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Never Gonna Not Dance Again could have been bigger

May 10, 2026 Words on the page

This morning, Apple Music surfaced a song I hadn’t thought about in years: Pink’s “Never Gonna Not Dance Again,” written by Pink (Alecia Moore), Shellback and Max Martin. The song was released in 2022 and reached No. 99 on the US Billboard Hot 100.

I like the song! I think the song could have been a bigger hit. It has a helluva hook:

never gonna not dance musical notation, version 1

The stop-start phrasing on the descent gives it a surprising staggered rhythm, with little nooks and handholds. Then it jumps back up for the landing, with “dance” taking the stress. That’s good prosody.

When the hook repeats for the third time, we simplify down to sixteenth notes. The different texture keeps it feeling fresh.

never gonna not dance musical notation, version 2

(Both snippets from the official sheet music.)

Lyrically, the double negative takes a beat to parse. Does “never gonna not” mean she is or isn’t gonna dance? It’s a tiny puzzle for your brain to unscramble. The final “again” is a nice surprise that makes you re-parse the phrase.

Altogether, I think it’s a terrific hook. I just wonder if it could be better supported by the song around it.

“I’m never gonna not dance again” suggests that at one point the singer stopped dancing — and she now realizes that was a mistake. With this lyric, she’s making a promise to keep dancing.

This idea feels like the payoff to a setup that the song never delivers. Instead, the opening verse describes a hypothetical bad situation:

If someone told me that the world would end tonight
You could take all that I got, for once I wouldn’t start a fight
You could have my liquor, take my dinner, take my fun
My birthday cake, my soul, my dog, take everything I love

There’s nothing wrong with this verse. It’s a good setup for the idea of “despite these bad things, I’m choosing joy.” That’s an attitude, a swagger, completely in keeping with Pink’s persona.

But the hook is specifically “I’m never gonna not dance again.” To get there, one can imagine lyrics about the before-times, when she was living in her head, worrying and holding back. Maybe insecurity had stopped her. The hook is her vow to stop doing that, and instead return to her earlier enthusiasm for dancing and having fun.

Once the hook-chorus has done its job, we can stay in the present. The existing verses serve us well, including:

I want my life to be a Whitney Houston song (I wanna dance)
I got all good luck and zero fucks, don’t care if I belong

Here the song is specifically referencing Whitney Houston’s 1987 “I Wanna Dance with Somebody,” which feels instructive. That song’s verse does what I’m suggesting:

I’ve been in love and lost my senses
Spinning through the town
Sooner or later, the fever ends
And I wind up feeling down

The singer recognizes a pattern: love burns burns hot, fades, and leaves her feeling lonely. But she knows what she needs:

I need a man who’ll take the chance
On a love that burns hot enough to last
So when the night falls
My lonely heart calls

It’s a setup that lands perfectly on the hook: “I wanna dance with somebody.”

I don’t mean to pretend songwriting is the only reason songs perform well on the charts. But I suspect that if “Never Gonna Not Dance Again” embraced that problem/solution structure, it could have been a bigger hit, or at least found a larger place in the pop songbook.

Of course, writers should write what they want! I don’t know anything about the specific process of crafting this song. It’s entirely possible that the verses came first and the hook arrived later. Pink and her collaborators may have delivered exactly the song they intended.

But as someone who’s written a few songs (and thousands of scenes), had I come upon this hook, I would have gladly rebuilt the scaffolding to support it. It’s just such a great central idea.

The finished song works. I just keep imagining the version that might have worked even better.

Constructing a great action sequence

June 30, 2025 Formatting, Video, Words on the page

On Scriptnotes, we often explore craft topics, looking at the specific choices writers make on the page. But there’s an obvious challenge when discussing visual storytelling in an audio medium.

That’s why for the most recent Scripnotes video, I wanted to revisit my conversation with Christina Hodson on writing action sequences. In this new format, we can see both the finished scene and the script pages behind it:

Thanks to Sam Shapson and producer Drew Marquardt for putting this together!

Which of these answers was written by AI?

January 10, 2023 Tools, Words on the page, Writing Process

[GPTZero](http://gptzero.me/) is a new service created by Edward Tian designed to sniff out AI-generated text.

I’m dubious, in part because I’m not sure I could reliably spot the differences between sentences assembled by humans versus machines. But maybe that’s just my human bias.

As an experiment, I decided to run a quick, not-at-all-scientific test. I asked ChatGPT to “write three paragraphs explaining what a manager does for screenwriters.” I also looked up the answer for [“What does a manager do?”](https://screenwriting.io/what-does-a-manager-do/) on screenwriting.io.

Here are the two responses, one written by a human ((Stuart Friedel wrote most of the early screenwriting.io answers.)), the other by an AI. See if you can spot which is which.

### SAMPLE A
> In brief, a manager manages your career.

> This includes tangible acts, like setting up meetings, giving notes and feedback, and assisting with deal negotiation, as well as the more abstract, like helping steer your career’s direction.

> Managers, unlike agents, are not required to be licensed by the state. They usually have fewer clients than agents, and often take more personal and less business-focused roles in their clients’ careers. Managers, are allowed to take producer credits on their clients movies, which agents are not.

> Like agents, a manager typically receives 10% of a client’s earnings. A manager should never ask for an upfront or flat fee.

### SAMPLE B

> A manager for a screenwriter plays a vital role in helping the writer navigate the film and television industry. They can assist with finding and developing new ideas, as well as helping the writer shape their existing ideas into marketable concepts. This often involves providing feedback and suggestions to help improve the story and make it more appealing to potential buyers.

> Managers also help screenwriters with the business side of things, such as identifying potential buyers and pitching the writer’s work to them. They can also help negotiate deals and contracts, as well as manage any legal issues that may arise. In addition, they can help the writer navigate the many different players in the industry, such as agents, producers, and studio executives.

> Finally, a manager can also help screenwriters with their long-term career goals by helping them identify opportunities for growth and advancement. This might include working on larger projects, transitioning to other forms of media, or developing a personal brand to increase their visibility and credibility in the industry. Overall, a manager plays a critical role in helping a screenwriter achieve success in the competitive film and television industry.

For each answer, GPTZero measured the text’s Perplexity — the randomness of the text — across several ranges.

| | Total | Average | Highest |
|———-|——-|———|———|
| Sample A | 41 | 136 | 219 |
| Sample B | 11 | 36 | 49 |

That 219 is an example of “Burstiness,” which GPTZero defines as “spikes in perplexity.” For Sample A, the opening sentence has a perplexity of 219, whereas highest perplexity in Sample B is just 49.

That’s the tell, apparently.

> Some human written sentences can have low perplexities, but there is bound to be spikes in perplexity as the human continues writing. Contrastingly, perplexity is uniformly distributed and constantly low for machine generated texts.

After crunching the numbers, GPTZero renders its verdict.

SAMPLE A (score 66.44):
Your text is likely human generated!

SAMPLE B (score 9.93):
Your text is most likely to be AI generated!

On both counts, GPTZero got it correct.

But how hard would it be to fool the system? I spent two minutes editing the AI-generated version into the following:

### Sample C
> Managers can play a vital role for screenwriters. Basically, they help the writer navigate the film and television industry. They can assist with finding and developing new ideas, or shaping their existing ideas. They provide feedback and suggestions.

> Managers also help screenwriters with the business side of things: who the buyers are and how to pitch to them. They can help negotiate deals and contracts, as well as manage any legal issues that may arise. They help the writer navigate the many different players in the industry, including as agents, producers, and studio executives.

> Good managers think about screenwriters’ long-term career goals. This might include working on bigger (or smaller!) projects, transitioning to other forms of media, or developing a personal brand. Overall, a manager can play an important role in helping a screenwriter achieve success in the competitive film and television industry.

| | Total | Average | Highest |
|———-|——-|———|———|
| Sample A | 41 | 136 | 219 |
| Sample B | 11 | 36 | 49 |
| Sample C | 19 | 106 | 439 |

The verdict:

SAMPLE C (score 118.77):
Your text is likely human generated!

## Some takeaways

– The ChatGPT answer was well-written and potentially helpful for someone who didn’t know anything about managers.
– GPTZero is looking for patterns a human likely wouldn’t notice, which makes sense. But an AI model trained to provide responses with high perplexity and burstiness would likely evade detection. It’s interesting to see this arms race play out, because adversarial networks are already a fundamental tool in AI.
– It’s currently very easy to fool GPTZero with just minimal rewriting. If this tool meant to detect AI-generated term papers, students will quickly learn how to evade it.

Clarifying scene geography

July 15, 2022 Follow Up, Formatting, Scriptcast, Words on the page

Based on an earlier Three Page Challenge entry — and with the blessing of writer Andrew McDonald — I’ve posted a [new video](https://youtu.be/uSJw2Hvqo64) in which I revise a scene in real time. Along the way, I discuss how small choices on the page can help (or hurt) a reader’s ability to understand where characters are and what’s happening.

As a fun bonus, Andrew has also filmed a [demo version](https://youtu.be/s7_z3wbhVcE) of his vision.

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