is that all the stuff we sort of knew about but we literally weren’t talking about we are talking about that a little bit more. And some of the CBS showrunners have been fired off their own shows for being assholes.

And so that does feel like there’s some progress there.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** But I don’t think we’ve cracked how you report an actual incident in ways that make you feel like you are not putting yourself at risk whistleblowing on this.

**Craig:** I mean, it’s probably based on what Rachel is describing, and also based on the way that this report functions, it seems to me like this will continue to be something where there is not a clarity that you would hope for, but there is at least an increase in attention and the more that we look at it, even if we’re looking at it imperfectly, if we’re maybe not doing the perfect survey or the statistics don’t cover every possibility, or the system for reporting isn’t what it ought to be, if we keep looking at it and we keep talking about it in theory it will slowly but surely and inexorably improve.

I don’t know what the perfect situation is. I think that sometimes Hollywood, I mean, for instance the Writers Guild for well over a decade has been commissioning a yearly report on diversity, as if paying for a report on diversity was the same thing as helping diversity. It’s not. We do have a tendency – we love reports. It’s one of our things we love to do in Hollywood. We love a report because it’s something that’s easy to do. And it’s not easy to fix the problem that every single report will report. It is always the same.

**John:** But the difference between a WGA report on diversity is we’re looking at how many people are actually employed. And those numbers are actual real numbers we can look at and we can see whether there has been progress, where there’s not been progress. And there has been progress at the lower levels of TV staffing. And it’s also helpful because we can – it’s our own members who are largely responsible for hiring those lower level members. So that is actually progress that can be done.

What’s so tough though is these invisible actions that are happening and people who are afraid to file harassment reports, like those numbers are tough to do. So I think my biggest frustration with this commission report is that this should have come out 18 months ago. We’ve also spent millions of dollars on setting up some anonymous tip line that still does not exist. I’m frustrated by how slowly this has all gone is I think my biggest concern with this commission and this report.

**Craig:** Yeah. Yeah. This is, yeah, it’s complicated.

**John:** So let’s go onto a much simpler issue for us to discuss which is ageism.

**Craig:** Oh yeah. Easy.

**John:** So also this past week the Career Longevity Committee of the Writers Guild of America West sent out an open letter decrying the Academy’s new rules for inclusion and representation saying they should also be mindful of age as a qualifying characteristic. So, we’ll put a link to the letter, but I thought we’d have a brief chat about ageism and how we rank that in our list of priorities of things to think about. And Rachel you’re our young person on the call. How old is old?

**Craig:** Saying young person is the oldest thing a human can do.

**John:** Isn’t it so great? I want to say you’re our young person. Ageism, how do you think about ageism? Are you mindful of people’s careers petering out at a certain point? Where does that fit in your list of priorities?

**Rachel:** Yeah. Ageism, I really first started to think about it when we were auditioning for the pilot of Crazy Ex-Girlfriend. And everyone who came in to audition for the role of Paula, which is we wanted women of – I don’t know if I talked about this last time, but we wanted women, any ethnicity, 40s to 50s. And they were all so talented. I mean, just like pros and so many of these women could also sing their faces off. People who otherwise you would never knew were singers. It’s like, oh, I’m an amazing actress, yes, and I can also sing my face off.

And so I realized like there are so many talented women and so few roles for them. So that’s one element of ageism is just opportunity. It’s interesting when it’s in terms of like a writing staff, we’re talking about writing with ageism, because then when you talk about age you start – like I’m starting to work on a project where two of the leads are going to be in their 40s. So I want to work with someone who is at least in their 40s. Because there are certain – it’s like a kind of project where there are references. I want a partner with someone who is in their 40s. So is that like reverse ageism? Sure, but what I really want is someone who has that life experience and background. It’s seeking out the appropriate person with the background and the life skills to better write and better inform this project.

And similarly when I wrote on Robot Chicken they were actively trying to hire younger people there because it’s a sketch show based on pop culture references and all of the references they’ve been doing were – there were a lot of like He-Man, a lot of like ‘80s shows. And I came in and me and some other people and we were like, no, we’re going to do some like Nickelodeon ‘90s shows, which now is also old. So I’m sure that they should start hiring some even younger people.

I feel like ageism gets – it definitely exists, it just gets trickier when it comes to writing because ageism overlaps with where you’re coming from, point of view, your experience as a writer. And it’s I imagine kind of harder to define and then also there’s this real rebellion against like straight old white men, but like old being one of those defining factors. And that being seen from a position of power.

So I think that it’s interesting to see, especially in writing, is age in writing in the context of writers, is that something that is discriminatory? Is that something that people suffer from?

**John:** Yeah. So I was able to look up some stats on this. The average age of a screenwriter on a top-grossing Hollywood film in 2014 was 46 years and 10 months. So it’s not just the youngs who are getting hired to do these things. And it is weird with a writing career though because it’s expected that you’re going to advance through things. You’re going to start at a low level and you’re going to move your way up and you start getting movies made. And then it can take 10 years to get your career started, so therefore you’re not going to be as young as you were once.

That doesn’t help the 60-year-old person who is looking to break in to the TV industry.

**Craig:** Yeah. That’s a perfectly good number. Writer of 65, whatever you want to call – I guess 65 is what we consider a senior citizen. The problem I have with this, and I’m just kind of astonished the more I’ve been thinking about it, is that the committee is essentially saying, “Hey, Academy, your new rules for inclusion and representation should also include white men from 40 years and up.” At that point there are no more rules for inclusion and representation. Because at that point if that’s all you need to do well that’s what we’ve been doing anyway. That’s who has been winning Academy Awards. White men between the ages of 40 and 60 as far as I could tell.

We’ve discussed this quite a bit that when you look at the statistics from the Writers Guild the age group that is being pummeled and underrepresented is not writers over the age of 40, it’s writers under the age of 30. They’re the ones who are getting killed. But when you look at the way our business actually functions, while there may be a world where there is this like line in the sand of a protective class that starts at 40, I am hard-pressed as a white man who is almost exactly in between 40 and 60 to say that people like me need protection.

I look around and I think that people like me are what Hollywood defaults to. So this feels like, uh-oh, sometimes as people are trying to make things better suddenly everybody is like well what about my thing and then at some point you have to say, no. I’m actually drawing a line there. I do think that there is an issue for older writers. We’re just talking about writers now 60 or 65 and above. I think those numbers are real and I think there is just an endemic kind of ageism in our country and our culture. But from 40 to 60, which is what this committee is suggesting as far as I can tell, no. I think that’s a terrible idea. I do.

**John:** Hey Rachel you’ve had to work with people who are older than you. And you’ve had to be the boss of people who are older than you. And that’s a thing I do hear when I think about writers working on writing staffs where they’re not the senior person but they’re quite a bit older than the people they’re working for, is that an awkward dynamic ever?

**Rachel:** On my end, no. Because I feel like the art that we’re doing – I feel like comedy is such an equalizer. But in general focusing on a task, from my point of view, but again I was a boss, so I’m coming in from a position of power. So, like I want to acknowledge if you ask people from my show they might be like, “Yeah, it was really weird that I had like a 20-something year old bossing me around. Like it fucking sucked. It was humiliating.”

So from my point of view I’m like, yeah, we’re all in our nebulous 30s/40s. That’s how I kind of see everyone around me. It’s about the work. But I think what occurs to me with this is what you said earlier which is breaking in. And there are a lot of programs where it’s like young writers’ new work and young writers has become synonymous with people just starting a career, but there are people who maybe aren’t “young” but want to break into the business and have things to say. And they should be given a fair shot.

This is really true, or this is like really true, is with women and directing. Because – and Rachel Specter and Audrey Wauchope who were writers on Crazy Ex-Girlfriend they’ve talked a lot about this because they wanted to co-direct an episode of Crazy Ex-Girlfriend. It was their first foray as co-directors but they’d been writing partners for – I mean, 10, 15 years. And they had to appeal to the DGA board. And basically they didn’t get approved as directing partners, despite the fact that they’re definitely partners.

And a bias that came up is like well why haven’t you directed more together. And it’s like we had young kids. Being a director you have to be on set constantly. And if you are a mother with young kids you cannot be gone 18 hours a day. And so there is an implicit break from certain aspects of one’s career when your kids are little. And I think that’s a really big issue is the strike against moms.

And this is a larger thing – and I thought this way before I was a mother. And now that I am one I feel this so much stronger which is the lack of paid maternity leave and paid paternity leave. And that’s an overall cultural problem. In general that then leaks into our various guilds.

**John:** Absolutely. So if you’d waited one more year you would have gotten your paid parental leave which the WGA got in its last contract.

**Rachel:** Yes.

**John:** So that is something. But I want to go back to what you said about this idea of we often conflate younger with newer or less expensive. I remember very distinctly I had a lunch meeting with a producer who I really liked and she was great. And I had worked with her before. And she sort of half-pitched me this idea of something they were working on. And I was like, oh, well that sounds great. And she said, “No, we’re looking for a younger writer.”

And I was 30. And I was like, wait, I couldn’t believe she was saying that. And of course what she really meant was a less expensive, less experienced writer for it. But I do think we conflate these two things. And I think that’s to our detriment. We deliberately sort of discount anybody who isn’t in a very clear slot of being like, oh, I really mean a writer who is about 25 years old is my perception of who the writer is for this project. And that’s something we need to past. Because that’s a bias that I hear myself saying, too.

Like I’ve tried to not say Baby Writer anymore. Because it’s infantilizing and sort of makes me think of somebody who has just no idea what they’re doing, when in fact they are a competent person who can write which is why I’m considering them for a job.

**Rachel:** Yes.

**Craig:** Agreed.

**John:** Cool. Rachel, you are a songwriter in addition to being an actor and a writer of scenes. Can you talk to us about the process of writing a song that you know is going to fit into a filmed narrative? So obviously you did a ton of this for Crazy Ex-Girlfriend, but you’re also doing this for Broadway. You’re doing this for other things. Talk to us about in your head that moment where it goes from characters speaking into characters singing and how you think of that transition and just the craft of coming up with a song that is doing some storytelling.

**Rachel:** Ooh. A lot.

**John:** A lot.

**Rachel:** Well, I think I go back to that old adage of you burst into song when the emotion is too strong to speak. And then when the emotion is too strong to sing you dance. That I think rings very, very true. You need a heightened state of emotion in order to burst into song. Or you need something to be heightened. You need a grandiosity.

So, if you look at opening numbers, like even the South Park Movie, the emotions are heightened, sure, but it’s also that they’re setting up South Park to be this beautiful, grand town. And they’re doing a kind of Beauty and the Beast like opening with that. So I think there needs to be some sort of intensity or just a reason why a song here. And that’s a really loaded question because there can be a million reasons. Like on Crazy Ex the emotion was nine times out of ten always high, but occasionally we would have songs that were almost like from the writer’s point of view that were making a point. Because also comedy songs are such efficient ways to explore comedic ideas. I see most of the songs I write as like musical sketches.

It’s ways to like boil down these ideas and fully explore them. And so I’m trying to think of an example on the show where it was maybe the writers coming through. Oh, perfect example. So in season three Rebecca Bunch is kind of at a very, very low point. And a song comes in called The End of the Movie. So Rebecca is despondent. And she could sing a song right now, but instead this voiceover song comes in. And it’s a song about how Rebecca thought she was in a movie this whole time. But if this were the end of the movie it would suck because life fundamentally doesn’t make narrative sense. And it’s sung by Josh Groban.

So that was, sure, motivated by a low point in the story and Rebecca’s emotions were low, but it’s also something we as the writers wanted to say and use to comment on the situation. But I think that even then it was a remarkable low in the story.

**John:** So something like that song, you know where in the context of the story it’s going. So you can’t write that song independent of the actual scene or the sequence in which it’s going to be dropped. It just doesn’t make sense to write that song independently of that. So, as a songwriter, and was this you and Jack? Who was doing this song?

**Rachel:** This was actually a big brainstorming session between me, Jack, Adam, and Aline, this particular one.

**John:** And so you’re coming out of this with just a list of beats or ideas or like these are the things that are going to be in the song and then it becomes the responsibility to put lyrics to it. But you have an outline for what happens in the song independently of where the lyrics and the music are going to go, right?

**Rachel:** Yes. So that song was really almost all Adam, because we had had a brainstorming session where we said it should say like life is a series of revelations that occur over a period of time. And Adam was like oh my god that’s such a great lyric. He really honed in on that song. But generally the way that I go from like a bullet pointed list of ideas to crafting a song is I’ll take the brainstorm and I’ll be like, OK, so first of all what’s the hook. What’s the title of the song? What’s the chorus of the song? What’s the thesis statement of this essay that you’re writing? That comes first.

And then, OK, what is the structure? Does it feel like it’s going to be a verse/chorus structure? What will best serve the idea of the song? And then you’re like, OK, if your verses are your supporting paragraphs – sorry, AP English kid here, so I still think about it like college essays. If your verse is your supporting paragraphs, OK, what are the fundamental ideas I want to have in this verse? How do I want to heighten it into this verse? OK, what should the bridge say? How can the bridge be a departure that kind of goes a different place but then eventually gets you back to the song?

And you start kind of putting sentences and putting jokes in these verse structures. It’s not like lyrics yet. But it’s just organizing your ideas in these clusters and then you start to like rhyme. That’s how I structure it. That’s how I begin to write songs.

I know some people probably they’ll get like a rhyme in their head and they’ll be like, OK, I know I really want this line in there. And so that’s definitely–

**John:** That’s the germ there.

**Rachel:** Yeah, like we knew when we were writing the song Strip with My Conscience, like we knew we wanted this line that Jack came up with of “Let me choke on your cocksuredness.” And so like that was something that came up in the brainstorm. And it was like well that’s a great line. We have to put that line in there. So then it’s a reverse engineer of like, OK, that line is great. That could work in this verse because I know that in this verse we’re going to be talking about this aspect of her sexuality. So then how do we rhyme with cocksuredness? It was reverse engineering. And the answer is luridness.

**John:** Now, Craig, what Rachel is describing, it does sound like writing a scene, doesn’t it?

**Craig:** It does. And I haven’t done anywhere near as much songwriting as Rachel has, but I have done some songwriting for movies. And when I was working on songs with Jeanine Tesori who is a brilliant composer but absolutely refuses to write lyrics. Refuses. [laughs] So that fell to me. One of the things that I was thinking about a lot and I’m kind of curious Rachel if this was part of your calculation was that there’s this awkwardness, there’s an inevitable awkwardness that occurs about one second after the song ends, which is like – and now it’s like almost everybody, like the song ends and then I almost want everybody to sort of look at each other like, “Do we just stand here now? Or what do we do?”

And so I kind of became obsessed with that moment. And really thought as much as I could about how the end of the song would compel the next thing. So that it wasn’t like “and song” and then grind the story up again, but rather push ahead so that even if the song, like a good scene was revealing something, creating drama, resolving a conflict, or whatever it is, that at the very end there was something actionable in the way the song played out so that somebody could do a thing. Or we could cut to a thing and not feel like it was arbitrary.

**Rachel:** Yeah. Yeah. And I think that that’s a testament, because that’s such a good point, that’s a testament to I think when a song is in the right spot most of the time it won’t feel like, well, that was fun. Anyway, we should get back to playing tennis. Because if that’s the case then why did you sing a song? And that song was an aside. So even in like, and I’m going to keep referencing Crazy Ex because I worked on it for a long time, so there’s this silly song we wrote called Man Nap which is a song that men should take naps more. And really silly song. Like one of the most aside songs we ever did. But it was a song sung by Darryl to Nathaniel saying you need to take a nap.

And so throughout the song Nathaniel was getting comfortable and falling asleep. And when the song ended he was asleep and everyone left the room. So there was even a purpose to that song. And that’s the hardest part I find writing especially comedy songs is it’s this balance of you’re furthering something in the plot but yet because you’re living in a comedy song the plot has to stop, because the second that something new plot wise happens in a comedy song it’s the death of the comedy, because you’re not living in this comedic moment.

And so it’s really hard. But it has to still be motivated. It has to be urgently motivated by something in the plot. You have to convince someone to do something. You have to tell the world how much you want something. And at the end of the song, oh my god, I’m going to go get this thing. And that’s also what you can use a bridge for. If you’re living in an idea for most of the song and you’re singing a song called I Want Some Cake. And the verses are like why you love cake. And the chorus is just like I Want Cake, I Want Cake. The bridge is like but wait a second, there’s a pastry shop right around the corner. I can see. It could just go there and get some cake. And then the ending chorus is like I’m Going to Get Some Cake. And then you go and get the cake.

Terrible song idea. But you get what I’m saying that it’s–

**Craig:** It’s the worst song ever. Ever.

**Rachel:** But it’s really hard to strike that balance because a song does stop – most of the time if you’re in comedy songs it does stop the plot a little bit. And so it’s very, very contextual. Craig, what did you work on with Jeanine Tesori?

**Craig:** It’s a movie that I don’t think will ever see the light of day, but we were adapting a Gregory Maguire novel. Not Wicked, but another one of his novels. And writing songs. And it was a joy. And I loved that part of it. Getting a movie made based on a property that people aren’t familiar with always kind of an uphill battle. But it was a great lesson for me because so much of what I kept thinking about was how do I get in and how do we get out.

And for a comedy song like you say why does it happen and also how can its comedy be sort of enmeshed so that it’s not like, again, we don’t stop the show to do – like I always think of Master of the House as the best example of this. I mean, talk about a heavy show, I mean, my god. Look down. Look down. And there are prostitutes that are being in thrown in pits and all the rest. And they’re taking her hair away and her child. It’s awful.

And then you walk into an inn and characters introduced themselves and you just slink into a comedy song. And you slink on out of the comedy song. And it just did it well. You felt seamless.

And I think that this is no different than when we’re writing scenes. I think a lot of times when I read scripts I will see scenes where I’m like this is a wonderful scene. It feels like everything just stopped, a great scene happened, and now everything is starting up again. And then so I don’t recognize how that functions. Yeah.

**John:** Yeah. I’ve definitely written a lot of musicals, but I’ve also written a lot of action movies. And I think the same transition from normal things are happening and suddenly we’re in an action sequence.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** You have the same moments of like, OK, we’re now in a heightened space where this action moment is happening. And the same trouble of how do you get out of that action moment. You’re definitely thinking about that. And I find it weird that we consider writing action to be the job of a screenwriter but sometimes we don’t consider writing the musical number to be part of the screenwriter’s job. And I always insist that it is.

**Craig:** Of course.

**John:** That’s why in the things I’ve written I write the songs, even if I don’t think I’m going to be the person who ultimately is writing that final song. Because important stuff happened there and I need to show on the page what that is going to feel like.

**Craig:** Yeah. I mean, that’s a huge part to me, at least, of these songs is what are people doing while they’re singing? That’s such a big part of it. And with film as opposed to stage the options are essentially completely wide open. You are not stage bound.

**John:** Don’t need that economy of time and space. Not required. So what are you going to do?

**Craig:** Exactly. So what are they doing? What are they looking at? What are they touching? What are they holding? Where are they going? All of that stuff needs to be considered as part of the song so that you understand – it’s part and parcel because I will just keep saying, I mean, the cottage industry that keeps telling screenwriters to not “direct on the page,” absolutely direct on the page. Direct as much as you can on the page. Because the more you put on the page the more your intention will be carried through.

The danger is when I have seen scripts for a musical, I’m thinking of one in particular, where there’s a scene and then the action says, “She turns to camera and begins singing,” and then the title of the song. And then the next scene. So, wait, they’re just – that’s it? You think your job is to just say that they sing a song? What?

**Rachel:** It’s a fundamental misunderstanding. And also [other rising] of probably music, but also songwriters, because I too have read those scripts where it’s like, “And they turn and they sing something.” It basically is like you’re writing “and they sing some fucking bullshit. I don’t know. You’ll figure it the fuck out. But it wasn’t important enough for me to write because I don’t write musicals. And I’m like ironically writing a musical because my kid likes them or whatever.”

**Craig:** Exactly.

**Rachel:** Anyway, go fuck yourself. But, no, it’s part of the story. And, in fact, in thinking about what demands to be musical numbers, musical numbers are often – it’s synonymous with the term like the fun and games of the movie. When you’d be in a montage or when you’d be in the kind of trailer scenes of a movie. That would be in the trailer. You turn that into a musical number. So important things can happen in the musical number. It’s just that you can’t suddenly in the same musical number go from the “I’m on top of the world, I’m eating cake” to “oh no, cake has been outlawed.”

Again, this is my movie. It’s called Cake.

It’s a misunderstanding of how musicals work and the purpose that music serves. And I have firsthand experience and I didn’t mean to jump in, just before I forget, there is something called Demo Derbies which John you may have been seguing into.

**John:** I was total trying to segue, but you do the segue, because talk to us about how songwriters get involved in this process.

**Rachel:** Yeah. So, I also come at things, just I should preface with, because I’ve had the experience of being both a writer and an award-winning actor I see the disparity in how both are treated. And it infuriates me.

Case in point. I have done a couple of demo derbies. So, what happens is there’s a movie, a big movie, and they decide, OK, we want a song here, or we want to even make it a musical. And so they go out to a bunch of songwriters, give them very little context, and say, “Write a song to try out for our movie.” And not only write a song to try out for a movie, we’re not going to pay you. We’re not going to credit you with any ideas for a song we may take from the song you submit. And also could you make it a finished song? And we also won’t pay you for that production. OK, thanks, bye.

**Craig:** [laughs]

**Rachel:** So it’s asking a bunch of writers to pitch them an idea, except they can ask as many people as they want. Because usually if you’re pitching on an idea you know you’re in the mix. You know when it’s like a bakeoff. You know you’re in a mix with a couple of, maybe, I don’t know, a couple of other people. I’m sure there are sometimes more.

But often they’ll just solicit songs from as many songwriters as they want. I got an insight – I had a friend working on a major motion picture and they were showing me the song submissions. And there were upwards of 15 submissions from big songwriters. And they were also not only big songwriters but also they were fully produced. And that’s the thing that’s different from submitting a spec pitch to a studio is you’re asking songwriters to not only do the work of writing a song, which is really hard, and is frankly harder than coming up with a pitch. But also you’re asking them to pay for production. To pay for a studio. To pay a producer to comp together the vocals. To pay musicians. And they’re not going to – sometimes they’ll give you a demo fee. But most times they won’t.

And it’s just like a complete devaluing of songwriters’ time. And top songwriters do this because Adam was doing this. I did a couple of these with Adam and Jack. And it’s not good for the movie. It doesn’t serve the movie because you’re asking people in a vacuum to write a song without giving them the context. You’re not giving them any say on how the lead in to the song should be, how the lead out of the song should be. It’s other-rising of music.

**John:** Yeah. So I was emailing with you and Jack about this a year ago, even more than that. And we’re talking about Adam Schlesinger. Obviously an incredibly talented songwriter, producer. Did a lot of stuff for you on Crazy Ex-Girlfriend. On Crazy Ex-Girlfriend, you know, you and Jack and Adam were writing songs, but you were all employees of Crazy Ex-Girlfriend. So you guys were covered in ways that someone who is going up for one of these demo derbies is not covered and could theoretically be spending thousands of dollars producing these demos and have nothing to show for it.

**Rachel:** Yeah.

**John:** Ugh.

**Rachel:** Exactly. And granted, sorry, I will actively be breastfeeding during this next part.

**John:** That’s awesome.

**Rachel:** If you hear sucking and or cooing sounds.

**Craig:** Those might be coming from me, though. Just because I do that. It’s around that time of day where I just start making sucking and cooing sounds. Go on.

**Rachel:** [laughs] Everyone has their process. I don’t want to – because this was important to Adam. And I don’t want to speak for Adam because the way that Adam got the gig for That Thing You Do was it was a blind demo submission. So it can be a way – I mean, he wasn’t an unknown songwriter at the time.

**Craig:** No.

**Rachel:** It can be a way for people to achieve success, but it really takes advantage of songwriter’s time and just – yeah, it represents a fundamental misunderstanding of how musicals are done because the same is not the case for theater. If you write musicals for theater you are part of the creative – I’m in this right now. I have literal points in the decision making of a musical because there’s a union called the Dramatist Guild. So the book writers can’t make changes to my songs. That is in the Dramatist Guild. I am part of dreaming up the story for this musical.

There are rights that fundamentally understand the role of songwriting in storytelling in theater that you don’t have in film and TV.

**John:** Now, Craig, talk us through why it’s different, because you’re going to explain copyright and why there’s a big difference there.

**Craig:** This is the sort of push and pull of the world that we’re in. Because on the one hand in theater everybody that’s writing is an author. You author your songs. You’re the author of those songs. You write a play, you are the playwright. That copyright belongs to you. And so you are licensing the work and therefore you are collecting royalties on that work. And if you have a show like the aforementioned Les Mis that goes on and on and on, multiple revivals and tours, even high school productions, all of it funnels money back towards the author.

In Hollywood we don’t have that. We’re not authors. We are employees. Interestingly, I think for some of these cases where you’re writing songs you still maintain your authorship, but that’s why they can kind of do this to you. Because you’re not protected by a union because you’re not an employee. So the Writers Guild has a working rule that says you can’t write spec work on demand. In other words if a studio says you need to write 30 pages in order for us to decide if we’re going to give you this job, you’re not allowed to do it. It is a violation of our contract. It’s a violation of our working rules. But that’s because we’re employees. And a union can do that.

And when you are not an employee all sorts of cool things, but more of the Wild West. And you can be abused. It’s easier weirdly to get abused I think when you’re not under the aegis of an actual employee’s union.

**John:** Yeah. So I do wonder if there are situations, like we’re talking about these movies where there are demo derbies for that, but I often hear from people who are writing songs for animation projects. Or especially like TV animation where they have to crank out these songs for a Duck Tales or something like that. And in those situations I’m not sure they actually are holding on to the copyright for their songs. And I think those are all getting subsumed by the episode itself.

I want to find some protection for folks who are doing that kind of writing. And I don’t know that we’re going to be able to do it through the WGA. But at least we can shine a spotlight on these are abuses that are happening and try to change some of the behaviors here.

Rachel, you talked about a demo fee. Would that help?

**Rachel:** Yeah, and we got it – we had to demand it on one thing that we did. That would help. I think what would help more is in an ideal world if you have to submit a song for something you wouldn’t be expected to submit the full song. What you’d be expected to submit is maybe a verse and a chorus, or just your chorus, and it’s just on one instrument. It’s just a piano vocal. It’s just a vocal guitar.

Now that does ask executives to use their imagination, which I know is a strong demand for most executives. But that would be a more reasonable demand than write a full song. And then certainly write and produce a full song. I understand that like someone pitching a song, “OK, here’s the song I’m going to write and it’s going to sound like this,” I understand that you can’t really get a sense of what that songwriting style is going to be. But there is a middle ground between like produce a fully done song and pitch us your idea for a song.

And that’s where I feel like, and I don’t know much about how these decisions are made in the Writers Guild, but if the Writers Guild stipulated, OK, you’re a songwriter, if you’re going to pitch something on spec here’s what you’re allowed to do, here’s what you’re not allowed to do. But that implies that you would have to then get into the guild as a songwriter. It seems like there should be someone protecting the writers saying here’s what you are and are not allowed to do on spec.

**John:** Yeah. Because, Craig, I’m thinking about Rachel is obviously a WGA member, if she’s a pitching a song, I mean, she is writing scenes that go with it. So, it becomes a very fine line. Is she doing spec work in turning in that spec song for a thing? It’s the assumption she would hold on to the copyright behind it, but if it’s specific to the movie that she’s doing it’s not like she has any value for that work that she did that she could use and exploit in some other way. Her copyright isn’t–

**Craig:** If it’s written down on paper, if it’s written on paper then I think there’s an argument that it’s writing. And is covered and they can’t ask for it. If it’s an mp3, if it’s an audio file, it’s a song, then it’s not on paper. It’s not writing. That’s the weird part of it. I mean, according the Writers Guild right now. At that point you’re saying again that this is a song that you would own the copyright to but you would license. And if they’re like, “Oh, no, no, we commissioned this,” then even then the Writers Guild does not I don’t believe cover lyric writing.

**Rachel:** No. Sorry, hold on, burping a baby. But what these demo derbies – first of all you sign, I think, NDAs. I couldn’t be… [baby cries]

I know, I’m very sorry.

**Craig:** Aw. Hi baby.

**John:** I think it’s the first baby on Scriptnotes. I like it.

**Craig:** Hey baby. Hey.

**Rachel:** [baby cries] OK. OK. All right. Goodbye.

**Craig:** I imagine that you just put her down and she just walked away. Because she’s actually like eight. And she just was like – and you’re like, bye, and she just cries as she walks away, unsatisfied.

**John:** Yeah. It’s a Game of Thrones/Arryn kind of situation.

**Craig:** Exactly.

**Rachel:** Bye, I’m going back to middle school. Someone came in and helped take her away–

**Craig:** Spirit her away.

**Rachel:** For the moment. So, first of all when you do these demo derbies, they own the work that you do. It’s not like you’re licensing this song. You’re writing the song for this thing. It’s not like you can then take that song and be like this is my song. You sign – my brain is foggy right now, but I believe you – well, first of all, you sign NDAs about the material they’re giving you. But you also sign something that like they own that song.

So, you are–

**Craig:** Right. It’s a work-for-hire in other words.

**Rachel:** It’s a work-for-hire that sometimes isn’t paid. Right?

**John:** [laughs] An unpaid work-for-hire.

**Rachel:** But Craig you were saying is it on paper, it’s always going to be on paper because you’re always going to have lyrics on paper.

**Craig:** But do you submit those lyrics or not?

**Rachel:** Yes. I do. Here’s another wrinkle of the way that I do my work which is I don’t just write lyrics. If I’m writing a song I script the song, because I have very specific things that I want to have happen. So I full on any song I do it’s in Final Draft and I turn in the lyrics, or they’re in Final Draft. And I do scripted elements of the song. So I absolutely–

**Craig:** That’s writing.

**Rachel:** Yeah, no, I’ve done that for numerous places.

**Craig:** Well, you should stop. [laughs]

**Rachel:** Well, so what do we do? How can–?

**Craig:** Well, I think that for starters it would be good for the Writers Guild to know that some of these businesses that are asking writers to submit songs are either requesting or are accepting script pages. Because they’re not allowed to. It is a full violation of our working rules. They’re allowed to ask for songs all they want. You can also come and paint a mural for them. But if you’re writing script pages, including action description and stuff like that, then it’s writing. And they can’t do that as a condition of employment. They’re just not allowed.

**Rachel:** I mean, that’s me just the way I work doing that. So I don’t want to speak for other writers.

**Craig:** And they should pay you.

**John:** It’s not about volunteering. They shouldn’t be accepting it.

**Craig:** What they should say is, OK, if we want this and we do we’re going to at least agree to pay you scale. It’s not that much. Believe me. It won’t change your life. But at least it covers the work under the contract that applies. So, something to think about and certainly – by the way, I find a lot of times these companies or their representatives, they don’t know either. I mean, it’s been 10 years, but I sat in a room at Paramount, this is like four regimes ago, with the Committee on the Professional Status of Screenwriters, and we were talking to all of the Paramount executives about the free rewrite issue and why it needed to stop. And one of the junior executives said, “Well, we need to get a producer pass, so how does the producer pass fit in?”

And we were like, actually we didn’t even get to say it. The person who was the president of production, very embarrassed, I had to turn to her and say, “There is no producer pass. It’s not a thing.” They just don’t know. So in this case it may be also that they just don’t know.

**John:** Yeah. So hopefully we’ve raised some awareness on this and just like we improved sex onscreen we can improve the lives of songwriters who are trying to write for the film and television industry. We can always hope.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** Craig, do you have a One Cool Thing for us?

**Craig:** I do. It is a revival of a former One Cool Thing of mine. I am obsessed as some of you know with the movie The Boys in the Band. I mean, I never saw the play. I have just not had the ability to see it performed live. But I am a big fan of the 1970 William Friedkin version of Mart Crowley’s excellent play because it is both awesome and terrible at the same time in various ways. It’s a remarkable thing and I’ve talked about it before.

There is a new Boys in the Band, the play itself has had a fascinating renaissance, where it had been kind of rejected – the history was it was on Off Broadway, then it went to Broadway. It was a big hit. They decided to make a movie. And while they were shooting the movie Stonewall happened and everything changed. And the story of Boys in the Band felt like it was out of its time, like it hadn’t kept up. And that so much of it was about the self-loathing homosexual. And nobody wanted to hear it at the time because the word at the time was pride. And it essentially got kind of pushed off into whatever the gay version of Uncle Tom is. It was just sort of like you go over there. We don’t want you anymore.

And now it’s back, which I think is great. Mark Harris who is a fantastic, I don’t know what you’d call him, critic, but like in the good version, not a reviewer.

**John:** Journalist. Yeah.

**Craig:** But a thinker about culture. Has written a really interesting piece about it contextualizing Boys in the Band as part of history, and particularly part of LGBTQ history.

So there’s a new version of Netflix, because everything is on Netflix, and what’s fascinating about it is that it is an all-gay cast. So the original, the movie was not an all-gay cast. It was mostly a gay cast, and tragically and not at all unexpectedly I think almost every single gay actor from the 1970 movie was dead by 1992 from AIDS. So it was sort of like tragic elimination of these very talented, brilliant guys. And so here comes this new version that has sort of this triumphant revival. Entirely openly gay cast of actors, including lots of actors that we all know like Zachary Quinto and Jim Parsons.

And I thought it was really well done. It was directed by Joe Mantello who is also gay. So it was like everybody everywhere was sort of like, OK, we’re going to do this with full representation. And I have to say I thought it was really, really good. But I want to single out Jim Parsons because – look, I don’t like speaking ill of the dead, but Kenneth Nelson who played the main character of Michael in the original Broadway production and in the 1970 movie, he just wasn’t good. I’m just going to say it. It’s just bizarrely over the top. He’s like in a different movie. He is over there in like Mommie Dearest land, and everybody else is like in a regular movie.

And Jim Parsons kind of reclaims that part and does it in a way that I thought was like, OK, yes, this makes sense. This is really good. I thought he was fantastic. So big thumbs up to Jim Parsons and in general to the production of The Boys in the Band on Netflix. Totally worth watching. A fascinating little time capsule from the late ‘60s.

**John:** Cool. Rachel, do you have a One Cool Thing to share with us? Anything you want to recommend to our listeners?

**Rachel:** Yeah, just in general a comedian. Demi Adejuyigbe. He is such a funny comedian and basically every year on September 21st for the past couple of years he’s done a music video online to the song Do You Remember…September, because it’s about September 21st. And this year he really topped himself. And they’re always these fundraising ventures. And he basically said if you give me enough money I’ll do another one this year. And he earned so much money this year.

So he’s doing these amazing kind of OK Go music videos that are also for a good cause. And just everything he does is so funny in general.

**John:** Agreed.

**Rachel:** Check out his stuff. And it’s Demi is his first name. And then his last name is spelled Adejuyigbe.

**John:** He’s great. And I believe he was a writer on The Good Place if I remember correctly.

**Rachel:** Yes.

**John:** He’s really, really talented. So we’ll put a link in that to the show notes. My One Cool Thing is just a phrase I heard this last week which I had never heard before which is apparently the common self-helpy kind of AA kind of phrase. But it’s “Let go or be dragged.” And it’s the idea that like if you’re holding onto something that’s pulling you into a bad place you need to let go of that thing. And it’s such an obvious idea and yet it would be so useful for so many things I could think of in my life where it’s like why am I holding onto this thing that is pulling me in such a bad way. And the proper answer is, no, you just have to let go of that thing.

And so “Let go or be dragged” is just a nice thought that I feel like I should put a stickie note on my computer here.

**Rachel:** That’s beautiful. I love that.

**John:** Yeah. But more crucially, not just a One Cool Thing, Rachel you have a book to plug. Tell us about your book.

**Rachel:** I do. Oh my god. Thank you so much for asking. It comes out November 17th which is great because we won’t be talking about anything else that’s way more important than my book.

**John:** No, 100 percent.

**Rachel:** In November. There’s like nothing else going on. It’s called I Want to Be Where the Normal People are. And it’s basically a collection of essays and sketches and comedic prose about my experience and feelings on normalcy and not fitting in.

And it starts in childhood and ends in now. And it was always going to be a kind of time capsule of part one of my life, before I had a child. And then now it is very much a time capsule of part one of my life because my child is the age of COVID, born in March. And I finished the book literally the day before I went to give birth.

So, if you feel like you don’t fit in, if you have a kid that feels like he/she/or they don’t fit in, if you want to read about what it’s like to not fit in because you wonder what that’s like because you’ve always fit in, check it out.

**John:** Excellent. And so we’ll have a link in the show notes to that so people can find that in all the bookstores everywhere. So, I’m looking forward to that.

All right. That is our show for this week. Scriptnotes is produced by Megana Rao. It was edited by Matthew Chilelli. Our outro is by Rachel and Jack Dolgen from our live show way back in 2014. Do you remember that live show Rachel?

**Rachel Bloom:** I do. Is that the one where I sang How Do I Get Famous?

**John:** Exactly. So, we’ll be playing that. If you have an outro you can send us a link to ask@johnaugust.com. That’s also the place where you can send longer questions. For short questions on Twitter, Craig is @clmazin. I am @johnaugust. Rachel, what are you on Twitter?

**Rachel:** I’m @racheldoesstuff.

**John:** Yeah. And you also are on Instagram which is where I more often see you, so follow her there.

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**Craig:** Goodbye Rachel and goodbye to your baby. And I miss you. And we’ll all see each other soon.

**Rachel:** Yes. Miss you two men.

**Craig:** Bye.

**John:** Bye.

[Bonus segment]

**Rachel:** Oh, that was so good. I’m so proud of myself.

**John:** You should be so proud of yourself.

**Rachel:** Oh, that was good.

**John:** Yeah. That brings us back to a simpler time. A simpler time. A lovely time. A Christmas show. And we first got to hear about you. It’s where I first met you. And learned about this show. Back then it was a Showtime show. It was before you had even moved to the CW. Wow. So long ago.

**Rachel:** Oh man. Oh.

**John:** So Craig was going to be here for our revival segment, and then Craig had to take off because he had urgent work stuff to deal with. So it’s just you and me talking revivals. But I love a revival and you’ve been in revivals. Let’s think about revivals and musicals and what is sort of the point of revivals. And Craig’s actual One Cool Thing was a kind of revival, The Boys in the Band, sort of taking a thing from the past and looking at it with a new lens.

Where do you come down, Rachel, in terms of the energy we spend reviving old pieces of musical theater versus creating new ones? What should that balance be?

**Rachel:** Yeah. I have sometimes have problems with revivals that really try to like – if you’re going to do a revival that really reimagines something, where it’s like – at a certain point – and I don’t want to throw any like one revival under the bus, so I’ll be as vague as I can while still remaining specific. But if you’re going to do a revival and it’s like but I really want to make it about this, it’s like well then why not just write a new show about that? Because you’re trying to take a piece that was written in the ‘40s or the ‘50s and make a point about the way that we treat gender.

And it’s like, yeah, you can do that. And that is really cool. And that’s all the context of this is how we used to think and here is how we think and isn’t that contrast cool? And that does have value and I have a ton of revivals in my head that I’ve always – I should do a revival of 42nd Street where everyone is on an acid trip. I don’t know. I’ve had ideas like that.

But at a certain point there’s a very fine line between reimagining and then like just write a new show.

**John:** Yeah. And obviously all of the Shakespeare shows had antecedents. They were based on things that beforehand. But that’s not really what we’re talking about. We’re talking about sort of like, OK, we’re going to take the book and the songs from this musical and we’re going to stage them again, either as a very faithful recreation of them. So you and I have both seen plenty of those things where they dust off an old musical and just like stage it again for two nights.

You did one with Susan Stroman where they took an old musical and staged it.

**Rachel:** I did.

**John:** And it’s sort of fun to see what those things were like because they weren’t ever filmed in a way that you should see it. So kind of the only way to experience them is to see them. But then a lot of times you watch them and you’re like, well, that’s not actually interesting. Or that’s not funny anymore. That’s just not a thing we want to see. And that’s the challenge of some of these revivals. You realize like, oh, well maybe there’s a reason why we’re not staging this one again the way we do The Sound of Music every couple of years.

**Rachel:** Yeah. I think that’s also a good point that comedy has a real shelf life. And it’s a problem because the golden age of musicals, the ‘50s through the ‘70s, a lot of things are relevant but the comedy gets more and more and more dated. And then similarly I wanted to do – I looked into directing a production of Anyone Can Whistle, this little known Sondheim show, or lesser known Sondheim show in college.

And I got access to the script. And everyone was like, “You want to do Anyone Can Whistle?” Because the music is great. And they’re like, OK, good luck. And I looked at the book and it’s a mess. It’s an absolute mess. And there are a lot of musicals that are messes, but also that is a problem especially in early musical theater where everything is serving the song so the book is almost like an afterthought.

So then it’s like, OK, well do you then do a rewrite of the book, in which case is it a revival?

**John:** Yeah. Or a complete reinvention of a thing. This whole topic was brought up, our friend Dan Jinks tweeted this last week, “Broadway geeks, what’s a musical that has really good things in it but is probably not revivable in its current form?” And it sounds like book problems are going to be one of the big issues that get in there, but also just sometimes there’s a couple of great songs. You’re like, wow, that’s just so amazing. And then you realize like, oh, there’s also a lot of stinker songs that if you were listening to the cast album you’re just like clicking past those tracks.

And then you actually have, oh, we’re going to have to sit here for four minutes and watch this thing happen onstage, that becomes a real problem.

**Rachel:** Yeah.

**John:** So what do we do? The revivals, like Anyone Can Whistle, that’s a situation where you could go to Sondheim and say like, hey, I really want to do this thing and can we really take another look at the book or how we get into this? Or do we do just a concert staging or some other way to showcase those songs without being kind of stuck with the book?

**Rachel:** Depends what your goal is. Because they’ve done concert readings of Anyone Can Whistle that I think I’m pretty sure they did a glossed over version of the book. That’s if you want to just focus on the songs and say, you know what, let’s revisit these songs. They’re so good.

If you think the piece – and I haven’t read the script of Anyone Can Whistle in quite some time at this point, but if you think, you know what, this piece does have not only amazing songs but also amazing themes, and I have some ideas about how it could be just made fantastic, but it has some problems, or some things that we need to update. And there are ways to go to the original writer or the company that controls the rights and do that. That’s another way to go.

**John:** Yeah. We were talking about the difference between movies and TV shows where it’s all work-for-hire versus something like a Broadway musical where that copyright is controlled by the original playwright, or the original songwriters, and so you are not allowed to make those changes without their permission and their blessing.

There’s many good things about that, but it also gets into situations where you can’t make a change. It seems like an obvious change that you would want to make, it’s not just incredibly misogynistic or racist or just have real troubles putting on a modern stage. Tough.

**Rachel:** Yeah. And I know someone who got dinged in college. There were some fellow students who put on a production of Company but with an all-male cast. They wanted to make it about gay relationships. But they also decided to set it now, rather than setting it in the early ‘70s. So Another Hundred People became this like club song, which is actually quite interesting. But they changed certain things. They said like “I’ll text you.” They changed certain things to be updated with their revival. And R&H who owns the rights, Rogers and Hammerstein Company, found out and they had to write a personal apology letter to Stephen Sondheim.

**John:** Oof. But in some ways it’s kind of fun to write a personal apology letter to Stephen Sondheim because you’re like, ah, I got to write to Stephen Sondheim.

**Rachel:** That is cute. You’re right.

**John:** With all the trouble I created. With Big Fish, you know, the musical, there have been certain changes that we’re kind of allowing just because the show gets performed so often in kind of conservative campuses. Like Utah. Utah High School, they just love it. But there will be certain lyrics that they don’t want to say.

One of the things we’re sort of wrestling with is they try to have the Josephine character not be pregnant at her wedding, and it’s like, well, that’s actually kind of a crucial plot point. And yet if that’s the obstacle between you staging the thing and not staging the thing, I guess we’re just going to kind of live with it. Because we’d much rather you see all the themes and all of the joyful things of Big Fish than for us to get hung up on sort of how pregnant Josephine is at this wedding.

**Rachel:** Yeah. It’s all context of what are you changing, why are you changing. What’s the purpose of you reimagining? I remember hearing about a production of South Pacific done by the director Anne Bogart a while back that all took place in a mental institution. The patients were doing South Pacific as a therapeutic exercise. And I believe they got in trouble with R&H about it.

So it just depends on a lot of factors, but I think it all comes down to why. I think if there’s a compelling like why are doing this, why now. It’s also like contextual. Because there was about to be this Music Man revival with Hugh Jackman and Sutton Foster. I don’t think they were going to make many changes. And the question is like why now. Because it’s Hugh Jackman and Sutton Foster. And that’s going to be awesome. And they’re perfect for those roles and I want to see that. And I want to see The Music Man just done on stage again. And that sounds so fun.

**John:** It’s escapism. There’s always a role for escapism in these shows as well. You’re working on The Nanny right now. I’m sure you will tackle some meaningful social issues in The Nanny, but that is a piece of escapist entertainment that I cannot wait to see.

**Rachel:** Yes. And I signed onto that project because it’s a part of my childhood and because for me there is a – it’s a nostalgic escapism that also is part of my identify because it’s about a loud, brassy, outspoken Jewish lady. And so we are going to come at some things with a more contemporary lens. But especially whenever Broadway comes back, should this go to Broadway, of the why now, people are going to need escapism, especially like back to a time before a lot of complicated things happened. Let’s just say a time pre-9/11 to say the least.

**John:** That would be lovely.

**Rachel:** And I took a musical theater writing class where they walked us through why are you making something, a musical, when you’re adapting something that wasn’t a musical. And the fundamental thing is can you find a new element in the piece or can you make the piece better by making it a musical.

**John:** Yup.

**Rachel:** And I came to the conclusion with that that yes. But sometimes that’s not the case. If you have a movie out there that already has this 90-minute/two-hour narrative that is perfect, that I find less compelling to make into musicals.

**John:** Because then you’re trying to wedge some things in there and either you’re going to have to musicalize some things that were just spoken before, which is awkward, or you’re going to have to – you’re always going to be losing some things by putting the songs in. And in putting the songs in are you really transforming it in a way that’s better for everyone to be watching?

**Rachel:** Right.

**John:** Rachel, good luck with all and it’s so good to talk with you again.

**Rachel:** It’s so good to talk with you, too.

**John:** Cool. Bye.

 

Links:

* [The Hollywood Commission](https://www.hollywoodcommission.org/)
* [Anita Hill’s Commission Launching Industry-Wide Platform to Report Sexual Harassment in Hollywood](https://variety.com/2020/biz/news/anita-hill-sexual-harassment-survey-hollywood-entertainment-industry-1234786141/)
* [WGA West Career Longevity Committee Demands “Inclusion And Equity” For Older Writers](https://deadline.com/2020/09/wga-west-career-longevity-committee-demands-inclusion-and-equity-for-older-writers-1234588890/)
* [List of Academy Award for Best Director winners by age](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_Academy_Award_for_Best_Director_winners_by_age)
* [Ages of Top Grossing Screenwriters](https://stephenfollows.com/how-old-are-hollywood-screenwriters/) and [Directors](https://stephenfollows.com/how-old-are-hollywood-directors/)
* [Boys in the Band on Netflix](https://www.netflix.com/watch/81000365?source=35)
* [Follow comedian Demi Adejuyigbe on Twitter](https://twitter.com/electrolemon)
* [Let Go or Be Dragged](https://powerofted.com/let-go-or-be-dragged-3/)
* [Get a Scriptnotes T-shirt!](https://cottonbureau.com/people/scriptnotes-podcast)
* [Rachel Bloom](https://twitter.com/Racheldoesstuff) on Twitter
* [John August](https://twitter.com/johnaugust) on Twitter
* [Craig Mazin](https://twitter.com/clmazin) on Twitter
* [John on Instagram](https://www.instagram.com/johnaugust/?hl=en)
* [Outro](http://johnaugust.com/2013/scriptnotes-the-outros) by Rachel Bloom and Jack Dolgen ([send us yours!](http://johnaugust.com/2014/outros-needed))
* Scriptnotes is produced by Megana Rao and edited by Matthew Chilelli.

Email us at ask@johnaugust.com

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Sing What You Can’t Say

Episode - 471

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October 6, 2020 Scriptnotes, Transcribed

John and Craig welcome back Rachel Bloom (co-creator and star of Crazy Ex-Girlfriend) to talk about songwriting–both the creative process and the business of writing songs for film and television.

We also discuss a new report about sexual harassment in Hollywood and ageism in the industry.

Finally, in our bonus segment for premium members, John and Rachel talk about revivals.

Links:

* [The Hollywood Commission](https://www.hollywoodcommission.org/)
* [Anita Hill’s Commission Launching Industry-Wide Platform to Report Sexual Harassment in Hollywood](https://variety.com/2020/biz/news/anita-hill-sexual-harassment-survey-hollywood-entertainment-industry-1234786141/)
* [WGA West Career Longevity Committee Demands “Inclusion And Equity” For Older Writers](https://deadline.com/2020/09/wga-west-career-longevity-committee-demands-inclusion-and-equity-for-older-writers-1234588890/)
* [List of Academy Award for Best Director winners by age](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_Academy_Award_for_Best_Director_winners_by_age)
* [Ages of Top Grossing Screenwriters](https://stephenfollows.com/how-old-are-hollywood-screenwriters/) and [Directors](https://stephenfollows.com/how-old-are-hollywood-directors/)
* [Boys in the Band on Netflix](https://www.netflix.com/watch/81000365?source=35)
* [Follow comedian Demi Adejuyigbe on Twitter](https://twitter.com/electrolemon)
* [Let Go or Be Dragged](https://powerofted.com/let-go-or-be-dragged-3/)
* [Get a Scriptnotes T-shirt!](https://cottonbureau.com/people/scriptnotes-podcast)
* [Rachel Bloom](https://twitter.com/Racheldoesstuff) on Twitter
* [John August](https://twitter.com/johnaugust) on Twitter
* [Craig Mazin](https://twitter.com/clmazin) on Twitter
* [John on Instagram](https://www.instagram.com/johnaugust/?hl=en)
* [Outro](http://johnaugust.com/2013/scriptnotes-the-outros) by Rachel Bloom and Jack Dolgen ([send us yours!](http://johnaugust.com/2014/outros-needed))
* Scriptnotes is produced by Megana Rao and edited by Matthew Chilelli.

Email us at ask@johnaugust.com

You can download the episode [here](http://traffic.libsyn.com/scriptnotes/471standard.mp3).

**UPDATE 10-8-2020** The transcript for this episode can now be found [here](https://johnaugust.com/2020/scriptnotes-episode-471-sing-what-you-cant-say-transcript).

Scriptnotes, Episode 470: Dual Dialogue, Transcript

October 5, 2020 Scriptnotes Transcript

The original post for this episode can now be found [here](https://johnaugust.com/2020/470-dual-dialogue).

**John August:** Hello and welcome. My name is John August.

**Craig Mazin:** Craig Mazin is my name.

**John:** And this is Episode 470 of Scriptnotes, a podcast about screenwriting and things that are interesting to screenwriters. Today on the show we’ll look at what happens when two or more characters–

**Craig:** Well, the thing is if you have multiple bits of dialogue then you need to have people–

**John:** — talking at once, the best ways for writers to think about it. And–

**Craig:** — say them simultaneously. But how do you do that–

**John:** — portray it on the page.

**Craig:** — when they’re – oh.

**John:** Plus lots of follow up on delayed movies, mergers, assistant pay, and more. And in our bonus segment for Premium members Craig and I will discuss Halloween.

**Craig:** Ooh, Halloween. I love it.

**John:** Yeah. Do you love Halloween?

**Craig:** I do.

**John:** I don’t love Halloween. So we’ll get into that.

**Craig:** Well, I get why. I know why. [laughs]

**John:** [laughs] You’ll have theories.

**Craig:** Oh yeah.

**John:** All right. So lots of stuff in the news. First off, almost all the movies are delayed or the release dates changed. So we haven’t talked about this for a while but there was a pandemic. I guess there still is a pandemic.

**Craig:** So they say.

**John:** So they say. Some movie theaters are kind of opened. Most movie theaters aren’t really open. Tenet released in the US, sort of. Other movies have gone straight to video.

**Craig:** Yup.

**John:** We’ll put a link in the show notes to an article that looks at some of the big release date changes, but essentially coming through the end of this year all of the Marvel movies got pushed back. Some of the Disney movies are coming out. Some of them are not coming out. Something like Free Guys, December 11. Dune, of course, is December 18. Wonder Woman is December 25.

**Craig:** I don’t think they are. I’ve got to be honest with you. I don’t think they are.

**John:** I don’t know if they are either. I was talking to some people involved with these movies and they said, “Yeah, I think it’s going to come out? Maybe it’s going to be out for like two weeks and—“

**Craig:** I would be shocked. Shocked.

**John:** I’d be surprised, too.

**Craig:** I think that this is going to be a while with these. If they don’t bite the bullet and just say, “We’re going to be charging you $30 to watch this at home,” then they have to wait. They just have to wait. Tenet was the movie that they all watched happen. And then they all looked at each other and said, “Ooh, no, no. We don’t want that.”

I mean, these things are economic propositions that have been well worked out with various formulae. A little bit like gambling where they’ve got it down to somewhat of a science, at least in certain ways. And not having a full theatrical release in the United States is simply untenable if you’re going to attempt to make your money back on some of these big bets. And they are pretty much all really big bets.

**John:** So I think the first question will be Pixar has some movies, Soul and the James Bond movie No Time to Die. Both of them are slated for November 20.

**Craig:** No way.

**John:** Yeah. That will be the first times we see. I mean, it’s not just the pandemic. It’s also it’s coming out of this election. I just don’t have a great sense for what America is going to be like at the end of November.

**Craig:** Normally if the movie theaters are open America is like I’m going to the movies. That’s normally what we’re like. But we’re not. We’re not going to be going to the movies on November 20. I don’t believe that. Unless something remarkable happens. It just doesn’t seem like it makes any sense. And the biggest moviemaking complexes are in the largest population centers. Those are the places that seemingly are most rigid and properly so about following the rules of social distancing. I just don’t see it happening. But, I mean, look, you can keep sliding things around on a calendar all you want. The nice thing is they don’t have to mail prints out anywhere anymore. It’s all beamed in electronically.

**John:** That’s true.

**Craig:** But, nah, and I mean, and the marketing campaigns are flexible as well. So, no, I don’t think so. I would be blown away if we were watching a James Bond movie on November 20.

**John:** Yeah. And I don’t want to sound callous towards movie theaters. Movie theaters are a crucial piece of our infrastructure and they’ve just been completely hosed by what’s happened. And so I want theatrical movies to succeed. I want these things to be possible. I just don’t know that it is possible now.

And just using myself as a barometer, I’m a person who really likes to go to the movies and sees things opening weekend. But if I don’t feel safe going to movie theaters here, pretty well run movie theaters here, I just don’t see it being profitable for everybody.

**Craig:** No. The movie theaters are probably facing an extinction event in terms of the way it has been to this point. The removal of the consent decree and the pandemic have combined to – I don’t know how a large independent theater chain survives this. I really don’t. Maybe they have secret plans that are somehow opaque to me. But it does seem like the large media companies in the United States are sitting back waiting to see what happens with the pandemic ending and waiting to see how attendance works after that, at which point they will swoop in and buy these things at a cheap cost as distressed properties.

**John:** Very, very possible. I mentioned the election, Craig, what is your voting plan?

**Craig:** My voting plan is to receive my ballot in the mail. Fill the ballot out. And then I believe I’m going to be dropping it into a ballot drop box. That’s the last bit of research I have to do is see where that is. I assume it’s going to be at my post office. But it might be elsewhere. I will find out where that is. I will go to it and put my ballot into it. And I will do that on the day I get my ballot.

**John:** That is essentially my plan as well. I actually already got my ballot because the county of Los Angeles still thinks I live in France. And so they sent me this ballot early so it can get all the way to France. So I actually got my ballot. If it becomes a question of whether this is going to be problematic for me to turn it in early because they think I live in France then I will take this to one of the early voting centers and actually vote there as soon as I can do that.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** So that’s the alternative. That’s what I did at the 2018 elections.

**Craig:** Got it.

**John:** So either way I will be voting as soon as I possibly can vote, just because you never know.

**Craig:** Well, I have always been a vote in person guy because I like the experience of voting in person.

**John:** I do, too.

**Craig:** I remember as a kid going into the voting booth with my dad. Back in the day, I don’t know if it was like this where you were in gorgeous Colorado, but in glum Staten Island what we would do is we would go to – it was actually my elementary school’s gymnasium and they had set up these little booths with this sliding curtain. And there was a machine in front of you. To me as a small child the machine seemed enormous. I suspect today it’s not. And it had levers. And you would flip the levers. Clack, clack, clack, clack, clack, clack, clack, clack, clack, clack. You make all your choices and then you would pull this big lever at the bottom from left to right and it would go…and it would register your vote somehow using, I don’t know, some ancient Babbage machine.

And then you would open the curtain and exit. And I just remember thinking that this was very high tech and very exciting.

**John:** Absolutely. So I remember my mom doing that once. And at some very early point voting in Colorado moved to the more sort of freestanding little desk kind of things where you’re poking holes and things, which aren’t nearly as much fun for a kid to see.

**Craig:** No. No. So in California we have the ink dot system, or at least we did, which I thought actually worked very well. You stick your thing in the thing and you flip the pages and you push down. The system now is more automated. It’s a little odd. When I voted in 2018 it was a little strange in that you tap the things on the screen and the thing comes out and then you have to stick the thing back in and then it comes back out. I guess for you to check and make sure.

Anyway, I’m filling my thing out at home. Bring it in. Let’s do this.

**John:** I’m going to fill my thing at home and make sure it gets in early.

**Craig:** Yes.

**John:** But voting day is still a priority this year and sort of every year. Our friends Beth and Travis sort of spearheaded a movement to sort of get the WGA to say, “Hey, shouldn’t voting day be a paid day off for our members?”

**Craig:** Yes. 100 percent. So Beth Schacter worked in television for a long time. She’s currently an EP on Billions. And Travis Donnelly is one of our re-elected, freshly re-elected, directors on the board at the WGA. And they are both absolutely correct. This is something that we do need to encourage. The WGA cannot force showrunners to say, “Go ahead everybody, take the day to vote if you need to.” But we should be encouraging it strongly. And that means that the showrunners then have to turn around to the companies and say, “FYI, I’m doing this, and we’re not going to not pay people and that’s the way it is.”

It is incredibly important. And until we have a national holiday for voting this is going to be something we need to do. So, it’s a great idea. And we should encourage – the WGA should be doing this officially, encouraging the people running shows. And then you and I should just keep doing it and talking to our friends and leading by example in saying let people go vote.

**John:** Agreed. And hopefully WGA saying this and encouraging this will get other unions to be thinking about this. Hopefully this industry can be thinking about this way and other unions down the road can be thinking.

**Craig:** The other unions do not listen to us. And we don’t talk to them, which we know. However, we can take the lead on this.

**John:** However, they do draft off of things we get. So that is a useful thing.

**Craig:** Sometimes they do. It’s true.

**John:** Yeah. I mean, there were no residuals until the WGA got residuals.

**Craig:** That was back in the ‘50s. That is true. That is true. Did you see the latest pandemic – there was this big agreement between the companies and the unions about how to proceed in terms of managing COVID and testing on sets. And again everybody involved accept the WGA. Do not know why. But you know what? That’s something the new board can figure out.

**John:** Yes. So let’s talk about our new board. The WGA elections were held. The results were that all the incumbents were re-elected plus Eric Haywood. So congratulations to the incumbents and to Eric.

**Craig:** Meet the new board. Same as the old board.

**John:** Obviously we’ll put a link in the show notes to the results. I know and work with all these people. I have nothing bad to say about any of them. You have bad things to say about Patric Verrone.

**Craig:** Nothing but bad. Nothing.

**John:** There was a big cliff between Patric Verrone and the next vote-getter after that. So it wasn’t even a close, tight election.

**Craig:** No, no. Patric Verrone happily inhabiting that eighth slot every two years. That’s where he lives. So, I was bummed out. I was bummed out because Daniel Kunka who was the one feature writer running did not make it in. I don’t think any of these people are feature writers. So, Betsy Thomas, Deric Hughes, Ashley Gable, Patti Carr, David Slack, Eric Haywood, Travis Donnelly, Patric Verrone. TV, TV, TV, TV, TV, TV, TV, TV, TV.

**John:** Mm-hmm.

**Craig:** And this is not tenable. It’s just not going to work. And I don’t know what to do about it because the membership is skewed. So we have a large and completely unrepresented minority in our union. And that’s just a recipe for disaster. I don’t know how this is going to continue like this.

**John:** OK. So, as a screenwriter who was just on the board pretty recently. It’s not that we have no representation. Michele Mulroney is a feature writer. Dante Harper is a feature writer. It would be awesome to have more feature writers on there. That’s why were both pushing for Daniel Kunka to be a representative of that.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** Having talked to all the people who are currently on there, I know they are well-versed in feature issues. And I know it is important to them. It is not affecting them directly the way it would affect a feature writer. So, let us just remind the people who are elected there some things that are super, super important for them to understand about feature issues.

Free work abuses is a thing that feature writers encounter that TV writers don’t encounter to nearly the same degree, which is basically being held on a draft and turning it in, basically not being paid because they keep pushing more and more stuff for you to do. And so you are working endlessly on a “draft” whereas a TV writer would have turned a thing in because they’re more on a weekly basis. That is a thing that is so specific to feature writers.

**Craig:** Yeah. I mean, the problem that came out of mini rooms and the stretching of time where writers were getting paid the same amount in television for more and more time of work. The thing that made them crazy and led us to strike threat a couple of times. That’s been the state of affairs, times ten, for feature writers forever. So, if TV writers could just look at it that way. If they could just understand how much worse feature writers have had it in that area that they found so offensive for so long. If the 17 out of 19 people in board meetings could internalize that it would be enormously valuable for the thousands of feature writers that are in this union.

**John:** Yeah. Other things that are evergreen issues for feature writers is late pay. Basically you turn in your draft and it’s late coming. I will say there has been progress on this. Since the time I was on the board there would be more progress now that invoices and contracts are coming through to the guild. There’s already been work on this thing. It has to continue.

Teams. There are teams in TV. There are teams in feature. Teams in features, they’re screwed. You’re splitting a salary between two people. It makes it harder for everybody. So the issues that teams face are only magnified by the other problems in features.

And finally I would just want everyone to be mindful of the very definition of what is a feature film is in question. So if you’re writing a feature for a Disney+ or one of the other streamers let’s make sure we are using the terms of a theatrical feature and not getting dragged down to TV movie of the week. And we just have to be so vigilant that we are really treating these pieces of 110 minute entertainment that feels like a feature film that we’re paying these writers like they are writing feature films because that’s what they are.

**Craig:** Yeah. This is not unrelated to our discussion of a few minutes ago, the fate of theaters. If theaters eventually go away there are still movies. It’s just how we watch them. We don’t necessarily conceive of a massive difference at home. But the contract that we have with the companies dates back to the early days of television and the early days of theatrical exhibition. And that’s what it solidified into. Our contract is ancient. It is old and it is full of archaic language. None of which contemplated the Internet much less streaming and the blurring of features on big or little screens.

So all of that needs to be considered. But it can only be considered if it is a priority. And that means, again, that out of the 19 people in that room you have 16 board members and three officers. Of those 19 people, even though only two of them work in features all of them need to put features first. I don’t know how else to say it. Because all we’ve done is put television first and exclusively put television first for well over a decade. And I’m just going to keep banging this drum. I’m going to be – I’ll be that militant.

**John:** Be that militant. Several of the people I know who are on the board are also starting to do feature work. And I’ve had individual conversations with them about that. So I think as silos get broken down many of these writers will be more aware of what those issues are. It’s also the point in every one of these conversations where I also remind people that we have people who work in comedy and variety and they have it even worse than feature writers do. So, being mindful of those writers also facing challenges.

**Craig:** Sure. They will have to find their own Craig Mazin to bang that drum. I have one drum. One.

**John:** One drum. And he beats it loud.

**Craig:** That’s right.

**John:** Let’s talk about Quibi. So Quibi–

**Craig:** Aw.

**John:** Aw, Quibi. Quibi has short little videos for your phone. So, it won two Emmys this last week. Congratulations Quibi.

**Craig:** Oh. That’s pretty cool. I know that–

**John:** Yeah. It’s won more Emmys than I have. Fewer than Craig.

**Craig:** [laughs] No, Quibi has tied me for Emmys. Kaitlin Olson was nominated for an Emmy for her work on Quibi. I don’t know if she won or not. Was she one of the ones who won? I hope she was.

**John:** I don’t know. I didn’t see who actually won.

**Craig:** I’ll have to look it up.

**John:** So Quibi this last week engaged JPMorgan Chase to help the company review a range of strategic options. I’ll put a link in the show notes to the LA Times article about it. But let’s just talk about Quibi because we didn’t really talk about it when it launched. I had a conversation with Jeffrey Katzenberg, I don’t know, two years ago and there was a show I was going to do with Doug Liman and we just couldn’t make it work out financially or logistically.

**Craig:** At the Quib?

**John:** At the Quib. And I will say that the initial pitch I got from Jeffrey was kind of what the show ended up being and the problems that I sort of heard in the pitch became the real problems that were out there is that while it’s great in theory to have, oh, they’re videos that you watch on your phone, sort of like how you can watch YouTube on your phone. It wasn’t fundamentally compelling because those weren’t the kinds of things I wanted to watch on my phone. I wanted to watch things on my TV and I couldn’t watch things on my TV. I also couldn’t share anything that I thought was great about a show on clips on Twitter or Instagram. It couldn’t go viral because it was all locked down. There were fundamental things that were problematic about it.

**Craig:** Yeah. I mean, I have never understood it. I may be the only writer in America who has not gone in and met with people at Quibi and pitched anything to Quibi. I never understood it. To me, the concept itself sounded like an old person’s thrilling idea of how the Internet could or should work. But we have Quibi. It’s called YouTube. That’s how Quibi functions. Right? If you want short videos to watch on your phone, there’s YouTube.

But what people generally never wanted on YouTube were little mini-series that just played on YouTube. They just didn’t want that. That wasn’t a thing. They didn’t mind it on like a big laptop screen, but like on your phone? Nobody wanted that. And there’s been people who have trying that crap for a decade. It’s not what people want in that format. They just don’t.

**John:** So I’m going to take the position that Quibi in the end was a good thing in that it paid a lot of people a lot of money to make content.

**Craig:** Yup.

**John:** Which is good. It increased employment. It got people to experiment and do new things. So even if it wasn’t a financial success for this company it basically took a bunch of stock market investor money and gave it to writers and creators and actors and other folks. And maybe that’s good.

**Craig:** Well, it gave the money to an executive who then gave it to a lot of writers and actors and folks. And if there’s a lesson here for the money people maybe it’s this. The guy who is famous for writing The Idea is Everything, Jeffrey Katzenberg, is not the guy who comes up with the ideas. He’s just the guy pointing at the concept of an idea and saying isn’t that important. Meaning what Jeffrey Katzenberg was famous for in the ‘90s was writing a memo saying, “Writers are everything. But let’s not pay them well. And also I’ll be in charge.”

Jeffrey Katzenberg, apologies to Mr. Katzenberg, doesn’t write anything. Doesn’t create anything. His big idea was to pay other people to have ideas. You don’t need him for that. What you need are people who come up with big ideas. Go to them. Go to them. You want them to be managed by somebody? I don’t know, hire four million mid-level managers for the same price of one Katzenberg. And his partner was Meg Whitman. She’s the Facebook lady, right?

**John:** Wasn’t she PayPal?

**Craig:** Oh, she was PayPal. She was PayPal and then she also ran for the governor of California at some point. Anyway, who needs them? They don’t do anything. They don’t do anything. I wish to god this capital would understand that. But I think sometimes the people who have billions of dollars only talk to other people that are like them. Oh, well Jeffrey Katzenberg is sort of like us. He’s an executive. And he talks in executive speak. Blech.

They don’t do anything. They don’t. Why?

**John:** There’s a struggle of disintermediation. So basically you’re objecting to the fact that people are giving money to Quibi who is then giving it to the people to actually make the things. And it’s like you should just give the money to the people who make the things. But someone has to build the distribution platform. So Quibi was trying to be that distribution platform the same way a Netflix is. The same way an HBO Max is.

It goes back to our discussion of theaters. You want to own the place where people see the thing because that is ultimately useful and powerful in your gatekeeper function. But I don’t know that it makes sense to – the same way that you don’t see a lot of tech money going into “we’re going to revolutionize movie theaters.” Or you see MoviePass trying to do that and it’s like well that’s a bad idea. Quibi is in many ways the MoviePass of video.

**Craig:** I think it is. And I don’t want to imply that there is no place for people that aren’t writers to run things in Hollywood, because there is. It’s just that most of the people that I work with are employed by a large corporation and their function is their utility in working with writers and filmmakers and directors and actors. They are good at it. So that’s why – at least most of them are good at it that I work with. And so that’s why they’re there.

But when you elevate a noncreative person to a kind of creative guru position then you are asking for trouble. Every time they do it. The Japanese via Sony truly believed that Guber and Peters they were gods of some kind. They knew something. They had cracked the code. And so if you’ve never read Hit and Run, which is a fantastic book about Sony’s purchase of Columbia Pictures you should. It’s amazing. And it really is just a story of how they got fooled by two guys who basically were just, you know, guys. One of whom may not even be literate. I mean, so I’ve heard. I’m not saying that in any actionable way. I’ve just heard that. It’s probably not true.

So this happens. Any time they escalate people like Katzenberg. And I have nothing against Jeffrey Katzenberg.

**John:** No. I think Katzenberg is very smart. And he deserves credit for the many things he has accomplished over the years.

**Craig:** Years.

**John:** And also congratulations you built a giant company–

**Craig:** Well, no. Now that one I’ve got to quibble – I’ve got to Quibi with.

**John:** You’ve got to quibble with Quibi?

**Craig:** A lot of people invested in that and are going to lose their shirts. And while the people–

**John:** I don’t think anyone is going to lose their shirts. I think it was money that was looking for a home.

**Craig:** Well, sure. But some homes are better than others. And these institutional investors, they themselves obviously are insulated from these losses because they’re fat cats. But they’re playing around with other people’s money. And those people ultimately get hurt. So anytime a business crashes of this scale, $2 billion, it’s bad.

**John:** And to stipulate it hasn’t crashed to – you know, $1.75 billion. It hasn’t crashed to nothing. It’s really hard to see how much it’s worth.

**Craig:** And on its way.

**John:** And who to sell it to. One of the interesting things about the Quibi business model which from the initial pitch is that the creators actually get their content back. And so after like seven years it goes back but they can also repackage it after it like two years, which does seem to be a tacit acknowledgment of like it sort of sucks to be working for somebody and have them own your thing for perpetuity.

Like I’m writing this movie for Netflix right now and it’s just it’s only going to be on Netflix. That’s all it’s ever going to be on. If Netflix goes away it gets sold off to somebody at some point.

**Craig:** Yeah. Somebody buys it.

**John:** It is locked away in ways that are frustrating for a filmmaker. So, Quibi was trying to acknowledge that.

**Craig:** Quibi was definitely spending money like a drunken sailor. And that’s the Netflix factor. This is why – I can imagine that pitch of just the only way to compete with Netflix is to out-Netflix Netflix. They’re a drunken sailor. We need to be an even more drunken sailor. And this is all in the short term good for folks who are receiving money for writing. In the long term it’s not good if it destabilizes because of eventually this all comes crashing down. Quibi has come crashing down way faster than I thought it would.

I’m confused by their insistence that this is related to the pandemic. The pandemic seems like it would be a gift from god for Quibi. But I don’t know.

**John:** Yeah. I think they built a user story experience where it was like you’re watching it on the train as you’re headed to work. That’s the ideal use case for it.

**Craig:** No.

**John:** But honestly that’s so New York centric.

**Craig:** No.

**John:** It’s such a view of one way that people live their lives.

**Craig:** Also, I’m sorry, but that’s not what people – in New York if you manage the catch the working wifi in between stations on the subway, yeah, you’re listening to music or you’re playing a game or you’re texting. You’re not watching a Quibi. For god’s sake.

**John:** Yeah. No. One place we can read all of the useful insight and criticism of this is in the trades.

**Craig:** Oh.

**John:** And so the trades are–

**Craig:** You mean the trade? [laughs]

**John:** Exactly. The trades are what we call – originally they were printed newspapers, but Hollywood Reporter, Variety, Deadline. They are the different places that report on our industry. And they’re now all essentially one company. They’re all one trade. So we will link to the Deadline piece on what happened. But essentially through joint ventures they’ve all basically become one thing.

Everything we think of being separate entities are basically one company.

**Craig:** Yes. And one of those companies is MRC which produces content in Hollywood.

**John:** Yeah. Funny that.

**Craig:** So you have a studio, essentially a studio, a financing arm of a studio that is the part owner of all of the major publications analyzing the entertainment industry. And that includes Rolling Stone, the Hollywood Reporter, Variety, Billboard, Vibe, and Music Business Worldwide. That’s all of them. That’s all of them. So, you know, you and I growing up out here in the ‘90s as young screenwriters we knew that there was Coke and Pepsi. There was Variety and there was the Hollywood Reporter. And I remember being astonished at how much they cost. Because back in those days, because it was a bit of a kind of duopoly to get Variety delivered to your office every day, Daily Variety, you had to pay some insane yearly subscription at that time. It was like a thousand dollars. I’m like, what, this is insane.

And now apparently Variety is free as far as I can tell to everybody in the world. And Deadline disrupted everything. And now it’s just all smashed together into one thing. And what happens now–

**John:** And so I don’t know what happens now. So, I mean, it’s worth noting that Deadline was actually – Nikki Finke drove me crazy, but Nikki Finke created Deadline as a separate independent site that was just journalism about the actual industry and became incredibly influential because it was actually just journalism about the industry. And it was gossipy and all the other things we can sort of throw at it, but it was outside the norm. So it does feel like there’s a potential for an outside disruptor to come in here and make the new version of Deadline that is actually independent. So that’s a possible outcome of this.

But I want to talk about the MRC of it all. So MRC is a company that is also tied up with the agencies and sort of the affiliated productions of the agencies in complicated ways. But they make actual TV shows and features. So, Ozark, The Great, The Outsider, The Golden Globe Awards, Fire Fraud, which I think it’s great that they were the people behind that.

**Craig:** Knives Out.

**John:** The Billboard Music Awards. American Music Awards. Knives Out. Baby Driver.

**Craig:** Yup.

**John:** So it’s just so complicated to be the trades who are supposed to be reporting on an industry that you actually are making the things you’re reporting on.

**Craig:** It is. And good journalists will often, you know, encounter this because of these multinational conglomerates. You’re always touching on something. And so they’ll say, “Full disclosure, this publication is owned by the same parent company as blah-blah-blah.” And so you say that out loud and they will say, OK, that they will have independence, which is fine. And I believe them to an extent because they know that if they don’t have independence then the property they just bought will become worthless. Because it will be pointed out and it will be skewered and devalued.

But what is not good is that there is the potential for – it just seems like an obvious potential for consolidation here. So you buy all this stuff and then you sit there and you go, so, um, we have somebody that does the same job at Variety as this other person at Hollywood Reporter. Why don’t we just fire one of them? And actually why don’t we just fire half of these people and just make one thing called the Variety Reporter. And then people will lose their jobs and also you narrow the diversity of voices.

**John:** It’s true.

**Craig:** That’s what worries me.

**John:** It’s the problem of any consolidation and having monopolies to control, or at least an oligopoly. It’s not even an oligopoly anymore. It’s just basically a monopoly. And particularly when it comes to, you know, creative expression and to journalism to only have one source of truth is very bad.

**Craig:** It’s not good. Even about something as frivolous as what Hollywood is doing. You know, I got to say I’ve gone full Bernie Bro on this episode. I’m just like swinging at corporations, Jeffrey Katzenberg for no good reason at all. I don’t even know him. Just throwing bizarre bunches in a wild podcast style. It’s been enjoyable.

**John:** That’s what we do.

**Craig:** Yeah. It’s been enjoyable.

**John:** One of the wild swings we were throwing–

**Craig:** Segue man.

**John:** — months and months ago was about assistant pay.

**Craig:** Oh yeah.

**John:** This last week UTA raised assistant pay across the board.

**Craig:** Excellent.

**John:** Minimum is $22 an hour. Goes to $24 an hour for agency assistants and the agent training program gets up to $26 per hour. This is good. This is progress. And so I just wanted to call out UTA for doing good work here.

**Craig:** That is good.

**John:** And also doing it in a time which is admittedly very difficult for agents and for the industry. It’s hard to say like everything is struggling and so we’re actually going to raise pay. It feels like the right choice and a difficult choice.

**Craig:** Yeah. I agree. And this looks to me I think the new golden standard here. I think that this is better than the Verve or CAA commitment.

**John:** This does feel better. And so the Verve and CAA had other things built in there in terms of like quality of life stuff, but–

**Craig:** Got it.

**John:** But money is money. So let’s focus on that.

**Craig:** Money is money. So this is very good. And I do agree with you that this is a challenging time for the agencies, of course. But if the people at the highest level of these agencies who make an insane amount of money are willing to forgo a little bit of their enormous lucre, because if you say to, you know, whoever – who owns UTA? Jeremy Zimmer or something? I don’t know who owns it, like how that works.

**John:** They’re privately held. They have outside investors. But they’re privately held.

**Craig:** Right. But whoever the biggest shot is there, if you say to that guy, oh, by the way, just because for reasons you’re not going to get paid anything this year. They’ll be fine. They’ll be totally fine. So, like it’s good to maybe hit pause on the money pipe – I’m Bernie Bro’ing again. And give the people who are holding your business up, you know, a chance to survive and flourish. Ooh, I’m telling you, man. I am just swinging the flaming sword of the workers of the world today.

**John:** All right. Let’s do a little bit of follow up here. This is Ezra. He writes in about How Would This Be a Movie.

Ezra: Hi John and Craig. This is a follow up to a listener email from Episode 465 on using the Battle of Blair Mountain on your How Would This Be a Movie segment. My wife and I spent two physically and emotionally taxing years trying to have our first child. After a successful round of IVF we had our first in 2017. This past February we had our second, also through IVF. Science. It works.

As a way to do with all of the feelings I accumulated over that time I began working on a pilot script for a show called Trying, a half-hour comedy about a couple with fertility problems. I thought this was my Chernobyl, but sadly it was my Winds of War. I was a new dad with a time-consuming day job, whilst still working to finish it in March 2020 when AppleTV announced Trying, a half-hour comedy about a couple with fertility problems.

I could get into the differences between the ideas, for instance they’re not actually trying anymore, they’re seeking to adopt. But the underlying lesson remains. I dragged my feet and someone else who had a similar and probably better idea got it made. Can’t say you all didn’t warn me.

So to my fellow listener, it’s not only that other people have the same general idea as you. They can have literally the same idea as you down to the title. For an aspiring writer the struggle of infertility could not have been any more real than to watch someone else get to have the little writing baby I imagined for myself.

This is all to say that I agree very strongly with both of you that no one has a 100 percent claim on an idea or concept, putting aside all that legal stuff about owning ideas. If you had the thought someone else has had it as well. In the best case you are in a race to see who can get theirs over the finish line first. I dragged and my heels and now I need to find another darling to work on. It’s OK. Grappling with infertility gave me a much more nuanced perspective on other people’s successes. Congrats Andy Walton. And what kind of let downs I am actually capable of absorbing.

**Craig:** Wow. Ezra, you’re a grownup.

**John:** Yeah. Listen to grownup Ezra there.

**Craig:** Yeah. What an adult. It’s refreshing to hear an adult speak in an adult fashion about adult things. And, yes, that hurts. I get it. I don’t necessarily know that it’s over-over, because TV shows come and go. And also there’s very different kinds of TV shows that often have very similar premises. I mean, if you had an idea for a show about a group of detectives that use forensics to solve crimes, well, if you heard about another one it wouldn’t stop you. There are 12 on the air.

**John:** Mm-hmm.

**Craig:** There can more than one show. And so one of the things is asking yourself what is it about their show that is inherently different than the way you would have done yours. Is there a different way to swing it around? Can you make it a different kind of couple? What is it inherent to that story that you love? Is there a way to repurpose it and rethink it? But it’s also perfectly fine to let it go and move on. And you’re absolutely right. Any idea that anyone is working on, it’s already in the work somewhere else.

You know what I love about Ezra is that he didn’t do the thing that seemingly 90 percent of ding-a-lings do which is like, “I’m suing.” No. Yes, sometimes people come up with the same idea. And even the title. Trying. It makes sense. That’s pretty much what people call it. Yup, we’re trying. So, yeah, you know, you’re going to be good, Ezra.

**John:** You’re going to be good. I want to go back to our conversation about loglines because it feels like really what it comes down is that the logline for Ezra’s show and the show that’s on Apple right now are the same. They have the same title. But that show by its concept is going to be incredibly execution-dependent.

**Craig:** Yes.

**John:** This is not like a meteor is headed towards the earth. This is relatable humans doing relatable human things. And the general situation, the framing, the premise has an overlap, but that’s really about it. So, the thing that Ezra is writing, it doesn’t just go away because this other show exists. And so Ezra you should finish that thing. It’s probably a great writing sample for you for working on your next thing and could be hired to do other stuff.

I’d pick a different title just so it doesn’t get confused with the thing that’s out there.

**Craig:** Yup.

**John:** But you did great. The reason why I wanted to play this is that so often on the show we’ve talked about like somebody stole my idea. And it just doesn’t happen. People have the same ideas. They have incredibly, specifically similar ideas. And this is an example of that. So thank you for sharing that.

**Craig:** Terrific. Thank you, Ezra, that’s awesome.

**John:** Also, last week we talked about lawyers and I asked our listeners, hey, if you have advice for how you got a lawyer or ways to get a lawyer if you’re an unsigned writer how to do it. People wrote in because we have the best listeners. So do you want to take Susan from LA?

**Craig:** Yeah. Susan from LA says, “Go to IMDb Pro,” I see you’ve got to get that account, “and pull up well-regarded recent indie films or documentaries. Scroll down the crew list until you find legal counsel. Then Google that person and check out their law firm home page. You can also look at Variety/Hollywood Reporter,” well who knows, Varollywood Reporter’s “power lawyer lists, but they’re a bit pricy and will require a larger retainer upfront.”

**John:** Susan’s first idea there is phenomenal.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** And I don’t know why I didn’t think about that. But as I look at–

**Craig:** You’re bad.

**John:** Yeah. I’m bad.

**Craig:** You’re bad.

**John:** As I look at like the attorney who helped me out with The Nines and sort of does independent film like that, it’s exactly their kind of gig. It’s what they do. And reach out to them. They can probably do it for you and they have experience doing this kind of stuff. So that feels like a great place to start.

**Craig:** And a month of IMDb Pro is, what, like $12 or something?

**John:** Oh yeah. That’s fine.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** So you can totally do that. Erin writes, “In my experience legit entertainment lawyers are not asking for money upfront, at least that’s how mine operates. It is for future commission. Granted, my manager referred me, but this is what I’ve anecdotally heard as well. I do my due diligence before paying cash for an option red line. There will certainly be good attorneys willing to do it for free with the idea that they will receive commissions once you start to get paid.”

I disagree with Erin there.

**Craig:** Yeah, no, I don’t think Erin is correct at all.

**John:** I don’t think so.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** And here’s the difference. I think because Erin is coming in here with a manager I think that manager is talking to that attorney and saying like, “Hey, this is a kid who I think is going to do well here. Maybe you do this for free and then you become his lawyer.” That’s not the general case situation.

**Craig:** No. I mean, lawyers in the entertainment business do an enormous amount of work on commission. Your lawyer does. My lawyer does. But that’s based on the notion that they’re negotiating employment contracts or the purchase of literary material. Those are large sales or large employments. Something where someone is coming in and saying, “I need you to look through this option agreement,” which may absolutely turn into nothing – no, that lawyer is almost certainly going to charge you some kind of hourly rate. They would be nuts not to. Because they can certainly say, “And by the way if you’re happy for this and it works out when it’s time to do the employment contract come back. That is done on commission. You don’t have to pay upfront for that at all.”

But, no, I don’t think there’s going to be good attorneys willing to do these option agreements for free. No.

**John:** I agree. I think your first choice of find the person who does this for independent films or just get other recommendations from people in similar situations is going to be better serving you for that first contract which as I recall last week is about like a $1 option agreement and a red-lining.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** That’s not a situation – commission on a $1 – not worth it.

**Craig:** Ten cents. Five cents. Sorry, a nickel.

**John:** Five cents for an attorney. All right let’s get to a craft topic. I want to talk about dual dialogue because this week I’ve been writing scenes that have a lot of dual dialogue in it which is not something I often do. And I want to – we’ve discussed on Episode 370, we talked about simultaneity, basically when two events have to happen in the same time, but dual dialogue is a specific kind of that where people are just overlapping. And we may want the overlap for effect. We may need to hear information from two different sides. There’s a reason why we’re doing. It’s always a choice to do dual dialogue. And let’s talk about when you make that choice and how you might portray that on the page.

**Craig:** It is a little bit of a trap because if you watch movies, particularly certain kinds of movies where it’s very conversational, very dialogue heavy, almost all of it at times will seem like it’s overlapping somewhat. And so there’s a temptation to think this is going to make it realer. If I do dual dialogue it will make things look realer. The problem with dual dialogue is that it is such a heavy-handed instruction to everybody. Everybody is now going oh my god I have to actually – we are talking at the same time over each other very specifically. This isn’t a natural overlapping but a forced overlapping. So you have to be very deliberate, I think, about when you use it. It really comes into play rarely. I must say maybe three or four times in a script it’ll pop up. And even then I feel like I could probably get away with two of them, you know, get rid of two of them or something.

**John:** Yeah. So I think we often confuse and conflate it with people speaking quickly.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** And so I think in a lot of movies that we see and we love we think they’re overlapping, but really they’re actually just speaking quickly. And they’re anticipating their next lines. There’s just not pauses between things. But they literally are not stacked on top of each other. So, we see a tool in Highland or in Final Draft that gives us the ability to dual dialogue and we think like, oh, that must be the way you do it. And I’ll tell you that on the page often that’s not how you do it.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** So some of the choices you might make is as a parenthetical “overlapping,” basically saying like there may be scene description that says all of this is overlapping. Basically don’t wait to clear the other person’s lines before you start talking. That it’s meant to be sort of on top of each other.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** For example, Call Me by Your Name, there’s a sequence in which he’s sitting at the table and the parents and these other visitors are just all talking over each other. And it’s not important what they’re actually saying. It’s the experience of being there listening to that. And so that’s probably just an overlapping because it just doesn’t actually matter what the individual people are saying.

Other cases, you are very specifically trying to get information out there. So, we had Noah Baumbach on for Marriage Story. We had Greta Gerwig on for Little Women. And in those scripts, you can go back to those episodes and look at the PDFs, they’re very specific about where those overlaps are and you are supposed to be hearing what everyone is saying. And the fact that they are overlapping becomes very important. Be thinking about what the actual effect is you’re trying to achieve.

**Craig:** Yeah. But there are those moments where it really is the perfect tool. Like you say, it’s not frequent. I mean, for standard overlapping for casual overlapping you don’t want to do this. It is a heavy-handed instruction to everybody. But, then there are times where somebody is going to try and talk over another person. Arguments, for instance, where someone is going to be talking and the other person starts talking as if to say, “No, you stop talking,” but the first person will not stop talking. Or, situations in comedies sometimes where two people are trying to explain the same thing at once. It is a moment where it is absolutely required that two people are speaking intentionally over each other with knowledge that they’re speaking over each other and neither one of them is going to stop. That’s pretty much the best case use for dual dialogue.

**John:** Yeah. Basically neither one of them is yielding the floor to the other person to speak.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** So even the conversation that you and I are having right now, we are anticipating when I’m going to stop talking and you’re going to start talking. But along the way I might try to shout over you a little bit. I may do an acknowledgment, which I think is a special case we should talk about here, which is the uh-huhs, the yeahs, if you’re doing The Daily, the New York Times podcast, it’s Michael Barbaro’s “Huh.” It’s that signal that you’re still part of it.

**Craig:** Huh.

**John:** So those are all meaningful things. And sometimes you’re going to choose as a writer to actually break up someone’s dialogue with that “huh,” that acknowledgment. But that’s rare. It would also be rare to put that “uh-huh” in a dual dialogue. So you’re going to make choices. Basically I’m saying you may not put every utterance of a person in the dialogue of your script.

**Craig:** And when you are there you are going to find some sort of naturalistic language that comes out. One of the stark differences between play text, from a playwright, and screenplay text from a screenwriter is that the play text is designed to be performed by as many different actors as possible. Whereas the screenwriting text will be performed by one. And unless there’s some remake of the movie 30 years later, it’s one person. So there is going to be a certain tailoring and idiosyncratic adjustment to that single performer as opposed to a play.

So actually I do see dual dialogue frequently when I look at plays, when I read plays. It seems like that gets called out quite a bit because it’s formalized. Whereas in movies not so much. It is a decent tool. It’s very useful for songs, when you’re writing songs in movies, and two people are singing at once. It’s perfectly useful. But I think it’s probably good to ask yourself do I need it. It is not fun to read.

**John:** It’s brutal to read.

**Craig:** I’ll say on the page. Yeah. If you see a page where it’s just strips of dual dialogue your eyelids will get heavy.

**John:** Yeah. Because you have to make the choice of, OK, am I going to read the left hand column and then go back and read the right hand column? It’s a lot of work.

**Craig:** It’s also hard to imagine. And you know we can play one voice in our head at once. We can’t play two. We just can’t.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** So, you know, you’re asking something there. Just use it – when you use it know that it is very intentional, very purposeful. It is a heavy spice, so sprinkle it with restraint.

**John:** All right. Let’s get to a question. Patrick writes in, “I was hoping you could discuss the singular they/them/their pronoun in reference to many non-binary people. I used singular they pronouns in a recent script for a non-binary character. It was a period piece where singular they was never used in dialogue, but it felt like the correct way to identify this seemingly genderless character in action lines. I referred to the character as androgynous in an introductory character description, and aimed to avoid pronoun confusion so it would be clear when the they referred to this character specifically versus multiple characters at once.

“However, I’m still worried that readers may be confused or distracted by the singular they. I want to leave it like it is, but I’m not sure I should. Have you had any experience using singular they in scripts, or reading scripts where others have? Would you advise us to use or not use it? And is a disclaimer necessary?”

**Craig:** Well, there is a natural singular they/them/their usage anyway. It’s not completely foreign to our longstanding use of the English language. When there is a gender – what would you call it – ignorance, I don’t know–

**John:** You just don’t know.

**Craig:** Yeah, I don’t know if this is a man or a woman, so it says the police officers walk in, adjust their guns, I guess that’s plural. But there’s ways where you do use it. I think if it’s a non-binary character I would probably want to call it out early and say I’m going to be using, just for the reader, just let them know I’m going to be using they/them/their because they’re non-binary. And maybe I might capitalize it inside of sentences if I am using a lot of other pluralized they/them/theirs for other people so as to not create confusion. But probably I would just call it out early on and not let…

So it says I refer to the character as androgynous. I would have added and I will be referring to this character, meaning I will be referring to them as they/them/their.

**John:** Yeah. I think Patrick is right to plan for – there’s a difference between the dialogue that we’re hearing as an audience, are we going to get confused by the they/them/theirs which can be a challenge? Because in real life conversations, like we have friends who have a non-binary kid, and the they/them/theirs are–

**Craig:** It’s tricky.

**John:** It can be tricky just because sometimes you don’t know, wait, are they talking about the group? Understanding whether you’re talking about the individual or the group can be tricky with it. That said, we’ve used it in English for centuries. We’ve used this as a singular thing for a long time when we didn’t know what gender to apply to a person that we’re talking about.

So I would say for Patrick if the dialogue and it becomes important to say this person uses they/them/theirs I would call that out just so that it’s not confusing in dialogue. In many cases it may be possible, because you have the luxury of time, you’re not actually speaking this aloud, to find sentence constructions where it just doesn’t become an issue and where you end up using the character’s name rather than a they/them/their. Basically just use the proper noun rather than the pronoun and you may not have this much of a problem.

**Craig:** Yeah. It’s going to be hard to only do that. Because it can kind of get–

**John:** For a supporting character. For a character who only has a certain number of scenes, maybe you’ll be fine.

**Craig:** Sure. You can avoid it. But, yes, you’re right. We have this usage where it’s like the child brought their pet in to show the class. That is a normal usage we have for a singular person with the their. It’s in our minds, so you just have to spell it out for people early on that that’s what you’re doing. And by the way, if people are confused then they’re confused. Because that’s part of the deal is like our pronouns have not caught up necessarily to the way we’re starting to look at people and their gender. So there’s going to be some confusion. And, you know, you can just acknowledge that. Sometimes honesty is the best policy.

You can just say, “If you get confused it’s understandable. That’s kind of how it goes.” And they will try. I think most readers when they see something like that they’ll at least know that you’re acknowledging it. If you don’t acknowledge it then they’re going to think like I don’t know if Patrick understands how confusing this is. If you acknowledge then they’re like, OK, he knows how confusing this is.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** Or they know how confusing it is. I don’t know if Patrick is binary.

**John:** Let’s do one last question here.

**Craig:** All right. Theo asks, “I’m a big fan of the podcast. It’s a phenomenal resource to both learn about screenwriting and to distract myself from screenwriting. I have a question though for John about his #writesprints. They seem straightforward if the purpose of the sprint is to write scenes from an outline. But how do you structure them when the project you’re working on is still in the development phase and you’re doing more brainstorming and character discovery?”

John, can you explain the nature of your tyrannical write sprints to Theo?

**John:** So, with write sprints this is when I sort of declare on Twitter that starting at the top of the hour for the next 60 minutes I’m going to be writing and just writing, no distractions, no nothing else. And then I’ll see in 60 minutes, and if people want to join in and do it that’s great. And this is an idea I took from Jane Espenson who is another former guest who is just phenomenal.

I’m using doing write sprints when I’m in scenes. When I’m doing real scene work or in the case of the Arlo Finch books when I was writing chapters. But I will also use them for outlining phase. Basically if I want to do a solid hour of work and not be distracted that’s the same thing as a write sprint. And so it’s just being purposeful for a period of time about the work I want to be doing. That counts as a write sprint.

If you’re doing an outline, maybe you’re not generating the same number of words, but if you really are figuring out stuff that’s what this is. It’s basically just trying to be single-minded on a project for a period of time.

**Craig:** Yeah. I find sometimes that if I’m in the state of progress that Theo is in that the best version of the write sprint is the write walk, where I take a walk. And I just go, well, I’m going to go walking around thinking about this. And I’m going to turn around and head back when I feel like I’ve achieved something in my mind, some sort of clarity or construction.

I don’t do formal write sprints like you do for actual generating pages. I just mostly wait until I’m disgusted with myself and then I start – but I only write in write sprints. That’s just my natural way of doing it. When it’s time, it happens.

**John:** Yeah. I mean, I’ve just never been a slogger. I’ve never been a like I’m going to sit down for a three-hour session and get stuff done, because I just found that those were not productive to me.

**Craig:** No, like I know what I’m supposed to do. I know where I am. I know who is in it. I know what’s going to happen. I know what they say. Now just do it, stupid. And then eventually I do it. And when I do it I do it. I get lost completely in it and I do it until it’s done. So, that’s basically my day, day after day, every day for the last 25 years. Good lord. Geesh.

**John:** Good lord. All right, it’s time for One Cool Things. My One Cool Thing is an article that Ashley Nicole Black linked to. It’s an article in the New Station with Judith Butler. And she’s a professor, writer, gender theorist. And it was a discussion of trans-exclusionary radical feminism, which I knew about only because JK Rowling was associated with it. Basically JK Rowling just kept saying dumb things. And everyone said like that’s a dumb thing to say. And she would just double down on dumb things.

What I liked about this article was that Judith Butler was just so masterful at being able to sort of cut through the questions. Basically just challenge the premise of the questions. If you’re just curious about like how to handle arguments, or how to sort of deal with controversial topics being thrown at you I thought she just did a very smart job of dismantling what was being thrown her way and presenting it back in a way so that you basically can’t even like hit the ball back. It’s like, oh, crap, I can’t even do that.

So, an example sentence here. She says, “Women should not engage in the form of phobic caricature by which they’ve traditionally been demeaned. And by women I mean all those who identify that way.” And so she can just take some of the arguments being tossed her way and look at them and saying, nope, I’m taking this apart and giving it back to you.

So I just recommend people check that out because it gave me a good education in some of the terms and thinking behind this and also going back 30 years. So, I’ll put a link in the show notes for that.

**Craig:** So far afield from what you just said. My One Cool Thing this week is you and your fellow party members in our Dungeons & Dragons game. You guys made me so proud.

**John:** We did pretty well last week.

**Craig:** You did great. So, one of the things about being a Dungeon Master is you are not in control of anything. You are gently creating situations and then your characters do things and you have to react in an endlessly improvisational way. You have to hold boundaries, but you have to know when to be flexible. You have to know when to be rigid. And the whole point is to create situations that ultimately are fun, not necessarily fun in a kind of I put my videogame on god mode way fun, but fun in a sometimes my heart is pounding a little bit and sometimes there’s danger.

And last week you guys just played beautifully. You were collaborating and you were being creative and you weren’t all seeking individual glory but working as a team. And you defeated a very difficult enemy. And you defeated that enemy I would say handily.

**John:** Yeah. It was surprising. And I was definitely the person who was most nervous going into that encounter. What I will say was galvanizing and this is probably applicable to anybody thinking about storytelling is that this group of protagonists were only able to come together after the death of one of their party members.

**Craig:** Yes.

**John:** And basically it took a death for us to analyze what went wrong and how do we avoid making that same mistake again. And so I feel like looking at those moments of failure and learning from them is such a fundamental thing in both life and in fiction. And I was happy that we were able to do that and sort of go into this next encounter with really not just a plan but – because stuff happens and you sometimes can’t follow that plan. But a set of principles in terms of what we are going to try to do and what are priorities are going to be. And by sticking to those principles and each person rising to do the thing that they are best equipped to do we were able to defeat this really far too challenging of a future for us to be facing.

**Craig:** Yeah. Well, you did it perfectly. And you guys have come a long way. And it makes sense. As you go through these things, just like in regular screenplays and stories, the character gains abilities and talents and insight and then the question is what are you going to do with it. That’s the booby prize of life is insight, as the great Dennis Palumbo says. What are you going to do with it?

And so you get all these powers and then, ooh, like we can polymorph people. And there was a session we had where one of our wizards polymorphed one of the bad guys into a dolphin while in a bar fight, which was smart on the one hand.

**John:** Don’t bring a dolphin to a bar fight.

**Craig:** Yeah, don’t. Because the dolphin doesn’t need to be in water to breathe. And the dolphin can hit people that are five feet away from it. And so it did. And everybody was upset. But I’m like that was a bad choice. You could have made it a lot of other things. And you chose to make it the worst possible water thing.

Well, this time around much smarter and thoughtful and just working things through. Because you’ve grown into your powers, which is exciting, because it’s going to get more and more dangerous as you go. Just like life. But I was so proud of you guys. You did such a good job. It was a joy to DM and I can’t wait to kill more of you later.

**John:** Aw. Nice. Tonight–

**Craig:** Oh, that’s right, tonight. You know what, I probably won’t kill any of you tonight. Not tonight.

**John:** All right. That is our show for this week. So stick around after the credits if you’re a Premium member because we’re going to talk about Halloween. But meanwhile Scriptnotes is produced by Megana Rao. It is edited by Matthew Chilelli. Our outro this week is by Med Dyer. If you have an outro you can send us a link to ask@johnaugust.com. That’s also the place where you can send longer questions. For short questions on Twitter Craig is @clmazin. I am @johnaugust. We have t-shirts and they’re great. Go to Cotton Bureau to find those.

You can find the show notes for this episode and all episodes at johnaugust.com. That’s also where you find the transcripts. You can sign up to become a Premium member at Scriptnotes.net where you get all the back episodes and bonus segments. Craig, thanks for a fun show.

**Craig:** Thank you, John.

[Bonus segment]

**John:** Hey Craig. Halloween is coming up.

**Craig:** Yay.

**John:** It’s always the end of October. Growing up I loved candy so I liked Halloween for that.

**Craig:** Yes.

**John:** But if I’m being honest I was never a big Halloween person. Were you a Halloween person as a kid?

**Craig:** Well, I was. I was. So on Staten Island Halloween had more of an anarchistic feel. So, I was a good kid and my parents were very strict, so I had to put on my stupid costume. Remember the costumes, they were like vinyl? And then you had the plastic mask that you could stick your tongue out of the rectangular little mouth-hole that would then cut your tongue.

**John:** Uh-huh. And it sort of hurt your tongue. And it had the elastic that went to the back.

**Craig:** Bingo.

**John:** And the mask could crack really easily, too.

**Craig:** Oh, absolutely. And the suit, “suit,” was just like a vinyl apron that tied in the back and had a smell on it, like an off-gas and plastic smell that almost certainly took years off of our life. And I would go out with that and my little hallowed out plastic pumpkin candy holder.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** But the other kids, like if you were slightly older, it was shaving cream and eggs. They would throw eggs on everything and they would put shaving cream everywhere. So my memory, my sense memory of Halloween is the smell of Noxzema or whatever that shaving cream was, or Barbasol. Walking around, getting candy. And my sister and I after it was over would sit down in my room, we would dump it all out on the floor, and then we would begin to barter. Because I liked certain things and she liked certain things. And you make the swaps.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** Loved it.

**John:** Bartering is important. And obviously I had an older brother and there’s, of course, the manipulation that happens both as the younger brother and as the older brother.

**Craig:** Of course.

**John:** Now, did you have something growing up where the school district, I think it was the school district, maybe it was the city, they really wanted kids home by a certain point. I think by 8pm they wanted all kids home. Maybe it was it was like 7. It was really early.

**Craig:** This was New York. They were dealing with Son of Sam. They didn’t have time to worry about us.

**John:** So we had a thing where at school we had to fill out this little form with your phone number and then parent volunteers would say this is the goblin calling to make sure you’re home.

**Craig:** Oh god.

**John:** And then it was like a raffle. If you actually were home you could win a pizza party.

**Craig:** Well that feels really actually quite frightening in a Handmaid’s Tale sort of way.

**John:** Goblin calling.

**Craig:** This is the goblin calling to make sure you are home before 8pm when the witches come out.

**John:** So basically they’re going to have a stranger call children at their house.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** That’s really what the whole plan was.

**Craig:** Yeah. This is all backward. But we grew up, you know, John, the kids today don’t get it. We grew up in a time of full-throated panic. Gary Goldman has an amazing – this is my second One Cool Thing, my bonus One Cool Thing. Gary Goldman has an amazing standup special called The Great Depresh about his depression.

**John:** Oh, yeah, I’ve watched it. It’s good.

**Craig:** And Gary Goldman is just a legendarily good standup. And he talks about how in the ‘70s growing up America was inflicted with this notion that children were being snatched off the streets constantly. Some guy went on the news and said 50,000 American kids are being stolen and kidnapped off the streets every year when it turns out actually it was like 200 people. So, everyone went crazy. We lived in a time when we would go to school, we would get milk at school, and there would be some lost child’s face on the milk carton.

Everyone was in a panic, all the time. As he said vans used to be beloved, and now they were objects of fear. So around Halloween there was this additional aspect of the whole point of Halloween is someone is going to put a razorblade in an apple. No one wants the apple. No one wants the apple.

**John:** It never happened. No.

**Craig:** No one wants the apple anyway. Go ahead, put razorblades in the apple. No one will ever get cut. No kid is eating the apple. And also, no, no. That’s not lunatics work.

**John:** But it got to the point where you would take your candy and they would x-ray it at the hospital, which is just absurd.

**Craig:** Insane. Now you’re radiating food. It’s just insane.

**John:** So, Craig, you’re saying things are much, much better now because all we have is QAnon.

**Craig:** Oh god.

**John:** I think there’s a natural progression from this fear of an outsider coming. Antifa is going to poison your kids’ candy.

**Craig:** Antifa and QAnon are the new razorblade and apple of our lives. One quick question. When you – because we grew up at the same time there were probably the same weirdo candies floating around that aren’t much of today. What were some of your favorites, like in terms of the weird ones?

**John:** I was always a Milky Way. Milky Way is go to. If I wanted a candy bar it was a Milky Way. Nothing against Snickers. No one wants a Three Musketeers.

**Craig:** You’re wrong. See, here’s the thing. You’re normcore. You’re so normcore.

**John:** Oh, 100 percent. I’m completely normcore.

**Craig:** Oh my god. You’re so normcore. I was all about the weird ones. I loved the Three Musketeers.

**John:** And the Marathons.

**Craig:** I loved how light it was. Marathon. I was also a fan of those old creepy candies from the ‘50s like the Mary Janes. Loved Mary Janes.

**John:** Wow.

**Craig:** I know. What is it? It’s made of plastic and nuts and dirt and sugar. I don’t know. Delicious.

**John:** A recent episode of The Boys, the second season, show on Amazon, they talk about the island of misfit candy bars. And people who are fans of the Bit-O-Honeys and stuff like that.

**Craig:** I love Bit-O-Honey. Love it. Most of the things that I liked tended to be mostly wax, I think.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** Didn’t like those things that you have to like–

**John:** What was the wax bottles with a sugary thing inside? Who thought that was a good idea?

**Craig:** Those, the wax industry? Honestly the wax manufacturers of America had figured out. Those were called – I can’t remember what they were called. But, yeah, you would bit the top off and then drink the sugar liquid out and be left with just a tasteless thing of wax.

**John:** Wax. Yeah. Good stuff. Or like Wax Lips and other stuff like that.

**Craig:** Wax Lips. And of course the candy cigarettes which were the greatest.

**John:** It’s good stuff.

**Craig:** Teach your kids.

**John:** So this year’s Halloween, I thought Halloween would just get canceled, but then if you think about it it’s like, you know what, kids are already wearing masks. They put a mask over their mask. It’s actually not that dangerous. You’re outdoors. I say let the kids trick or treat.

**Craig:** Well, I think trick or treating has been somewhat canceled or something. I don’t know.

**John:** Over the years or for this year specifically?

**Craig:** No, for this year. I think that they have sort of said maybe don’t do it. I have looked up by the way what those things were called. The wax bottle liquid stuff. They were called Nik-L-Nip Wax Bottles. Nik-L-Nip. I don’t know why it’s called that.

**John:** Wow.

**Craig:** But that’s what they were called. Sounds kind of dirty.

**John:** It does sound dirty. Like some sort of…yeah.

**Craig:** You would bite it and drink it and it’s nasty.

**John:** Yeah. I just don’t know why the wax companies needed to do that. I mean, they said extra wax.

**Craig:** Well, yeah, I think that was probably what it was. Someone was like, “You know, we could take this extra wax and put some sugar in it and morons will drink it.” They were right.

They were right.

**John:** So, Craig, Happy Halloween.

**Craig:** Happy Halloween, John.

 

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* [Movie Releases Pushed](https://twitter.com/ErikDavis/status/1308814242569580544)
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* [Quibi Sale](https://www.latimes.com/entertainment-arts/business/story/2020-09-23/quibi-sale-value-bidders-katzenberg-whitman)
* [All the Trades are Basically One Company](https://deadline.com/2020/09/pmc-mrc-form-publishing-content-venture-that-brings-rolling-stone-thr-billboard-vibe-under-one-roof-1234582626/)
* [UTA Raises Assistant Pay](https://variety.com/2020/film/news/uta-raises-assistant-pay-agency-wide-new-average-hits-24-per-hour-exclusive-1234778549/)
* [WGA Election Results Board of Directors](https://www.hollywoodreporter.com/news/writers-guild-west-unveils-board-of-directors-election-results)
* [Scriptnotes, Ep 465](https://johnaugust.com/2020/scriptnotes-episode-465-the-lackeys-know-what-theyre-doing-transcript)
* [Scriptnotes, Ep 370](https://johnaugust.com/2018/scriptnotes-ep-370-two-things-at-the-same-time-transcript)
* [Judith Butler on the Culture Wars, JK Rowling and Living in “Anti-Intellectual Times”](https://www.newstatesman.com/international/2020/09/judith-butler-culture-wars-jk-rowling-and-living-anti-intellectual-times)
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Dual Dialogue

September 29, 2020 Scriptnotes

John and Craig examine what happens when characters talk over each other, and the best ways for writers to think about these moments and portray them on the page.

We also follow up on delayed movies, mergers, and assistant pay.

Finally, in our bonus segment for premium members, we discuss Halloween (the holiday, not the movie).

Links:

* [Movie Releases Pushed](https://twitter.com/ErikDavis/status/1308814242569580544)
* [Black Widow Shifted to Summer 2021](https://deadline.com/2020/09/black-widow-jumps-to-summer-2021-spurring-marvel-pics-release-date-shift-west-side-story-delayed-a-year-soul-stays-theatrical-1234582771/)
* [Quibi Sale](https://www.latimes.com/entertainment-arts/business/story/2020-09-23/quibi-sale-value-bidders-katzenberg-whitman)
* [All the Trades are Basically One Company](https://deadline.com/2020/09/pmc-mrc-form-publishing-content-venture-that-brings-rolling-stone-thr-billboard-vibe-under-one-roof-1234582626/)
* [UTA Raises Assistant Pay](https://variety.com/2020/film/news/uta-raises-assistant-pay-agency-wide-new-average-hits-24-per-hour-exclusive-1234778549/)
* [WGA Election Results Board of Directors](https://www.hollywoodreporter.com/news/writers-guild-west-unveils-board-of-directors-election-results)
* [Scriptnotes, Ep 465](https://johnaugust.com/2020/scriptnotes-episode-465-the-lackeys-know-what-theyre-doing-transcript)
* [Scriptnotes, Ep 370](https://johnaugust.com/2018/scriptnotes-ep-370-two-things-at-the-same-time-transcript)
* [Judith Butler on the Culture Wars, JK Rowling and Living in “Anti-Intellectual Times”](https://www.newstatesman.com/international/2020/09/judith-butler-culture-wars-jk-rowling-and-living-anti-intellectual-times)
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