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April 24, 2012 Film Industry, Psych 101, Scriptnotes, Transcribed

Craig and John take a brief look at the misguided Girls backlash and complaints about nepotism in Hollywood, before segueing to a bigger discussion of spec scripts and positioning:

* What are “spec farms,” and how can you avoid them?

* What should you do if you and your reps/producers disagree about whether your script is ready to send out?

* Is it a good idea to post your script online?

* How should you introduce characters in an ensemble? How many is too many?

Todo esto y más en el 34° episodio de Scriptnotes.

LINKS:

* The Girls [nepotism poster](http://crushable.com/entertainment/girls-nepotism-poster-lena-dunham-allison-williams-891/)
* [The Robotard 8000](http://www.therobotard8000.com/)
* [The Nissan Leaf](http://www.nissanusa.com/leaf-electric-car/index#/leaf-electric-car/index)
* [Tesla’s Model S](http://www.teslamotors.com/models)
* Intro: [Spiderman y Sus Increibles Amigos](http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8eX3yWmwt7Q&feature=related) opening
* Outro: [Love is Real (Fred Falke Remix)](http://www.wired.com/underwire/2012/04/theophilus-london-love-is-real-remix/all/1) by Theophilus London

You can download the episode here: [AAC](http://traffic.libsyn.com/scriptnotes/scriptnotes_ep_34.m4a).

**UPDATE** 4-26-12: The transcript of this episode can be found [here](http://johnaugust.com/2012/scriptnotes-ep-34-umbrage-farms-transcript).

Planning for opening titles

April 19, 2012 Charlie, Film Industry, Projects

PBS Off Book has a nice video about the [design of opening credits](http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qbhi-JICKKI&feature=youtu.be). Karin Fong compares a great title sequence to raising the curtain before the show.

Not every movie needs elaborate opening titles — the trend recently has been towards simply giving the name of the film and moving on with the story. But I’m a fan in general. Opening credits can be a terrific way to establish the world, so I try to anticipate them when writing the screenplay.

Here’s the opening sequence for Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, which was shot largely as I wrote it:

FADE IN

As OPENING TITLES begin, we find ourselves in a swirl of liquid chocolate, spinning clockwise down a funnel. The accompanying MUSIC is jaunty but mysterious -- we’re clearly in for a ride.

We emerge as the chocolate pours into a mold, one of hundreds inching along a conveyor belt. This isn’t any ordinary factory. Bathed in amber light, the machinery is ornate and polished, with shiny brass joints and spindly levers. Complicated gears tug on oiled canvas ropes, slipping through swinging pulleys.

As the chocolate bars continue along the belt, great bellows swell and gently PUFF on them. A moment later, a press SLAMS down, lifting to reveal the word it has imprinted:

W O N K A

Still moving, we look back along the belt as hundreds of bars line up to be stamped. The molds suddenly flip over, dumping each bar onto its own set of wire fingers. These “hands” zip straight up along an elevator track.

We RISE with them, a good hundred feet up, getting a bird’s eye view of the factory floor. It’s quite dark except for the golden lights right along the machinery itself. Strangely, we don’t see a single person working.

As the chocolate reaches the tip-top of the track, a mechanical arm THWACKS a small package to the underside of each bar. Just as suddenly, the track flings each bar over the top.

The candy bars plummet in free-fall, until the tiny packages pop open, revealing parachutes. Their descent slows until a pair of giant scissors deftly SNIPS the strings on each chute, leaving the candy to drop onto another conveyor belt.

Each piece of chocolate lands perfectly square on its own sheet of foil paper. Looking ahead, we can see the machine that bends the foil around the chocolate. But before we get there,

A HUMAN HAND

reaches in and lifts five bars off the belt.

We only see this man’s hands and the cuffs of his velvet jacket as he sets a thin

GOLDEN TICKET

on the back of each of the bars. One by one, he places these five special bars back in the queue, where the foil-folding machine does its job, perfectly encasing each piece.

Another device attaches the paper wrapper, printed to read: WONKA BAR.

Further down the belt, we find stacking and sorting machines loading up boxes and cases of bars. A mechanical stamp THUMPS down on each cardboard box, marking its final destination: TOKYO, SPRINGFIELD, BRIGHTON, ADDIS ABABA.

CUT TO:

EXT. LOADING DOCK – DAY

Huge snowflakes drift down out of an icy sky that is the color of steel. WORKMEN load pallets of Wonka candy onto waiting trucks.

It’s hard to say what time it is, exactly: there’s no sun to be found, and the streetlights are always on. For that matter, it’s hard to say what year it is. From the trucks, to the clothes, to the typeface on the clipboard, the world seems to exist outside of ordinary calendars. All we can be certain of is that it’s winter.

The last container loaded, the FOREMAN bangs on the side of the lead truck. The convoy moves out.

Keep in mind that the first frame of the film might not be the right time for opening titles.

For example, James Bond movies traditionally stage an entire sequence before the main titles, which serve as a bridge between his last adventure and the new story. It’s like an extra act break.

If you have sequence that sets up the world, the opening titles can help you set up the hero. That’s the approach I took in my will-never-get-made Barbarella:

NARRATOR

At the time, no one knew this child would one day become their destroyer, and in the process, their savior. No one knew her name would become legend. At the time, they knew her only as...

FINNEA

(deciding)

Barbarella.

CUT TO:

A BURST OF COLOR

At first, it’s not clear what we’re looking at. Abstract shapes form a kaleidoscopic swirl while COCKTAIL MUSIC sets the mood.

A PAINTBRUSH reaches into frame. The brush holds steady while the canvas moves across it, creating a graceful line. It’s only now that we...

BEGIN MAIN TITLES.

In VARIOUS SHOTS, we start to see more of the paintings and the artist:

A THUMB flicks droplets of paint, which hang in mid-air. LIPS blow the paint at the canvas.

TWO COLORS are swirled together on a palette. Going WIDER, we see the palette has a navel -- it’s the artist’s stomach.

Looking past a canvas, we see the artist’s DARK HAZEL EYES as she works.

From behind, we see the bare back of the artist as she paints in the nude. She’s slowly turning counter-clockwise, while the canvas stays relatively still.

Unused brushes float past a window, showing outer space beyond. We MATCH CUT through the window to go...

EXT. SPACE SHIP / SPACE – CONTINUOUS

Where we get a look at Barbarella’s ship. It’s a tiny skiff, perfectly round, driven by gravitonic induction. If it were a car, it would be a VW Bug.

INT. SHIP – CONTINUOUS

Just because it’s a spaceship, doesn’t mean it can’t be comfortable. The walls are lined with carpeting, while the seats are agreeably plush. If it weren’t for the navigation controls and the windshield, it would make a groovy studio apartment.

As she moves the canvas down, we finally get a good look at our artist, BARBARELLA. Now 25, there’s an exuberant innocence to her, like the first day of spring made flesh.

Her greatest strength is her complete lack of worry. She’s never had a bad moment in her life.

As the TITLES END, she tucks her brush behind her ear, finished with her work. Her painting shows an abstract daisy, bursting with life.

BARBARELLA

I think I’ll call it, “Anthem to the Glory of Eldoria’s Magnificent Spirit.”

(to the air)

What do you think?

Her question is met with an EXPLOSION, followed by a blaring SIREN.

The ultimate decision about a title sequence will come down to the director, but if you’ve scripted it in a way that helps tell the story, you’re likely to see it used in some form.

One caveat: If your script starts with a montage of smaller moments that you intend to play under the opening titles, write the words OPENING TITLES. Otherwise, you may end up with both a title sequence and an empty-feeling minute of movie at the start.

Amazon’s new deal for writers

April 10, 2012 Film Industry, QandA, Scriptnotes

Craig and John answer questions about specificity, television and what to do when your great idea sounds too much like a movie that’s already been made.

The big news this week is potentially very big news: Amazon Studios has completely revamped their business model, ditching the terrible parts and transforming into something potentially very good for writers. Notably, Amazon is now a WGA signatory, which offers the promise of residuals and credit protection for screenwriters.

Will it work? It’s too early to say. But when a new player with deep pockets enters the film industry, it often helps loosen the purse strings. More importantly, the Amazon deal sets a precedent for other tech companies considering taking the plunge.

Along the way, Craig talks about directing and John takes his daughter to work. All this and more in this episode of Scriptnotes.

LINKS:

* [Presbyopia](http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmedhealth/PMH0002021/)
* Lena Dunham’s [Girls](http://www.hollywoodreporter.com/bastard-machine/review-girls-lena-dunham-brilliant-HBO-298379) is brilliant
* Tiny Furniture on Amazon
* [Nerdist Writers Panel](http://www.nerdist.com/podcast/nerdist-writers-panel/)
* My pilot scripts for [D.C, Alaska and Ops](http://johnaugust.com/library)
* John’s 2010 post on the [first Amazon deal](http://johnaugust.com/2010/on-the-amazon-film-thing)
* Craig’s 2010 post on [Amazon’s bad deal](http://artfulwriter.com/?p=1103)
* Amazon Studio’s [new development process](http://studios.amazon.com/getting-started)
* INTRO: [PM Magazine intro](http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w6T2JrK3boQ)
* OUTRO: [We Found Love](http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_uzddvR5JEw) covered by Chris Harris

You can download the episode here: [AAC]http://traffic.libsyn.com/scriptnotes/scriptnotes_ep_32.m4a).

**UPDATE** 4-12-12: The transcript of this episode can be found [here](http://johnaugust.com/2012/scriptnotes-ep-32-amazons-new-deal-for-writers-transcript).

The pressure of PG-13

March 28, 2012 Film Industry, Genres

Rich Juzwiak looks at how PG-13 has become the [rating you want](http://gawker.com/5896566/the-reign-of-the-pg+13-rating-sanitized-safe-and-worth-shitloads-of-money):

> It’s simple math, really: Movies rated PG-13 make more money on average ($42 million per picture versus G’s $38.5 million, PG’s $37 million and R’s $15 million). Getting blessed with PG-13 ensures that the odds are ever in your favor. In this economy, who wants to gamble?

To some degree it’s a self-fulfilling prophecy: as studios make most of their blockbusters PG-13, most blockbusters will be PG-13.

While there are always notable exceptions (Safe House is a recent one), in most cases it doesn’t seem worth arguing anymore: if you’re making an expensive movie that could conceivably be less than an R, it probably *should* be PG-13 — and that comes at the scripting stage.

From personal experience, one of the worst things that can happen to your movie is to cut it down to a safer rating after you’ve shot it. It’s not just losing the F-words. It’s losing the moments that called for the F-words. If when writing the script you knew you could only say it once and in a non-sexual context, you would write scenes in a way that didn’t demand it.

Similarly, an R-rated action scene cut down to PG-13 feels neutered, while an action scene designed for PG-13 can plan for the absence of gore at the outset. People criticize the shaky-cam in The Hunger Games, but it was clearly a choice made from the beginning in order to show the feeling of violence without the bloodshed.

That worked out well for them.

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