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Scriptnotes, Episode 525: The Story This Was Based On, Transcript

December 1, 2021 HWTBAM, Scriptnotes Transcript

The original post for this episode can be found [here](https://johnaugust.com/2021/the-story-this-was-based-on).

**John August:** Hello and welcome. My name is John August.

**Craig Mazin:** My name is Craig Mazin.

**John:** And this is Episode 525 of Scriptnotes, a podcast about screenwriting and things that are interesting to screenwriters. Today on the show it’s another round of How Would This Be a Movie where we take a look at stories in the news and figure out how to transform them into quality filmed entertainment. This week we’re joined by a journalist who wrote one of our previous contenders to learn what it’s like having your work optioned by Hollywood.

**Craig:** I’m sure it’s great.

**John:** It’s the best experience in the world. It’s the dream.

**Craig:** It’s Hollywood.

**John:** We’ll also look at how you shape and tell true stories and answer some related listener questions. And in our bonus segment for premium members with studios owning publishers and the Writers Guild representing both screenwriters and journalists, what are the remaining distinctions between writing for Hollywood and writing for news media. We’ll dig into that.

**Craig:** I have thoughts.

**John:** Craig, most importantly, what are your thoughts on the brand new Scriptnotes hoodies? For the first time in 10 years we have Scriptnotes hoodies. Click that link. Take a look and tell us what you think of these hoodies.

**Craig:** Click that link. Smash that like button. I think it’s great. And I want one. And I’m just sort of like torn. I feel like I think I’m a large. You know what?

**John:** I got the large.

**Craig:** Yeah. Large feels right. Extra-large feels too roomy.

**John:** Yeah, the tent.

**Craig:** Yeah. Exactly. I don’t want to walk in tent. So, John, can I have a large?

**John:** You can have a large. We can actually order you a large. We’ll order that for you.

**Craig:** Give me a large. Now.

**John:** We’ll get you a large. But if you would like a large, if you’re a listener who would like a large or any size of these sweatshirts you have until November 18 at 5pm which is when they’re closing orders for this first – and you probably will not be able to get a hoodie by Christmas unless you order by November 18, 2021. So, get them now.

**Craig:** And this has passed the Stuart softness test?

**John:** It has. Absolutely. And so we’re looking for the right copy, and so Stuart’s sense of softness is how we always build the t-shirts. But Stuart Friedel has not been the producer of Scriptnotes for so long that newer listeners might not even know that Stuart had a prudential gift for figuring out the softest fabrics. And so instead we went to the Megana Rao test which is like could you wear this while cupping a giant mug of hot chocolate in your hands and would this be that comfy.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** And we believe that these are that comfy.

**Craig:** So Baby Yoda would wear this while sipping soup?

**John:** It is a Baby Yoda-approved level of comfort.

**Craig:** Got it. Well, this is good, because Stuart I guess has just very sensitive skin. Because he was really into the softness thing. But he’s so right.

**John:** Our Scriptnotes t-shirts are remarkably soft. I don’t want to wear anything else.

**Craig:** They’re so good that I ordered a bunch of non-Scriptnotes, just blank t-shirts from – what is it called?

**John:** Cotton Bureau.

**Craig:** Cotton Bureau. Because it’s the tri-blend. Tri-blend. So this is the same thing, right? It’s made of Stuart’s shirt material?

**John:** This is the hoodie equivalent of the tri-blend. So I can’t promise that it’s the exact same thing because that would be too thin probably for this hoodie.

**Craig:** Of course. But that softness level I think is really important. Megana, your reputation is on the line. No pressure.

**John:** No pressure. All right. Let’s do some follow up. First off, last week we were talking about bringing in experts to be consultants on things. And we were talking specifically about military experts. Max wrote in to point out that there’s actually an organization called Veterans in Media and Entertainment which does exactly that. So, it’s a charitable organization that supports US military veterans. If you have a military subject they can find you an expert on it. So, we’ll put a link in the show notes to that. It’s vmeconnect.org.

**Craig:** Great. And they are a 501(c)(3) charitable organization. I love seeing it. Anytime we can promote one of these groups, please we will. And what do I mean by group. I mean any organization that is willing to share their expertise with writers gratis. We’re not looking for people who are accepting money. But if it’s a charitable organization of course like a 501(c)(3) then donations are always a possibility. But if there’s a group out there that is willing to just pick up the phone or answer an email to help screenwriters be accurate then we will spread the word.

**John:** We love it. Now some of the most anticipated follow up.

**Craig:** Drum roll.

**John:** Probably in the history of the show. We all remember who Oops was hopefully. So Oops was a writer who was working on a film and she had kind of fallen in love with, had a little crush on, a producer on the film and she wrote in asking for our advice on what do you do because you don’t want to mess up this situation. And you and I talked about it. Aline came on to talk about it. We now have follow up from Oops on what actually happened. Megana Rao, you are the voice of Oops on this podcast so if you can please give us the update from what Oops wrote in this week.

**Megana Rao:** All right. So Oops says, “I’m pleased to let you all know that I’m now Miss Oops Plus One. I have this weird millennial resistance to saying something like he’s my boyfriend, but yeah, it’s all kind of worked out. Yay for love. I’d love nothing more than to share expertly screen written blow by blows with the audience, but it’s funny how now I’m suddenly mentally concerned with his privacy. Anyway, I wanted to thank you guys and Aline and those who wrote in for such sage advice. I think back on those few weeks routinely and laugh. It was all rather silly and fun and I’m just so glad that I was cautious, thought about it a lot, and ultimately trusted my gut because she was right. Yours, Not Yet Planning the Scriptnotes Wedding but Never Ruling it Out, Oops.”

**Craig:** Oh, I am just beside myself with joy here. Because I don’t know if you remember I was definitely the guy pushing down pretty hard on the gas pedal. We are all aware that mixing romance and work these days is tricky. And I like the fact that Oops thought it through. She was really careful and it seems like her now boyfriend, because he is your boyfriend, I don’t care what you say Oops, her boyfriend was also careful. He was also thinking about it. And lo and behold we’re here to tell you that two responsible, rational, careful people can meet at work and fall in love. And become boyfriend/girlfriend. And I love it.

So, I’m happy. I think we needed a story like this. We needed to know that there was still room for healthy love in our business.

**John:** Congratulations to Oops. And congratulations to Oops’ boyfriend and her plus one.

**Craig:** Megana, are you happy?

**Megana:** I am very happy for Oops. I think they kept it a secret. I had to edit some of this out because of her concern for his privacy. But they kept it a secret for most of production and then right after production were official. But it seems like most of the crew knew the whole time.

**Craig:** Obviously. Everybody knows everything on a crew. Being with them now, I have been working with a crew now for months. And I think we all know like what we have for breakfast in the morning before we get to work. Everybody knows everything.

**John:** Yeah. To me the tell is always not that people are starting to talk to each other but they suddenly stop talking to each other. It’s like, ah, yeah, you’re trying not to let us all know what’s happened there.

**Megana:** That’s what she said, too. The night after they had that conversation they just stopped talking to each other completely at work.

**Craig:** Of course. And then everybody within 14 seconds was like, mmm, mm-hmm.

**John:** We all saw the chemistry. Now there’s not communication. Yeah.

**Craig:** OK, it happened. What else is going on out there, John? Anymore follow up?

**John:** Oh, Craig, the other big piece of follow up that you’re so looking forward to is MoviePass is back.

**Craig:** Yes!

**John:** So excited. So we’ll put a link in the show notes to this article about MoviePass co-founder Stacy Spikes was granted ownership of the company and basically he was able to buy it out of bankruptcy. Maybe it was $250,000. Maybe it was less than that that he was able to buy it.

**Craig:** You can’t get a tear-down two bedroom in Los Angeles County for that amount of money. And this is what MoviePass was apparently worth.

**John:** Yeah. So I’m excited for this new chapter. It’s really a thing I thought was dead and gone.

**Craig:** It is.

**John:** But of course it’s not.

**Craig:** It’s dead and gone.

**John:** Something will rise from the ashes of it. I just feel like with our Scriptnotes hoodie money we could have bought MoviePass. And I’ll never forgive myself for—

**Craig:** Sorry. You could have bought it because I don’t get that money, John. Megana, I need you – Megana, listen to me. I need information. You’re going to have to start showing me the books. Something is going on here.

**John:** Mm. Yeah.

**Craig:** Look how quiet Megana got.

**Megana:** I’m just funneling all of that money to myself.

**Craig:** Of course you are.

**Megana:** That’s the truth of it.

**Craig:** D’oh!

**John:** Now, the other exciting bit of news I saw in this article is that Mark Wahlberg’s production company, Unrealistic Ideas, is currently developing a documentary on the rise and fall of MoviePass based on this reporting. So in many ways it is a How Would This Be a Movie situation which is the perfect segue to our main topic today which is How Would This Be a Movie. So, people who are familiar with this podcast is every couple of weeks we take a look through stories in the news, stories from history, and figure out how we can transform them into quality filmed entertainment. We saw How Would This Be a Movie but more likely a limited series. And we discuss what’s in that story, who the characters could be, what kind of movie or TV show it could be, the tone.

We just try to do what writers do, which is take stuff that’s thrown our way and figure out how to transform it. But this week we have a very special guest because Zeke Faux is on the show. Zeke, can you tell us who you are?

**Zeke Faux:** My name is Zeke Faux. I’m an investigative reporter for Bloomberg Business Week. And a few years ago I wrote a story that I called The Phantom Debt Vigilante that you so nicely highlighted on a previous version of this segment.

**John:** So this was back in Episode 339 we talked about it. And we loved the story that you wrote and we also thought like, oh, there’s good potential here for a movie. But can you talk us through the short version of like who the central character was in the story that you wrote and what it was about?

**Zeke:** So, the story opens with this salesman, Andrew Therrien, normal guy. He’s just sitting around at home when he gets a call from a debt collector. This surprises him because he doesn’t owe any money. And he sort of gets into it with the debt collector. And the debt collector threatens his wife. And this just sets Andrew off and he goes out on a mission to figure out who this debt collector was, why they called him, and he actually uncovers this massive nationwide conspiracy, tracks down the bad guy at the center of it. And in the end brings him to justice.

So he’s one of the favorite people I’ve ever met through work. It was so exciting when I heard this story. And I couldn’t believe it myself. And each time I would check something out and find out that it was actually true I was like, whoa. So, yeah, that’s the guy.

**John:** So, you heard about this story, you pursued it, you wrote up the story. And at what point did it start attracting attention of Hollywood people? Because we talked about it on the show but I think, correct me if I’m wrong, before we even mentioned it people had sort of scoped it out. Correct?

**Zeke:** Yeah. I think that it had been optioned by the time you talked about it. I’ve been through this a few times and basically if you write a story that’s exciting and has a character and a plot it’s not so unusual that you’ll start getting emails from producers or these sort of scout type people asking if the rights to the story are available.

In this case I got a lot of emails right away, like probably the day that it came out. And then more on the following weeks.

**John:** So talk to us about these emails. Because these are coming from producers or scouts or other folks. What are they specifically asking for? Are they saying like would you consider selling the rights to this? Can you tell us what else there is here? Is there a movie? What are those emails actually asking for?

**Zeke:** Well, this is some good info for any magazine writer colleagues. I realized that a lot of these emails are from almost like interns who are just wanting to confirm that the rights might be available before they tell their boss about this cool story that they read. So the first time I got one of these emails is from a different story and I was ready to pick up my tux for the Oscars. But then I realized that this was just some intern who hadn’t even like told his boss about it yet and just wanted to make sure that this was a story that one could buy the rights for.

So, yeah, they’re usually pretty vague and just asking if I’m the person to talk to, or if I have an agent or something like that.

**John:** Great. Was this your first story that actually got optioned?

**Zeke:** No, I’ve had a few before this one. And generally I hand people off to my agent pretty quickly because it’s hard for me to know who is for real. And then they will help narrow down who might actually be worth considering and talking to. And I’ve never had one that was some crazy bidding war that everyone in town wanted to buy, so it’s often just comes down to a couple people and then we pick based on who seems most credible or honestly who has an interesting take on the story.

**Craig:** If I may be so bold, what kind of money are we talking about here? You don’t have to give me an exact dollar figure, but range wise? What’s a typical sort of option fee for these things?

**Zeke:** It’s a good question. I mean, a lot of people will try to option things for as little as nothing, which is obviously not that appealing.

**Craig:** Nothing sucks.

**Zeke:** I’ve done some research on this since I’ve started getting involved in it and talking to other writers and so I think that at the low end would be around $5,000 and then the high end for articles, I mean, I’ve heard of ones that go into six figures but I think that’s really unusual.

**Craig:** So talking roughly between $5,000 and maybe $75,000? Something in that zone?

**Zeke:** Yes. And that’s for the option, which they have to pay upfront. And then the purchase price is higher.

**John:** So let’s talk about what they’re actually buying, because in this case you had a relationship with Andrew Therrien and had done all this reporting, but some of that stuff is just public fact. Someone could take the idea of a guy who sort of goes after a debt collector. They don’t need your article to do that. So what are they actually buying when they option the rights to that story?

**Zeke:** It’s actually a question that I’ve thought about myself. And a producer explained it to me once. And he said that back in the day he used to go to these meetings with almost like a sandwich board and he’d be pitching people on some idea that he had for this amazing true story that should be a movie and flipping through the pages. And he said that if he was going to buy an article it was basically just so that they would have something to talk about and some sort of source material that could sort of get the project going.

**Craig:** Yeah. It seems to me a lot of times like producers will buy these things to create some air of exclusivity or, I don’t know what you would call it, legitimacy. But as we’ve discussed here legally speaking if you write an article, and I’m sure this has happened to you, some jerk like me can read it and just use it. Anything that’s in the article is usable. It’s out there in the world. It’s the stuff behind it – if we wanted to write a story about the gentleman that you’ve investigated what we are buying I suppose from you that is of value beyond the story you wrote is all of your notes, all of the additional stuff that didn’t get into the story. Because that’s still yours.

But my understanding is if you publish it in Bloomberg Business Week and I read it I can pretty much use whatever you wrote there because it’s public record.

**Zeke:** Right. I mean, my stories are true so you’re not—

**Craig:** Exactly.

**Zeke:** These things really happened.

**Craig:** I like that you have to say that. My stories are true, by the way.

**Zeke:** So, this is another way I think about it. I mean, I don’t know how much would you get paid to write a screenplay, like probably quite a lot of money.

**Craig:** Yes.

**Zeke:** So wouldn’t it be pretty cheap to not option the story?

**Craig:** Yes.

**Zeke:** It’s so cheap you might as well just do it if you’re going to hire a good screenwriter to write the screenplay.

**Craig:** Yes. If you are a producer you’re absolutely right. And it may be that – everything is a competition. So you write a great article. And there are going to be four producers, hopefully, competing to get the rights to that article. And then that producer is going to make that article an object of competition for a bunch of writers. Or, the other way around is there’s a writer and five people are trying – I’ve had this experience and John I’m sure you have, too – where I’ve had more than one producer call me to ask me to write the blah-blah story and it’s the same story.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** In one case, oh, you know what it was? It was Game Stop?

**John:** I got Game Stop.

**Craig:** I got Game Stop by two different producers who had each optioned or outright bought two different articles.

**Zeke:** I actually had someone ask me if I could write something about it so that they could option it.

**Craig:** Right. I mean, so I think what we’re getting at here is that you are doing real work out there and screenwriters are doing real work out here. And in between are producers that just–

**John:** Or studio execs who are just like Ah!

**Craig:** Making stuff up.

**John:** Now, Zeke, a question for you. In the case of the article we’re talking about it so focused on Andrew’s story. Were they also optioning his life rights or were they just taking your story?

**Zeke:** My policy on that is that if someone wants to do something with life rights that’s their business. I don’t want to be in business with the subject of my stories.

**Craig:** Right. You’re not brokering their life rights.

**Zeke:** Yes. So that’s something that everybody has to consider on their own.

**John:** Right.

**Craig:** Makes total sense.

**John:** Now let’s talk about your relationship with the screenwriter on this project, because you’re saying that the person you ended up going with was a producer and they had a screenwriter involved. Did you have any direct interactions with that screenwriter?

**Zeke:** This was pretty standard. Usually you have a call or two with the screenwriter at the beginning and it’s pretty fun. I like to tell them, you know, I always have a lot of outtakes to talk about. And we’ll give them any extra materials that they want. But then after that I usually don’t hear from them.

**Craig:** Right.

**Zeke:** But I understand that because you need time to develop your own take on the story and having somebody else who has a very specific take on it could be kind of distracting.

**Craig:** Well there’s probably not a lot of good news that could come out of subsequent conversations because when you’re adapting something of course you are altering it to some extent. And if you are calling the journalist who wrote the article odds are you’re not calling them to tell them how faithful you’ve been. And so this is normal and also I assume as a fully-fledged professional adult you’re aware that once you sign these things away all sorts of stuff might happen.

**Zeke:** Yeah. And I’ll just say I love writing magazine stories. I want the story to be perfect and so fun to read on the page. And I want it to inspire people who read it. And if it also inspires some screenwriter who wants to go do something that’s awesome. But I don’t really care what they do with it.

**Craig:** Because what you wrote still exists.

**John:** Exactly.

**Craig:** And always shall.

**John:** Yeah. We always talk about when an author sells the rights to a book to make into a movie that book still sits on the shelf. And no matter what I do in the adaptation that book will always be there. And so that was your vision of a thing and this is someone else’s vision of a thing. What is the current status of this project now? Is that going to be moving forward? Is the option still happening? What’s going on with this movie right now?

**Zeke:** That’s a great question and the answer sort of illustrates my place on the totem pole in the moviemaking process. I actually do not know what’s going on.

**John:** All right. So Zeke while we have you hear we’d love your input on this segment that we do called How Would This Be a Movie where we talk through stories in the news and figure out how they can be movies. And you will have an insight because you’ve been the journalist reporting these stories.

**Zeke:** So I accidentally happened on what I feel like is a weird trick to get producers in your magazine story.

**John:** I’m so excited by this.

**Craig:** I want to hear this weird trick.

**Zeke:** In an earlier story the subject of the story said something to me that became the first quote in the story. And he said, “Remember the movie American Hustle. It’s kind of like that with way more dirt and twists.” I just put that in because it was funny. It’s a funny thing to say. But then I was having these meetings with producers and they would say to me totally straight-faced, “You know, it really reminded me of American Hustle.” So I thought to myself if it’s at all relevant maybe mention the name of a movie in your story.

**Craig:** Oh my god.

**Zeke:** That will sort of set their movie alert. So for a couple of years if I found a good spot and it seemed relevant, I mean, I don’t want to compromise a story, but I would mention the name of a movie. So, I had another one about this sort of triple agent informant in the drug wars and I said that he was kind of Narcos Forrest Gump. And this guy called me up, for real, he’d won an Oscar. And he was like, “Narcos meets Forrest Gump. Narcos/Forrest Gump. I’m coming out to New York to take you out to lunch.” And I was like, great.

So we went out to lunch and he just kept saying Narcos Forrest Gump. And so much that I wasn’t even sure if he had read the whole article because that was near the top.

**Craig:** He hasn’t.

**Zeke:** The lunch sort of petered out because we were running out of ways to talk about Narcos Forrest Gump.

**Craig:** That’s amazing.

**John:** Amazing.

**Craig:** Amazing.

**Zeke:** Yeah. Just mention the name of a movie. That’s my tip for magazine writers.

**Craig:** I think what Zeke is really putting his finger on here is how stupid so many producers are. I mean, they don’t read. They have a staff of people that tell them things. They do hinge on something and they forget who told it to them so quickly that they think they thought it. And, Zeke, I will tell you that just because a producer has an Oscar doesn’t mean that they’re not stupid. Because if something wins Best Picture then the producer gets the Oscar, but a lot of producers really are just stupid.

I clearly don’t want to work in Hollywood anymore. By the way, that’s becoming super obvious.

**John:** Yeah. We’ve known that for a time.

**Craig:** But some producers are amazing. And if you produce something I did I’m sure I’m talking about you when I say amazing. But everybody else, stupid.

**John:** Stupid.

**Craig:** Stupid.

**John:** All right. Let’s get into these movies and figure out which producers will hang on one idea in this and forget what they actually read or saw.

**Craig:** Great.

**John:** There’s five of them and two of them have interactive elements too which I think is really fun, or they are like cartoons/animations. I love this.

**Craig:** I love these. Yes. Fun.

**John:** It’s not all reading. You can actually sort of look at things.

**Craig:** Thank god.

**John:** So we’ll start with this story by Andy Hoffman and Benedikt Kammel. This was from Bloomberg and is Bloomberg the same as Bloomberg Business Week? Zeke, help me out.

**Zeke:** Bloomberg is the parent company and this story was actually in Bloomberg Business Week’s annual heist issue which all you screenwriters should keep an eye out for because it’s full of cool stories.

**John:** And what’s great about this one is it is a comic. And so it’s telling the story of this Swiss trader is trying to buy copper for a Chinese buyer. He finds some in Turkey. So they load this copper into a shipping container and then overnight people break into the shipping containers, swap out that copper with painted rocks, seal it back up and ship it off to wherever it’s going, to China someplace. They did this seven more times and for a total of $36 million worth of painted rocks. And it looks like it’s probably an inside job. There’s 16 people charged at the time of this writing.

Craig, start us off. Is there a movie here?

**Craig:** No. No there is not. What there is is a great scene. This feels like one of those things that would open a great ‘70s heist movie where you’re introducing characters and you’re showing how scammy they are and how either clever or not clever they are or how clever but unlucky they are. It’s such an audacious move and it’s got a great reveal which is a bunch of guys are loading copper in and on the other side the crate arrives and like a magic trick even though you’ve been watching it the whole time when the thing opens it’s a bunch of rocks.

By the way, this is a real question. If you’re going to take copper out and shove a bunch of rocks in and then reseal the container why are you painting the rocks copper? Who is that going to fool? It didn’t fool anybody for even one second. So why even bother painting the rocks?

**John:** My guess is that when they first open, because it’s sort of slag copper, it’s not good copper, when you first open it and just do a quick visual inspection you might not realize that it’s not copper. And so give you an extra day’s time before they actually load it.

Obviously they need the weight because they need it to feel full.

**Craig:** I get the rock part. But, yeah, it seems more like a scene and a character introducer. There’s no way to make a series or even movie about this because it’s just one thing and I don’t find it particularly interesting. There’s no comment or reflection of the human condition. It’s just theft.

**John:** So, Zeke, help us out. Because I feel like there is more to the story here, because this was deliberately a very small slice of it. But it didn’t get into the characters. It didn’t get into what the actual organization was behind this. Can you anticipate if you were to do the reporting what kinds of people and schemes behind the scenes might you figure out?

**Zeke:** I mean, ideally the people behind this might be in jail and pleaded guilty and be willing to tell you the whole thing that happened. I mean, personally I don’t get that excited this as an inside job because I want it to be some sort of really sneaky operation. Maybe if these were low level workers and they were somehow getting revenge on their terrible boss then it could be fun.

**John:** I hear you there. Because I also get frustrated because at least with the information we have right now they’re obviously going to get caught. There’s sort of no way you could not get caught. And so it’s a trick you can play once and if you try to play it seven times they’re going to figure out where the switch happened.

If the heist had happened at sea where they’re actually switching the containers there there’s a more interesting way to get to it. But I agree with both of you that I think it’s a scene, it’s a moment, in a completely different story and doesn’t really help us out here.

All right, let’s get to the one that Craig was excited about last night as we were talking about. The Secret History of Sushi.

**Craig:** Love this.

**John:** This is New York Times story by Daniel Fromson with illustrations by Igor Bastidas. Craig, can you talk us through what this is about?

**Craig:** This is magic. This is – every now and then you read a story that kind of blows your mind because it’s about something that was in front of your face for most of your life and you had no idea what was really behind it. So, apparently the history of sushi, and we can sort of skip the part where it’s how sushi developed in Japan and get to the part that’s sort of mind-blowing. So there was a cult that John anybody our age is familiar with or older, I don’t know if the millennials are quite as familiar with it. But the Reverend Sun Myung Moon was a kind of a Korean Christian Messianic culty figure who came to the United States I believe in the ‘70s. And was infamous for these mass marriages that he would oversee.

**John:** The mass weddings. Yeah.

**Craig:** But early on when he was still kind of small time in New York many of his adherents were Japanese which in and of itself is a bit odd. And he had this idea that in order to help fund the church that they should start bringing sushi to the United States. And in order to bring sushi to the United States he tapped this group of five or six or seven of his adherents and scattered them across the United States. And all of them were working in service of this corporation called True World Seafood. And True World is a reference to some nonsense that Reverend Moon believes in, I don’t know, some crap about whatever the world becoming something else. Doesn’t matter.

Point being they did it. These guys created the largest fresh seafood distributor in the United States and in Canada I believe and in some other places. And they did in fact create the sushi movement. I mean, it surfed along with a kind of Japan-ophilia thing that happened in the ‘80s, but they still to this day are the largest supplier of seafood to sushi restaurants. When you go and you eat sushi in the US or Canada you are eating fish that was very likely purchased initially and distributed and resold by a company that is intertwined with Reverend Moon’s Unification Church. And that is crazy. And how these guys did it and then the ensuing fallout when Moon died and the inevitable infighting happened within his family and then the lawsuits and the corporations.

It’s insane. And I loved it.

**John:** I loved it, too. And I think there is a movie here or a series. But to me it’s the question of like where do you put the boundaries of it. When do you start and when do you stop? And I don’t think you get into the later end stuff. I don’t think you get to the modern stuff. I think you just get to this crazy, impossible dream of like, OK, you’re going to go to Alaska and you’re going to go to Denver and start selling sushi in Denver and just really random people assigned to places and they just made it work. And there’s a comedy to that that I think is actually fun and exciting. But also problematic because this church was not without its own faults.

I think there’s a thing to be made here. Zeke, as you look at this article what jumps out to you? What are the threads that are interesting to you? And what’s the movie hook that you put in there so that some producer buys it and talks to you about it at lunch?

**Zeke:** I loved the presentation. Like as a magazine person it just looked amazing. And it’s pretty unusual to see one – I haven’t seen something like this before.

I think they did a really good job of connecting it to sushi. Like that made me more interested as a reader. If you just said, hey, this strange religious leader has a big fish company, I mean, that would be an OK story but presenting it as the secret history of sushi I think is what sells it as a story and to someone like you.

**John:** Agreed. Now, Craig, how do you make this? Do you make this – is it a movie? Is it a series? Where are your edges on the story?

**Craig:** Definitely a series. So, it’s not even a question of narrative application anymore. It used to be solely a question of narrative application. But now you have to also ask the question is anybody going to actually put it in a theater. Or even just show it streaming as a movie. In our minds now we have becomes really limited about what we see when we talk about movies. And this story does not have the explosive elements required to confine it to 90 minutes or two hours. So you need something really big and none of that is here.

This is absolutely some kind of limited series, but I would say a short one. I don’t think this needs five episodes or ten episodes. It needs maybe three. Personally, if I were putting my money into this I would actually be going down the documentary root. I think that’s the way to do this. The fictionalization of it is not as interesting to me as the facts in and of themselves. So I would probably go with a short documentary series on this.

**John:** Yeah. The reason why I think I want to see this as a fictional series is that I could just picture the moments where in the time period where you’re trying to introduce sushi into these places and just sort of like the confused stares you’re getting out of like, oh, we want to sell you some raw fish, and just trying to get people to eat this fish and just the absurdity of like, OK, I don’t know anything about what I’m doing but the church says I’m supposed to be doing this so I’m going to figure this out. I think those moments are so good.

I agree with you that it’s a series because it doesn’t want to fit nicely into 90 minutes. And there’s just going to be so many characters and so many situations. And you’re going to probably cover a number of years which just all works better as a series.

So, Zeke, I’m still going to press on if this were your story what would be the hook you’d want to put in there to make sure that a producer says oh yeah I get what this is?

**Zeke:** I was joking about that before, because I feel like – I’d like to think I’m above that now. But even as a writer I might have considered trying to develop some of the individual characters more. Like zooming in on, like you said, one of these particular people who is off in some weird place trying to introduce raw fish. I think that would be an interesting thread for the story. And probably would be interesting for somebody like you, too.

**John:** And actually one of the maybe challenges of this presentation, because people should click through the link because it’s really beautifully done.

**Craig:** Beautifully.

**John:** It’s all illustrated with animations that go through it. But because of that there aren’t the photos you might expect. And in addition to not really talking very much about the individual people without photos to sort of anchor like oh that is this guy, I could not tell you right now who most of the characters were in this piece. Because I was just focused on this is the sweep of the story. And it didn’t give me a lot of anchoring into who the people were who got sent off to these different places.

So a good counter example of this is our next story. This is a New Yorker story about migrant laborers who clean up after disasters. It’s Sarah Stillman writing this. And this is full of very detailed specific people whose faces we can see. These are folks who some of them are documented, some of them are undocumented. They’re mostly from Texas and Florida. But when there’s a disaster in the US there are these companies who subcontract with other companies who send workers in to sort of do the cleanup. So after huge storms, after natural disasters, these are the people who show up and do all that work. As Stillman’s story is documentary they obviously say like, oh, we’ll follow Covid-19 protocols. They’re not at all. Everyone is getting Covid. It’s terrible. Safety protocols aren’t there.

It also focuses on a man named Sacket Soni who is an organizer who is basically trying to protect these people and get them housed and fed and deal with wage theft. Craig, we’ll start with you. What did you see in terms of a potential story either for a movie or for a series out of this?

**Craig:** Doesn’t feel like one. There’s fascinating information here and there’s important here. It does feel like the kind of thing that if I were running a traditional news magazine format on television I would want to do this story for television in that format. A 60 Minutes kind of format. Because it’s important for people to know this and to see this.

However, there is not yet a kind of Cesar Chavez story that is completed. They are organizing and so we should see what happens with this. But overall what we’re seeing here is a pretty head on bit of journalism and I don’t think that this is the kind of story that adapts well to fictionalization in any format.

**John:** Zeke, as you’re looking at this do you agree? And if do agree are there things about this story that could be highlighter emphasized that would make it more of a Hollywood story?

**Zeke:** Interesting that you didn’t think it had potential for an adaptation, Craig, because I actually found it very cinematic when I was reading it. I just loved all of these amazing details like that she wore these gold hoop earrings that helped her feel elegant while she was doing this cleanup work. Or the sort of ironic signs she was always seeing.

That said, I agree that you don’t have the Erin Brockovich type plot yet. And then just to me it would seem odd to say based on a true story but then fictionalize some sort of more dramatic plot onto it. And then I was thinking if you don’t do that, if it doesn’t have a strong plot it might feel kind of similar to Nomadland.

**John:** I was thinking about Chloe Zhao the whole time through because I just felt like everything was happening sort of at sunsets and in beautiful disastrous places. And sort of the real life hardworking people who are actually doing the stuff and not getting paid properly for it felt like that sort of aesthetic.

**Zeke:** I’d be interested. It’s too bad we couldn’t ask the writer of this, because I am wondering how – I mean, obviously they’ve seen Nomadland and I’m sure they didn’t want it to seem too similar. It must have been actually challenging to try and write something that was really dramatic but then also in some ways similar to an Oscar-winning movie that came out recently.

**Craig:** Well, these stories sometimes give you – now I’ll speak like a purely exploitative fictionalist. When you read a story like this what you get is an interesting job for a character to have or characters to have in a movie that is about something else which is their life, their relationship with their children, or their spouse, or their significant other, or a romance. Some kind of life change.

So if in a movie we’re talking about a woman who has just gotten divorced and is restarting her life and this is the job she gets and this is where she meets somebody, that’s interesting. But the actual content of what’s happening here in terms of the way these people are being exploited and the economic ins and outs of this particular industry, that in and of itself is not a narrative that I think I would want to adapt the way for instance, you know, a narrative was created out of the whistleblower and the tobacco industry. It’s not quite that. It doesn’t have that circular narrative movement that we’re hoping for.

**John:** Now the other project I was thinking of was this Netflix series Maid which is Molly Smith Metzler writing about – taking a woman in a very specific situation and using that as the backdrop to tell a specific family story which I think Craig is what you were getting to. This is a huge canvas but you can decide to do the Erin Brockovich story about this issue or The Big Short. This is about this issue. Or you can have that be the arena in which you’re telling a much smaller story which might be the way to go through here.

And in that case I don’t know that you option this article because this article provides a big canvas but it doesn’t actually provide the distinct story points. Because you might choose to pick the woman who is featured here, Bellaliz Gonzalez, who is from Venezuela. As a central person you might choose to pick Sacket Soni who is this organizer. But you probably wouldn’t. You could just create your own character who is in that same situation and that’s your story.

**Craig:** Yup.

**Zeke:** It just reminds me of another article to film adaptation, American Honey.

**John:** Oh yeah.

**Zeke:** Shia LaBeouf movie about the kids selling magazines. Which is actually based on this amazing New York Times article from 2007 that was more of like an expose about how young people are getting exploited on magazine crews. And then when the movie, which I do think they had optioned that story, when that came out it was just like sort of inspired by it but totally different.

**John:** I think for what we’re describing we’re not sure if we would ever want to option this article. But I guess you could option this article, as you said at the start of this, you might option this article as a producer just to clear the field and to declare this story space. But you’re not getting a specific story you can tell.

Here’s a very specific story. Next up we have an article by Sarah McDermott writing for BBC about Pauline Dakin’s childhood in Canada in the 1970s. It was full of secrets, disruption, and unpleasant surprising. She wasn’t allowed to talk about her family life with anyone. And it wasn’t until she was 23 that she was told why.

So basically at 23 she learns that her family is on the run from the mafia and that the mafia is after them and they have to always be constantly careful. And at a certain point all of us as readers say like or your family is not telling you the truth and they’re all operating under some sort of delusion which appears to be the case.

Again, this is a very specific story that you could choose to tell. So we could talk about optioning this story or this as a kind of story. Zeke, help us out here. Think through as a journalist how do you start to tell this story? If you were to write this article where would you begin and what are the hooks for you?

**Zeke:** So this article actually would be – not that I can pitch a news story about some random events of someone’s lives that don’t really have any newsworthiness. But it actually would be a good starting place for the kind of story that I like to write because it’s missing all of the specifics and you could really dig in and try and create – like I want to start with some sort of really dramatic scene which I would find by interviewing the person and talking through all of this and finding out what parts of the story really seemed like most exciting to me.

The version that I was reading was just sort of the barebones outline of what happened, which would be great as a starting place to really dig in and get all the details, interview other people and see their perspective. Because oftentimes the main character doesn’t really have a good sense of how they behaved themselves. You have to talk with other people who saw the events.

**John:** Craig, what is your take on this story?

**Craig:** I love it. It’s terrific. I don’t know if I need the story. Meaning I don’t know if I want – the value of this I don’t think is that it really happened. I think this is just a great to use as inspiration to write a story about a kid and their parents and this life they’re living and the fear that they’re all under and to present it as real and then for this person to slowly realize none of it is real. This is very Shyamalanic. And that in fact something far more weird is happening.

And then the question of who is telling the truth and who is lying and if they’re lying why becomes really florid. And all of the value is about the relationship between a child and a parent. And that stuff requires fictionalization and dramatization to the point that I think this is just a great springboard. I would not want to write a movie where there is a character named Pauline Dakin and her mother, Ruth, and her stepfather, Stan. I would want to just take the inspiration from this. Because it’s a fascinating notion. And I would want to do some research into this concept of delusional disorder.

So it’s very inspiring and a wonderful story that Sarah McDermott has uncovered here. And it will be, oh it will certainly be optioned. No question about that. But personally I think the value is just in the suggestion.

**John:** I think back to Gillian Flynn’s book Gone Girl which was telling the story of oh did this husband kill his wife. And there were true life things that she could ingest into that, but she was telling a fictional story. And she didn’t need to use any of the real life things to do it and she could tell a much better story by not being bound to what really happened. So unlike a true crime novel she’s able to use all the stuff and build her own thing out of it.

And I guess I agree with you here. But I also very much hear what Zeke is saying is that there probably are really compelling moments and scenes and bits here that you could flesh out. That you could create an article that was even more Hollywood compelling given this basic framework.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** All right. Our last story here is about Silibill N’ Brains. If you’re not familiar with Silibill N’ Brains they were a ‘90s hip hop duo that burst onto the scene. Let’s take a listen to a clip.

[Clip plays]

All right. So these are two California rappers. Very much in an Eminem style obviously. Fun. Great. MTV is loving them. They’re sort of rising up in music videos. And then it comes out that they’re actually two Scottish guys who just put on California accents and were just basically trying to ape all of their favorite rappers. And it all fell apart and it sort of got exposed in a Milli Vanilli sort of way.

Craig, is there a movie here?

**Craig:** No. I mean, it’s interesting but it feels very familiar to me. The idea of people being illegitimate and inauthentic and hiding that to get some sort of fame. And then it all comes crashing down. This is just very tired. And this is two levels of inauthenticity because it was already questionable when white people in the ‘90s started jumping on the hip hop bandwagon and trying to do that Vanilla Ice style. And then these guys were from Scotland which is even further away. And they weren’t even faking being black. They were faking being white.

**John:** They were faking being white in California which I think is great.

**Craig:** Yeah. But the point is I just don’t care. They weren’t famous enough. Nobody died. There was no shootings, explosions. The stakes were low. I struggle to care about this story. Maybe if they had been more famous. I don’t know, maybe that would make it even worse. Look, if there hasn’t been a Milli Vanilli movie, has there been?

**John:** I don’t think there’s been one.

**Craig:** Yeah. If there hasn’t been one of those I don’t see why we would get to this one. I think the Milli Vanilli is the canary in the coal mine. If we don’t want to make a movie about that I don’t know why we would want to make a movie about Silibill N’ Brains.

**John:** Now, Zeke, there’s three articles here we’ll link to. So we’re linking to an article by Tom Seymour for Vice, by Sam for DDW, and there’s also a documentary called The Great Hip Hop Hoax by Jeanie Finley. So this is areas that have been explored. Do you see a movie or a series coming out of this?

**Zeke:** I really didn’t like this idea at all until I listened to the song. I mean, it’s just so horrible that it’s kind of amazing that this ever fooled anyone. So, maybe it would be best as a documentary. And I was trying to think of some way to make this kind of relevant. Basically I come down on no, but I think one thing that’s a little interesting is why was everyone so eager to believe. And I think it’s because they wanted white rappers. They wanted some next Eminem. And so I feel like there’s kind of a racist element to it that could make it kind of interesting to explore, but still not that interesting.

**John:** Yeah. I think there’s a Lonely Island movie here where you can just – you find the right two kids who have the right charisma and you can just play with all these themes and use their songs but write other great parody songs. So do you need this exact story? Maybe not. And I guess they already made Popstar: Never Stop Never Stopping or whatever. So maybe it’s kind of already been done.

**Craig:** By geniuses.

**John:** They’re geniuses. And so I feel like the right people could approach this and make something great. But it’s not a slam dunk by any stretch. It’s very execution dependent.

All right, let’s do a recap of our stories here and figure out which of these might actually become movies. Zeke, if you had to pick between our five here which is the movie. Which gets optioned?

**Zeke:** You were very down on it but I actually think that the story about the migrant workers is the one that people would go for.

**John:** All right. Craig, of these five which is the movie?

**Craig:** Sushi.

**John:** Sushi. I am going to go with sushi as well. I think sushi is the one that – it’s not a movie, it’s probably a limited series, but I think that’s the one that most happens. But I’m excited for all of these. And I want to thank all of our listeners because I put out on Twitter a call for suggestions and most of these came from their suggestions.

Here’s the ones we didn’t cover just so you can—

**Craig:** And you’re telling us about them?

**John:** Yes. Ivy Getty’s Wedding was amazing. But, no, we don’t care.

**Craig:** We don’t care.

**John:** The 1902 eruption of Mount Pelée on Martinique. Great.

**Craig:** I’ve already done a thing blowing up. I can’t do it again.

**John:** The billionaire space race. We’re in the middle of it, so no.

**Craig:** Yup.

**John:** The Havana Syndrome. We don’t know what’s really happening, so no. Chinese dancing grandmas.

**Craig:** Adorable.

**John:** Kind of interesting.

**Craig:** Hysterical. Not a movie. But I like that people are throwing bags of pee on them. It’s an amazing story.

**John:** Biker getting breast milk.

**Craig:** What?

**John:** So it’s these biker gangs who formed a shuttle service to bring breast milk to mothers who need breast milk.

**Craig:** Such a great band name.

**John:** Yeah. The plot to dig up Lincoln’s body was actually a great story. It just came a little too late, so we’ll keep that for the next one.

**Craig:** Because he died a long time ago.

**John:** Yeah. So basically people are trying to dig up his body and hold it for ransom.

**Craig:** What? Oh boy.

**John:** You’ll love it. It’s terrific. The IVF mix-up leaves an LA couple giving birth to another family’s baby. Yeah. The bio of Ruth Fertel who created Ruth’s Chris Steak House. It’s fascinating. So she’s good. The great emu war which is about the plot to eradicate emu, sort of like cut back on emus in Australia. They’re already making a movie so it’s too late.

**Craig:** Too late.

**John:** And Stagecoach Mary who was a groundbreaking black postal carrier in the old days, olden days. She seems great. There’s a biopic maybe to be made there but it didn’t make it in time for this one. So, good suggestions everybody.

**Craig:** Thank you folks.

**John:** Now, Zeke as we transition out of this I want to talk to you about point of view in a magazine piece because in this article we first talked about that you wrote clearly we’re on the POV of this guy who is investigating these scams. But as a journalist when do you know who the person is that you’re going to be focused on and going to hang the story around? Does that come pretty early or only as you sit down to really start writing it?

**Zeke:** I always like to have a really exciting story with a point of view. So I might find a space that I find is interesting. Like in that case I’d been looking into debt collection for quite a long time. Maybe I’d even written some straight news stories. And then when I meet someone who is a great character I get really excited and I think about how can I use everything that I’ve learned about this shady debt collection industry to inform a story that would be more compelling to read because it centers on a character.

**John:** And do you ever feel guilty thinking about people as characters? Or is that just the nature of the work you’re doing?

**Zeke:** Absolutely. I mean, it’s incredibly important to me that the story is true. It’s a tricky thing because when you tell the truth about someone they might not even recognize it. So I can’t be overly concerned with how the subject will react to the story, but I also want it to read like if someone who knows the subject reads it I want it to read true. And I can’t take any liberties at all with the timing of events or the characters.

You have a lot of constraints as a writer of true stories that you wouldn’t if you were writing a screenplay. And in this case it was kind of interesting. The subject really took exception to the fact that I called him stocky which I did think was an insulting adjective.

**Craig:** I’m stocky. I think it’s very nice.

**Zeke:** Yeah, I mean he’s a big perfectly good-looking guy. I mean, not even that big. I don’t think stocky means that big. Anyway, of all the things that’s what he didn’t really like, but we still joke about it so I guess he got over it.

**John:** This last week I was talking on a Zoom call with two writers who were working with the Inevitable Foundation which is a foundation that helps disabled writers past middle career up into becoming showrunners. And one of them was working on a project that was centered around this civil rights figure. And someone who was kind of always behind the scenes but actually had a really compelling life story.

And she was running into a problem where she had all this research and all these facts about this character but didn’t feel like she sort of knew who the person was or what the person’s voice was. And I was trying to encourage her to really channel her inner Aaron Sorkin and just make a choice and just run with it. And it strikes me as such a different thing for what I’m telling a screenwriter to do versus what you as a journalist has to tell another journalist to do. You can’t put words in a person’s mouth whereas she has to put words in a person’s mouth and has to actually have the confidence to just create a voice for this person who no longer exists.

**Zeke:** Yeah. I mean, I would find that really hard. And the amazing thing about this story, a lot of my stories don’t even have much dialogue. In this story the guy had taped everything. And when I heard these tapes I honestly wanted to cry. The dialogue was so amazing. I just couldn’t believe that this guy actually – I mean, he actually said things that are as good as what you guys would make up. So that was a very unique situation, but ideally I can put myself in a place where I can observe someone actually doing stuff and hear how they actually relate to other people. That’s a little more authentic than just interviewing them and hearing what they say to me.

**John:** Yup. All right. Let’s get to our listener questions because we have two that are very much on topic here. Megana, do you want to start us off?

**Megana:** So Chase from London writes, “I’m currently developing a script based on a pretty famous historical trial. The story has been adapted a few times in different mediums, most famously with a golden era legal drama. But I believe a retelling would have a completely different weight and meaning if written for a modern audience. My question is whether I should watch and read every previous adaptation of this story in my research. Is it helpful or harmful to see how other writers dramatized certain events? Are there copyright complications to look out for when drawing upon the same courtroom transcripts for dialogue?”

**John:** I don’t think you should look at all the other adaptations because you will start judging what you’re doing based on what they were doing and it will become a trap and you shouldn’t do it. Craig, what’s your thought?

**Craig:** If it’s been adapted a lot I think you have to at least – you don’t want to study those things because I agree with John. But what you don’t want to do is just mistakenly replicate a bunch of stuff because then you’re going to hear about it when you send your script around. Everyone is going to say well yeah it’s not that you ripped them off, it just doesn’t seem different enough. We already have that movie. What do we need this movie for?

In terms of drawing on the same courtroom transcripts for dialogue, no, those are facts. Those are a published public record and anyone can use that freely. The problem is if someone else has used it freely you’re a little bit stuck. Just because you can doesn’t mean you’re not going to seem like somebody who is a Johnny Come Lately.

You’re in a tough spot here. And I guess the way I would turn it around to you, Chase, is to say why are you developing a script based on a pretty famous historical trial that has been adapted a few times in different mediums, most famously with a golden era legal drama? I know you say a retelling would have a completely different weight and meaning if written for a modern audience, but maybe that’s not enough? You just don’t want to seem like you’re delivering something that feels warmed over.

Writing for a modern audience, I’m not sure what that means exactly. If it’s just a question of language and such then I’m concerned. If you’re talking about retelling that story from a very different perspective then you might be onto something, in which case I don’t think you have to worry so much. But if you’re doing something straight on that’s been done a bunch it’s going to be an issue.

**John:** Zeke, if you’re writing something in an area or about a story topic do you read other writers writing on that topic? Or is that in bad form? Tell me about the research you’re doing and reading other writers.

**Zeke:** I feel like it’s my duty to read everything that I possibly can. But I understand why you might not want to. It’s hard to avoid feeling influenced if you’re – I mean, I would prefer not to write a story about something that somebody else has already written a great magazine story about because it is challenging to set aside their take and write your own original one.

**John:** All right. We’re running short on time so we’re going to cap it at one question here. And it’s time for our One Cool Things. My One Cool Thing is called Friendsgiving by Miry’s List. So Miry’s List is a great charity that works with immigrant families, refugee families that come to the states, mostly to Los Angeles, and helps them get set up in apartments with furniture and food and toys for their kids, and books and such.

I was first introduced to them by Rachel Bloom. They are fantastic. So I’ve been supporting them for the past couple years. Their Friendsgiving campaign is especially important this year because they have a bunch of new Afghan families that have come to Los Angeles and need some support. So, I’ll have a link in the show notes for that, but it’s Friendsgiving by Miry’s List.

Craig, what do you got for us this week?

**Craig:** So my One Cool Thing this week is Once Cool Person named Jasmila Žbani?. She is currently directing an episode of The Last of Us for our production and she’s terrific. She is a Bosnian filmmaker and I became aware of her through the last feature film she made which is called Quo Vadis, Aida? And that was nominated for Best Foreign Film in the last round of Oscars. It’s a wonderful movie, heartbreaking movie about the terrible events in Srebrenica. The terrible war that tore Sarajevo apart and just a brutal conflict between Serbs and Bosnians.

I just like drawing people’s attention to it because I think normally if somebody says, oh, there’s a Bosnian movie and it’s about war you might go, meh, I don’t. But what’s so brilliant about Quo Vadis, Aida is that it focuses on a woman who has a fascinating job. She is a translator who is the go-between between these Bosnian refugees seeking shelter in a UN compound and the Dutch soldiers who are in charge of the UN peacekeeping compound and of course everybody then uses English as the lingua franca. And so I guess it’s lingua anglica. And that woman’s story is an incredible way to work in and out of this brutal story.

Jasmila is just a terrific filmmaker and a wonderful person. I am having such a great time with her. So I thought I would spread the news about her and her movie as my One Cool Thing.

Oh, and I do have one other cool thing. It’s my new nickname for me and Megana. Because I was thinking about it. We had talked about Ben Affleck and Ana de Armas. And somebody pointed out obviously how did we miss BenAna.

**Megana:** BenAna.

**Craig:** BenAna is just like how did we miss it. It’s just right there. And then I was like what happens when Megana and I start dating. And obviously we’d be Craigana. So, I’m just super excited. Craigana is the new thing. #Craigana. And the story of our romance and how it begins in winter and ends when fall arrives, obviously. It’s just such a great story.

**Megana:** Because I just become unbearable during the fall? Yeah.

**Craig:** What happens is everything is going OK and then you message Spooky Season in August and that starts to get me really worried, and then it just gets worse and worse. And so by the time Thanksgiving arrives it’s over.

**John:** Zeke, save us. If you have a refugee related One Cool Thing then that would be fantastic and it would check all the boxes. But tell us, do you have a One Cool Thing for us this week?

**Zeke:** Mine is actually kind of nerdy. It’s productivity software. Or, I shouldn’t call it that but it’s called Roam Research.

**John:** I love Roam Research. We can geek out about Roam Research.

**Craig:** Oh. Oh good.

**Zeke:** It’s kind of intimidating. It looks like something that’s almost for like computer programmers, but once you learn to use it I feel like when I open it it’s like I’m opening my favorite paper notebook and I just feel really free to write down whatever. If you don’t know it, it just opens up to a page with a date at the top and you start writing stuff down. And you can tag it with whatever tags you want. You end up creating your own personal Wikipedia that’s really easily searchable. Because at any given time I’m researching so many different topics it’s really hard to keep them straight. And this makes it super easy.

I’m starting to work on my first book which is a really intimidating organizational challenge and there’s just so many different threads to keep in the air and so many different things to research. But I feel like I feel weird giving this free ad for this software but I feel like I can do it now by using this. And that I won’t lose track of all the 18 different things that I have to research.

**John:** I think it’s great as well. So I’ve been using that. And it’s like Workflowy but with much looser organization, sort of like a very freeform taxonomy. It’s really smart. People should give it a shot.

**Craig:** There’s this incredibly elegant version of what you guys are talking about called paper. You just write stuff down on it.

**John:** Yeah, but you can’t search paper.

**Craig:** Yeah, you can. With your eyeballs. [laughs]

**John:** That is our show. Scriptnotes is produced by Megana Rao. It is edited by Matthew Chilelli. Our outro this week is by Ryan Gerber. If you have an outro you can send us a link to ask@johnaugust.com. That’s also the place where you can send longer questions. For short questions on Twitter Craig is sometimes @clmazin. I am always @johnaugust. Zeke, where can people find you?

**Zeke:** I’m @zekefaux.

**John:** We called you Zeke Faux the first time on the show.

**Craig:** Which is the coolest name.

**John:** But then we fixed it.

**Craig:** I’m bummed out that you’re not Zeke Fox.

**Zeke:** I’ll forgive you because you are so nice otherwise.

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**Craig:** Thanks Zeke.

**Zeke:** Thanks John. Thanks Craig.

**John:** Thanks Craigana.

**Craig:** Craigana.

[Bonus segment]

**John:** All right. So our bonus segment for this week we have studios that now own publishers. We have the WGA now represents both writers for film and TV but also for magazine and print journalism. Let’s talk about the remaining differences between what screenwriters do and what other journalists do. Craig, start us off.

**Craig:** Well, I mean, two different jobs. [laughs] It’s two completely jobs.

**John:** But weirdly related jobs. Like Zeke was just talking through as he’s crafting one of his pieces he is thinking about what are the hooks, what are the things. So maybe that’s distinguishing the business jobs, but it feels like how you put together a successful magazine piece is not that dissimilar to how you’re putting together a good screenplay because you’re looking for what is the reader going to take out of this, how are you building scenes, how are you building characters. All that stuff is similar, right?

**Craig:** Yeah. It is. I think the structure and mechanisms of writing a narrative piece whether it is a fictional narrative piece or a journalistically narrative piece are similar, of course. The big difference is intention. We are intending in the Hollywood business, and screenwriting, to entertain. And entertain is not a frivolous word. It means to interest, to engage. And I think the intention for journalism is perhaps to entertain and maybe that’s what the ad salesmen want more than anything, but it feels to me that if you’re going to be a journalist surely your ultimate intention is to inform. And that means you have an accountability to fact and truth whereas we do not.

We merely have an accountability to the audience and to entertainment. So those are two massively different intentions. And to me that is the shining bright line between these two jobs.

**John:** I’m going to confess something. Tell me about how you get a job writing a piece like the one we were discussing? Are you pitching that to your editor? Are you pitching it to multiple pieces? Are you getting assigned things? Talk to us about how something like the article we’ve been discussing came about.

**Zeke:** So I work fulltime for Bloomberg News which is the owner of Bloomberg Business Week. And I’ve spent ten years working there and sort of developed a specialty on the shady side of the financial industry. So, I generate ideas and then bring them to editors to see what they think of them, if they think it would be a good story, if they think there’s some worthwhile issue to expose.

And like you were saying of course we want people to read the stories, so they can’t be boring, but at the heart of it we need to think that there’s something – this is going to teach people something about the world that they really want to know. And in the case of the Andrew story this fake debt is a real problem that could be written about in a different way, but I think that by telling the story in this narrative way you can really get people’s attention and you can spur people to action.

Like even if our interest is in telling the truth and exposing wrongdoing and being informative we still need to be entertaining, otherwise no one is going to find out whatever it is you – no one is going to read to the end and find out whatever it is you want them to learn.

You had asked how you get the job and when I started at Bloomberg I wasn’t writing these long narrative pieces, but over the years of working with editors I started pitching longer and longer ideas and now often when I have an idea I think about how to do it in this way and I’ll pitch it to Business Week as a feature story.

**John:** And when you’re pitching that you’re saying it’s going to be about this many words? And how much information do you have about the story when you start? Because do you have kind of all the facts and it’s really a matter of writing it? Or is it I’m going to need to do three weeks of research and fly to these places to make this happen?

**Zeke:** It can really happen either way. You might be really at the beginning and just say there’s this area I want to explore, what do you think. Or you might have already learned much of the story and now you’re proposing is this going to be something that would be good for the magazine.

**John:** Great. So let’s talk about you going to talk with a possible subject of your story. So when you’re first sitting down with Andy how do you build trust with him about I’m the person who can actually tell the story well? What are those initial meetings like and how are you communicating because, yes, you’re trying to tell the truth and his story but you’re also trying to get him to tell you the truth and his story. So what are those conversations like?

**Zeke:** Yeah, it’s always really interesting. And so when I meet someone I might start talking with them off the record where I say like we can just talk but I’m not going to print this. Then I might say, hey, this is like a really compelling story that you’ve just told. It could really help a lot of people to learn this. Phantom debt is a real problem. I’d love to interview you and really do justice to this story and write it. But you’d have to agree to it and you’d have to sit down and talk with me on the record for many hours.

I’ll also say and you know if you agree to this this isn’t your story. I’m going to write the story based on what really happened, based on my research from all kinds of sources. Whatever I can dig up from court records, from interviewing other people, and what I end up saying might not be exactly the way that they see it. And I like to have that conversation before they agree to have the interview because I think it’s fair to the subject of the story because they can start to – I don’t want them to start to think that this is their story and that they are the ones who are going to control the end product.

**John:** So one last bit to wrap up on because a thing we all as writers have to deal with is actually getting stuff written. So, can you talk to us about the actual writing process? I’m going to achieve this minimum of words per day? What is the writing process like for you? And how do you sort of get stuff written?

**Zeke:** Well I see you on Twitter saying like it’s time to write, let’s get going.

**Craig:** You don’t have to do that.

**Zeke:** And I probably should adapt that procedure. But I mean there comes a time when I feel like I’ve turned over every rock I can think of, I’ve interviewed every single person. And I’m ready to sit down and try and write this story. Because I feel like I wouldn’t want to start writing it too early because I don’t want to become really set on my perspective before I know what happened. I have to create an outline so I can figure out all the interesting details that I heard that I really want to work into the story. Where do they fit? I can’t keep all these different true details in my head at once. I have them all written down in different places. It’s almost like an organizational task to figure out all the different things that happened. Where do they fit in the chronological order of what happened? What are the most interesting parts that I want to make sure that I get in there?

But it can be a real challenge to sort of transition from the researching to the writing because I really enjoy the researching part of it, too. It’s really fun to always be calling sources and trying to find out even more details about when Andrew called Joel to confront him or something like that. But at some point I have to kind of stop and just switch from researching to writing.

**John:** And that is an experience that everyone listening to this podcast has been through. Which is like planning is great, and at some point you actually have to get it done.

Thank you for getting it done on this article and for joining on this podcast. It was so much fun having you here to talk with about your stories and sort of the story behind these stories. So thank you.

**Craig:** Thanks

**Megana:** Thank you.

**Zeke:** Thanks a lot.

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Scriptnotes, Episode 522: Blindspots and Natural Structure, Transcript

November 8, 2021 Scriptnotes Transcript

The original post for this episode can be found [here](https://johnaugust.com/2021/blindspots-and-natural-structures).

**John August:** Hello and welcome. My name is John August.

**Craig Mazin:** My name is Craig Mazin.

**John:** And this is Episode 522 of Scriptnotes. It’s a podcast about screenwriting and things that are interesting to screenwriters.

Today on the show what do characters not see about themselves and the world around them? We’ll talk about blind spots and how frustrating but useful they can be. We’ll also discuss natural structure, the way some events in real life have an inherent order. And how that can be very helpful for your fictional events.

And in our bonus segment for premium members we’ll talk about work-life balance. Is such a thing real? As we record this bonus topic on a Sunday morning at 10am because both of us were too busy to do it during the actual week.

**Craig:** [laughs] Oh, irony. Oh cruel fate.

**John:** Cruel fate.

**Craig:** Cruel fate.

**John:** But maybe it’s a lucky accident of success and things going well is that you don’t have time to actually do the things you want to do like talk to Craig.

**Craig:** There you go. There. Let’s turn that frown upside down.

**John:** We love it. We cannot talk about anything else in this podcast until we talk about the big news of the week which was the shooting on the set of the indie film Rust.

**Craig:** Oh god. Yeah.

**John:** So an accidental shooting killed cinematographer Halyna Hutchins and wounded the film’s director. That has been sort of all the discussion the last few days in town. More details are still coming out, so we don’t want this to be forensic what actually happened. But we need to talk about overall safety on sets, firearms on sets. Craig, you and I were playing D&D when the news first came out and I didn’t want to interrupt our D&D session to talk about it, but it’s sort of all I could think about for the few days after.

**Craig:** Yeah. So they do have a general sense of what happened now it seems. But the details as they emerged were that Alec Baldwin is starring in this movie and he was doing a scene where he had to shoot a gun which obviously was meant to be a prop gun. Prop guns are real guns. Generally speaking if they have to fire they are real guns. But they are loaded with blanks. Blanks are cartridges that don’t have the slugs. So a lot of people misunderstand what a bullet is. They think the bullet is the whole long thing with the tip. The bullet is just the little tip. The long thing is the cartridge. That’s got the powder in it. And so the blanks have no actual projectile. They just have the long cartridge and a little bit of powder. We’ll say quarter load or half load or a full load if we want to make a really big bang.

And apparently he was handed a gun with an actual bullet in it. And he fired that gun and killed Halyna Hutchins. Very often the people operating the cameras are the ones who are in the most danger. And there are not just a rule or rules, but a litany of rules and procedures that you should follow. And from what I read they were not followed here at all. No surprise.

So I want to be clear for people at home. Hollywood, and this is apart from judgments about whether or not Hollywood should be constantly portraying gun fire, Hollywood has shot off four trillion rounds in the making of television and movies. There have been a few notable incidents. Branden Lee was a very sad one many, many years ago. And there’s this one. It is incredibly rare. It is incredibly rare because we follow very clear procedures. And from what I understand based on what I read those procedures were not followed here.

**John:** Yeah. So as details started coming out I was following Twitter threads from people who work on sets who are prop masters, armorers, people who would be responsible for guns on sets, and they’re saying like, wait, how could this have happened because there are so many checks and protocols for sort of whenever there’s a weapon on set, how stuff needs to be done.

So let’s take a step back and talk about what we mean by a prop, what we mean by a gun, because there are many sort of conflated and confusing terms. A lot of times if you see a gun that is never going to be fired, no one is going to be touching it, it could just be a plastic or rubber thing. That’s obviously the safest thing because nothing can actually happen with that. There are things that are simply there to be seen but not actually be touched or used in any way. Those can be fakes and that’s great and safer for everybody. There are real guns that are being used when you need to have the actor shoot the gun and you need to see the kickback and you want to see the flame. But increasingly a lot of time the actual fire at the end of the gun is done digitally, so that is another choice that can be made. So you don’t get the kickback but you get the flame and that can be fine for certain circumstances.

There are also electronic and other replica guns that have no actual, don’t fire anything but sort of look like a real gun when they’re being used. Those are all choices. But what I think the sort of bigger discussion is is that guns on set are a safety issue but there are so many safety issues on set and that’s why any time you’re trying to do anything that is a stunt, that is involving a snowball being thrown at a person, you have to have a real culture of safety around the set. And it looks like that culture of safety was not happening on the set which is probably not unrelated to the hours, to it being a non-union shoot, to it being done in a rushed way that did not prioritize people’s safety.

**Craig:** Yeah. So there apparently have been some complaints and even a crew walkout at one point regarding safety issues which is startling enough. If you have a crew walk out over anything it’s rather serious of course and needs to be examined. But of all the things you need to worry about gun safety on set is primary.

Here’s the basic procedure. The prop master works with an armorer. And armorer is part of the prop team. And they’re in charge of securing and accounting for all weapons and all ammunition at all times. That means you show up with six guns, you leave with the same six guns. Everything is very carefully logged and archived. Then you are very clear when you’re handing somebody a fake gun. It has to be announced. The first AD will announce it to the set. There is a fake gun.

The fake gun is examined by both the armorer, the prop master, the first assistant director, and then the actor to whom it is handed. Everybody agrees this is a fake gun. At that point it’s put in your holster, or you carry it around, and everyone can relax.

If there is a real gun then that has to be announced. And it has to be announced that it is unloaded, if it is unloaded. And if it’s unloaded then the prop master and armorer show it to the first AD by removing the clip and then also sliding the slide or popping open the cylinder so that we can see that there is no ammunition in the chamber. The same thing is then done for the actor who carefully examines it and then accepts it. This gun is now known to be unloaded and everybody can relax.

We go on a much more alert level when we’re dealing with any kind of loads. We don’t fire real bullets ever. I’ve never known a production to fire a real bullet. But when we are using blanks we need to know it is a quarter load, it is a half load, is it a full load. Hot gun on set. That thing gets called out across everybody. The entire crew knows when it’s going to happen.

And that gun is carefully checked. The loads are carefully checked. Everybody signs on. Everybody. Because the chain of command is responsible. Meaning if something should happen like for instance what happened on this movie, on Rust, people can and likely will be charged criminally for what happened. So everybody follows those rules to the letter. The other safety rules, and I’m putting Covid aside, have to do with all sorts of things like how we harness people when they are elevated, or how many people are allowed to be standing on a particular platform, what’s the weight load for it. How do we secure cranes? What do we do when people are walking underneath heavy things that might possibly fall?

All of this safety culture is essential because the last thing you want is for anyone to get hurt. It’s a terrible, terrible feeling. I’ve been involved in movies where people have gotten hurt and thank god in all of those cases it was – thank god, you know whenever I thank god for people being hurt – but at least they were accidents. People made their own bad mistakes, or there was just an accident. Impossible to avoid completely.

**John:** People can trip and fall. A trip and fall accident feels like a very different scale than a gun accident. And so I think one of the first instincts coming out of this was like, OK, well situations where there’s a live gun on set, we can replace those with other things so that we don’t have live guns on set as much. Sure, that’s great. But that’s not going to take care of all of the potential problems and safety issues. So I want to make sure we don’t solve this one problem and still have more accidents and injuries on set that could be avoided by really looking at putting crew safety first, looking at the hours you’re shooting, looking at how you’re setting up these productions to emphasize safety. Because this was a horrible accident that happened here but we’ve also been talking about related to the IATSE thing all of the car accidents that happen driving away from incredibly long shoots.

And I think we need to make sure that we’re not overemphasizing this one problem and forgetting about the other problems.

**Craig:** Yeah. I mean, I don’t think that the answer here is to eliminate the use of active firearms for film and television production any more than it would be to eliminate the use of active vehicles. Far more people are injured by vehicles when we’re making movies and television than by guns because in general people are really, really careful about the guns. What kind of blows my mind here is how when you’re dealing with low budget movies and you are dealing perhaps with non-union workers this is what happens. I mean, according to the Los Angeles Times prior to this incident there were three accidental weapon discharges. That’s three more than I have ever heard of on any production I’ve ever been involved in. And that was before this accident happened.

If there is one accidental discharge of a weapon someone needs to be fired. And everything needs to be re-examined. Also, apparently they didn’t have safety meetings. So every morning, every single morning – and so when you’re shooting nights you show up at 6pm, that’s you’re morning. You say good morning. It’s a very strange thing. Every single morning on our show, every day, our first AD will hold a safety meeting. The crew gathers around and we talk about the safety issues that are potentially emerging throughout the day. It is made clear where fire exits are for inside. And people are told if anything looks unsafe or sounds unsafe or feels unsafe please report it to a member of the AD team.

They didn’t have those meetings. That’s crazy.

**John:** Yeah. On a shoot that has guns.

**Craig:** Guns. That’s insane. And in this case nobody looked at this gun. Basically an armorer handed to a prop guy who handed it to an AD who handed it to Alec Baldwin. And while they were doing it people just kept yelling, “Cold gun.” That means it’s been clear of bullets. But they didn’t check. It’s crazy. It’s so tragic. And I feel so awful for Ms. Hutchins family and friends. It just makes you sick because that is so unnecessary. That is just wildly – unnecessary death. It reminds me of when that PA was killed on the railroad bridge. Do you remember that one?

**John:** I do. Absolutely. That’s another case where I believe there were criminal charges filed.

**Craig:** Yes there were.

**John:** You were not prioritizing safety. You were looking at getting the shot.

**Craig:** I believe people went to prison for that.

**John:** All right. Quite related, last week on the show we were talking about the potential for an IATSE strike. So we recorded our three scenarios for like oh there was a deal reached, so we didn’t record the fourth scenario which was like there’s a deal reached but some people are not especially happy about this deal.

**Craig:** Oh. That was folded into the scenario of there is a deal reached because that’s always true.

**John:** That’s true. There’s always going to be people who are not especially happy. I think I was surprised by the amount of IATSE members I heard talking afterwards about sort of, ah, this deal is not what we want it to be. The belief that IATSE caved too soon on things. We’ll never know what the actual possible deal that could have been reached was. And the details are still kind of coming out even as we’re recording this. We haven’t gotten a full accounting and a full picture of what the important gains were in this.

I do want to say as a podcast that’s been talking a lot about assistant pay and really looking at script coordinators and writer’s assistants, there was real progress made on that front. So the actual minimums that they are getting for that work went up from $17 to $23.50, which is progress, and that is meaningful. A concern would be that if they are not guaranteed the 60 hours they’re normally guaranteed that’s not really increasing their take home pay. So that’s going to be a thing to keep watching for is making sure they’re still being able to bill the same number of hours. But that’s progress and that’s progress at the lowest rung there, so that’s potentially really good.

**Craig:** Yeah. It’s hard to say what the full picture of the reaction is. We won’t know until they take their vote. The people who are unhappy will always be rather vocal about it. And social media tends to distort these things.

**John:** Agreed.

**Craig:** So it’s hard to tell. We will know when the vote happens. I would imagine it will be a yes by 85% or something like this.

**John:** And Craig you’ve seen that it’s not a straight normal vote. Each local is voting and it’s all added up together. So it’s a whole crazy parliamentary procedure. Actually like Electoral College basically voting system.

**Craig:** Right. So just sort of apply my 85% to the byzantine method. That’s a general sense of things. I think generally people will vote yes. Certainly as an overall union my mind would be blown if it came back no. And a lot of what happened was just trying to get everybody together on the same line. I mean, a lot of people already have the 10-hour turnaround, but some people didn’t. Now they all have it.

There’s been a lot made of the raises in relation to inflation. So inflation has been rolling along at like 1 or 2% for a long time, so the raises that we’ve been getting have been outstripping inflation, or outpacing inflation I should say. But we’ve had a spike in inflation this year where it’s hovering around 5%. So there is some concern that that kind of wage increase isn’t going to be enough. And that may be true. We have to kind of see. It’s too early to tell if we’re on an inflationary trend or not. Although, given the amount of money that the government has been spending it’s quite possible that it has all finally caught up to us. It’s been going on for quite some time. And that’s not like our rate is going to go lower.

So, it will be interesting to see what happens there. Overall IATSE wanted some things and they got some things. The most important thing they got I think out of all of this is a credible strike threat.

**John:** Yeah, absolutely. And it’s one of those classic examples of like, you know, by using power you gain power. And they actually were able to show that they could hold together and get the massive strike authorization vote and they had a union that was willing to go on strike for an important thing.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** Gives them leverage in the next negotiation and the next negotiation after that. So I think it’s an important gain on those fronts.

Speaking of numbers, we actually got an important change. So Craig, Netflix listened to you and they’ve decided to change how they measure title views.

**Craig:** [laughs] Clearly.

**John:** Because that was your concern that you thought that the two minute rule was silly.

**Craig:** Was stupid. Yeah.

**John:** And so they announced this past week they’re going to change and talking more about total hours viewed for a title and for a program.

**Craig:** It is a little weird. I was like I’d like to ask Ted Sarandos why he thinks this two minute standard isn’t an embarrassment for his company. And days later they change it. Now, obviously it has nothing to do with us. I just like it.

So share the total hours watched for any given title. Congratulations Netflix. You’ve come up with another misleading statistic to lay upon us all. Because hours viewed, certainly it’s better. So their letter to their shareholders it says, “We think engagement is measured by hours viewed is a slightly better indicator than two minutes.”

**John:** Yeah. [laughs] Well, Craig, let’s ask the question then. So what do you think is the actual – what should count as a view for you? In the Craig Mazin universe, when you get the big CEO company?

**Craig:** And they can track everything. If somebody has watched let’s say more than 75% of an episode of television or a movie they’ve watched it. That’s it. They watched it. And what they’re doing now is they’re larding it all with people who rewatch things.

**John:** For a subscription service rewatching is great because it means that you’re still staying engaged with that program. That you want to keep up that service because you love watching Friends again. And you’ll watch it again and again.

**Craig:** I guess that’s helpful internally for them to know that you’re the sort of person that rewatches Friends over and over. But if somebody watches the same movie 12 times I don’t know how much benefit that is to them, as opposed to new things. Now, people can argue about that. Regardless, they’re still avoiding, conspicuously avoiding, the way everybody else does stuff which is did they watch it or not. Yes or no. This is how many people watched this show. Not this is how many hours were spent watching a show.

So, I got to tell you I just feel like they just keep avoiding the obvious thing. We all know what it means to say, hey, have you seen Squid Game? Yes, I have seen it. Really, how many times have you seen it? That’s what I want to know.

**John:** OK, well that’s a fair question then. So how much of Squid Game do you have to have watched in order to say you’ve watched Squid Game? If you watched the first episode have you watched Squid Game? Or do you need to watch more than half the episodes? What’s the criteria?

**Craig:** The traditional way you do it is you say I’ve watched episode one and episode two. Or I have watched all of the episodes. So when a broadcaster or streamer puts numbers up they’re like this is how many people watched the first episode of such and such. This is how many total viewers we had for the run of the series. This is a very typical thing.

So what they won’t do is – Netflix won’t tell you how many people watched Squid Game, the series, or how many people watched Squid Game episode one. They won’t do it. They’ll tell you how many people watched either two minutes of it or they’ll tell you how many hours of watching occurred. It’s really weird.

**John:** Yeah. I get that. I get that it’s different. I guess I’m standing up for it in the belief that the traditional way we report like did someone watch that episode of Friends, it was important because we had advertisers who needed to know did somebody actually see my commercial. That’s actually less important now. And so while I get the sense of like you want to be able to compare apples to apples to things, I just don’t think we’re in an apple universe anymore. I think we’ve moved on. We’re in a whole different orchard. And the traditional measures are just not as useful as they used to be. And so I get why they’re not reporting that.

And I don’t think they’re actually just trying to be shady or hide anything from us. I think it’s actually just not a useful thing for them to be able to say is like this is how many people watched this episode of a thing.

**Craig:** I will agree to disagree.

**John:** Which is fine.

**Craig:** I do think that they are being slightly shady with this.

**John:** All right.

**Craig:** I do.

**John:** We’ll see.

**Craig:** But they are being vastly less shady than they were when they said if your eyeballs slid gently across your television screen as you walked from the kitchen to the bathroom you watched that show. This is vastly better than that.

**John:** We have a good follow up question from Matt. He writes, “What’s the difference between you too giving a script three pages and viewers and giving a show two minutes, asides approximately one minute? Just seems like short amount of time for both to come to a conclusion.”

**Craig:** Oh, that’s a – I would love to answer that question. Would you like to know Matt? The difference is we don’t charge you. That’s the difference. Matt, you’re not paying to hear us talk about the three pages. We’re not a paid service. So we do whatever the hell we want. We don’t have time to do all that stuff. That’s not our job.

**John:** I have a different answer. I think if I read three pages of a script I wouldn’t say I’d read the script. I would say I read three pages. But in reading those three pages I have made a decision whether I’m going to read more than three pages. And so it sort of is like in some ways tuning into that Netflix show and it’s like watching three minutes and deciding like, meh, I don’t want to watch it. And I think what we’re arguing is if I bail on that Netflix show after three minutes, Netflix you really shouldn’t count that as a view. You should count that as someone that is like, meh, this is not for me. Which is really the same experience of reading three pages of a script. Is this for me? Is this not for me? Do I get it? Do I want to read more?

So, it’s a sampler. And I don’t think it’s enough to call that a read or call that a view. Fair? Craig, why don’t you ask the next question?

**Craig:** Margaret tells us, oh, this is not a question. This is a statement. Margaret has stated, “There’s no such thing as bragging too much about kidney donation. I’m writing in because your discussion of the bad art friend kidney story missed a lot of the details that came out later that the New York Times story obscured probably to make both sides seem equally bad. Kidney donors are actively asked to promote their donations to encourage other donors. You can think that Dawn was needy and cringey, etc. but lambasting her for bragging too much about her kidney donation is actively harmful. From my sense of your values I don’t think you’d want to be part of discouraging non-directed donors that inspire kidney donor chains. Here’s an article. There’s no such thing as bragging too much about a kidney donation.” And then there’s a link to an article at Slate.

John, what is your response to this?

**John:** So my response is OK I get that. I get the point that you talk about your kidney donation to encourage other people to donate, to normalize it, and I think on the show you and I have done a lot of talking about bone marrow donation and bone marrow registry in part to sort of normalize it and get people thinking about it.

**Craig:** Bethematch.com.

**John:** Yeah. So yes I get that. And we should not overlook that as a thing. It didn’t come up in the original article so thank you for bringing it to our donation. Can something be a societal good and be cringey and annoying individually? Yes. And that’s sort of a truism that is useful for writers to be thinking about. That someone could be doing the right things and still be cringey.

**Craig:** Margaret, there is such a thing as bragging too much about a kidney donation and it has nothing to do with inspiring kidney donation or uninspiring people. Anybody that is sitting around going I’m thinking about donating a kidney but mostly because I get to brag for the next year. I just don’t think those people exist except maybe Dawn. First of all, the way to brag excessively about a kidney donation is saying that you’ve donated your third kidney. That is one kidney too many.

I think that the issue wasn’t so much that she was bragging. She set up a page and said look what I did and that to me was promotional. And hopefully inspirational to people. The problem that we had I think was that she was sending follow up emails to people saying I noticed you haven’t thanked me or acknowledged me and my kidney donation, you haven’t praised me for my kidney donation. That’s just thirsty and it has nothing to do with kidney donations.

So I think that this is a little perhaps overstated Margaret. Of course we are fully in support of organ donation. I have been a registered organ donor with my driver’s license since 1988. And we do promote and I have promoted Bethematch.com a million times. Honestly I’m not sure how I feel about just voluntarily pulling a kidney out. That’s a whole bioethical discussion that we can have on a different podcast called What Do I Do About My Kidneys. But I think maybe when you say that what we did was actively harmful is abusing the words actively and potentially also the word harmful.

**John:** Craig, a question. You are more the medical expert on the show. Of the two of us, or even the three of us, you’re the medical expert, although Megana–

**Craig:** I’m an unregistered doctor.

**John:** Megana’s family is actually all doctors. But you’re on the show.

**Craig:** It’s just that they’re licensed, I’m not. That’s the only difference.

**John:** That’s the only difference.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** My question is I know that the kidneys are involved in producing urine and doing all the good stuff to get the toxins out of your body. And I wonder if her thirstiness may come from having lost the kidney she’s actually thirstier now and that’s why she was thirsty for praise?

**Craig:** [laughs] That is potentially, possibly true. That’s really good. Yes. Everything you just said is correct. Yes, the kidneys are involved in the formation of urine. And they also send out a lot of hormones. They control and do all sorts of fascinating things. Filtering of blood of so on is mostly the liver, but yeah your kidneys are connected to your thirstiness. No question. And your blood pressure.

**John:** And also this past week it was announced that the first pig kidney transplant happened. And so that’s exciting, too. So another option for trans-genetic. Trans-species organ donation? You can’t really call it donation because the pig didn’t want to donate the kidney. But still promising. Love that.

**Craig:** I have so much anger towards the kosher rules of my religion, of my [unintelligible] religion, that I will perhaps voluntarily receive a pig kidney just to say I have it.

**John:** You don’t need a kidney. You just want an extra one inside you.

**Craig:** I want a third kidney.

**John:** Yeah. It’s just better.

**Craig:** It’s better.

**John:** And then you could donate one and it would work out well for everybody.

**Craig:** Not the pig one.

**John:** One of our marquee topics this week is on natural structures. And this idea came to us from Chris Csont. He writes the Inneresting newsletter. And his newsletter this past week was about there are so many real life events that happen that have a natural order and a structure to them that can be really helpful in terms of the stories that we’re writing. So when we had Aline Brosh McKenna many episodes ago – she’s been on so many episodes – but there’s one episode where we talked about the structure of weddings and how there’s just so many events that lead up to a wedding and all the discreet moments that happen in this specific order. That can be a really helpful framework for your movie.

But that’s not the only thing out there. So some of the other examples that we were talking through, every sporting event has an order to it. Not just the game itself, but prepping for the game, what happens after the game. Diseases tend to have a very natural order. We sort of know what the progress of diseases are. School years. Seasons. Anything that is a production we sort of know the framework of how we get from this place to that place. Camp has an order, a structure. Prom. Any bet, when you sort of make a bet you know there’s going to be a payoff to that bet. So I wanted to talk a little bit about sort of natural structures and ways to think about them and how they can be useful for our storytelling purposes.

**Craig:** Well that’s a great idea. It’s incredibly useful. You know when you’re building plots that don’t have we’ll call it a built-in plot like one of these you have a lot of stuff to figure out. When you have one of these things sometimes the hardest thing to figure out is how to just not do the obvious things that this thing is demanding you do, like a wedding. The wedding process is incredibly structured by culture. If we’re talking about American culture there is a proposal, and then there’s a bachelor party, and there’s a bridal shower, and then there’s the planning of the wedding, and then there’s the wedding itself and then there’s the night of the wedding, then there’s the honeymoon. It’s like blerg-blerg-blerg-blerg.

You have a wealth of things telling you here’s what you need to do and it has to happen roughly within the next five or six pages or so. And it can be incredibly relaxing, but also a touch confining.

**John:** Absolutely. It can be a straitjacket because you can’t sort of like go off and do this other thing because you know this next thing has to happen. Craig, 20 years into my writing career I’ve never written a wedding and the thing I’m working on right now has a wedding in it. I’m very excited for the natural structural things that happen with a wedding. And just the fact that the audience can anticipate what’s going to happen and I don’t have to tell them. It’s so nice.

**Craig:** Can I tell you, I’ve been doing this so long that I just asked myself the question have you ever written a wedding scene. And the answer is maybe? I literally can’t remember.

**John:** The Hangover movies you worked on, did either of them have a wedding in it?

**Craig:** Oh, yes, of course. Duh. There we go. OK, there’s your answer. So there was a wedding in The Hangover Part 2 and so there was a bachelor party, there was a reception dinner, there was a wedding at which Mike Tyson. Yeah, so I have worked on a wedding. You know, I wrote my first sex scene ever.

**John:** Congratulations.

**Craig:** Yeah. I’ve never written one.

**John:** You liked it.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** Not counting Charlie’s Angels, which sort of has a sex scene but not really a sex scene, have I written an actual sex scene? Maybe I haven’t. Weird.

**Craig:** This is how long we’ve been doing it. We can’t – there’s no way you can remember all. If you saw all of the stuff you’ve written that has been on the screen–

**John:** Oh, I remember a sex scene now I did. But it hasn’t filmed. That’s what it is. I wrote a sex scene that hasn’t filmed so it doesn’t count.

**Craig:** That’s just writing porn, John, for yourself.

**John:** That’s what it is. Absolutely. It was on my Wattpad.

**Craig:** Oh god. Is that still a thing? Is Wattpad still happening?

**John:** It still is a thing that is happening. It’s a lot of fan fiction and indie fiction is happening there.

**Craig:** All right. Anyway, back to this topic. So, all the ones you’ve listed are incredibly useful. The trick of them is to find a way to do them as I said that’s somewhat original. Now what you can sometimes do is if you’re dealing with plot, your story isn’t one of these things. You can borrow a kind of a structure and see if you maybe can make it analogous.

**John:** Yes.

**Craig:** If you have a story where you have some adventure exploring a new planet can you ask yourself is there a way to lay over the feeling of the big game onto this. Or summer camp? And use that strangely as a guide. It might help.

**John:** Absolutely. So you look at Rogue One which is structured kind of like a heist film.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** We sort of know what the structural beats are of a heist film. And so we don’t have to do all the work of setting it up. You can build your story into a framework that makes sense. Let’s take a step back and think about what we mean by structure. Structure is when things happen. It’s the sequence, the order of events of your story. It is sort of the how we’re getting from this place to that place.

And part of structure tends to be letting the audience know kind of what to expect and what the characters are trying to do, what they hope to achieve, when they hope things are going to happen. So when you have characters saying like I’ll see you next week we have an expectation as an audience like, oh, we’re going to file that. At some point there’s going to be a next week and they’re going to see these characters again. If we see a character going into an office, they’re going to the office every day, we have an expectation like, oh, we’re going to come back to this set again because this is the normal, this is sort of how our story is going to work. And same if you set a story at Christmas time. We have an expectation we will get to Christmas. It’s very likely that there will be a Christmas celebration at some point because you’ve established this is the kind of story in which Christmas will happen.

So, always remember that the audience is looking for a structure. And they’re going to try to find one. And if you can make it very easy for them your job is much simpler down the road.

**Craig:** Yeah. They’re also going to punish you if you don’t deliver certain things. If you are making a Christmas movie you have to have Christmas. You have to have Christmas morning. You have to have the gifts. There has to be some sense of connection to Christmas spirit. That means redemption, forgiveness, family togetherness, all the things that I hate the most in life. You can’t not deliver on that unless you right off the bat are like this is an anti-Christmas. Even if you were doing an ant-Christmas film it’s still going to end up there. That’s sort of the point of those things.

You know what? Megana, you were talking about Bollywood the other day. The big Bollywood musical, does it have a typical formula that would be easy to follow? If I watch 15 of the best Bollywood movies am I going to see certain elements repeating over and over? Or is it really just more like OK that’s a musical genre that any of these things could also be shoved into?

**Megana Rao:** Yeah, I would say the classic structure of a Bollywood film is that the two main characters meet in act one at a wedding and then there’s this big set piece of them seeing each other, meeting. And then the central conflict is that one of those characters is betrothed and already in the process of having an arranged marriage. So the sort of natural structure in Bollywood is usually that character’s upcoming wedding and whether they’ll go through with it or not. So, it’s just a lot of wedding in a Bollywood movie.

**Craig:** So Four Weddings and a Funeral in Bollywood is like 80 Weddings and 12 Funerals?

**Megana:** Basically.

**Craig:** I would actually watch that.

**John:** Yeah. The math works. You can see how it all happens. And what you’re describing is classically how a Bollywood movie works. And we should take a moment to think about natural structure as it applies to a film which is a one-time journey for a character or for a group of characters, versus a TV series which is generally the same kind of cycle happens again and again and again. And so a Christmas episode of The Office is a particular moment in those characters’ relationships. But it’s not going to have to be transformative, versus in a movie it will need to be a transformative journey. So we start one place and we come out to a completely new place at the end.

And so it’s a matter of matching what the overall needs of that genre are. Is this Christmas story going to be a complete transformation of a character by the end? They start at one moment and they come out a completely different character. Or is it going to be just like a reason for these characters to do Christmas-y things in the classic framework of that TV show?

**Craig:** And traditionally it’s the latter. So you don’t want your characters changing too much on shows that are meant to propel themselves forward year after year, like typical sitcoms, like Parks and Rec and things like that. You will have these episodes that engage in these kind of structural tropes but a lot of times it’s about the people who aren’t directly engaged. If you make a movie about baseball you need to focus typically on the baseball players and the big game at the end and who wins and who loses and how do you define winning and losing and all that. And if you’re doing a television show and everybody goes to the office picnic to play the office softball game it’s more about the people who aren’t particularly good at it and who don’t want to be there. And really the outcome of the game is utterly irrelevant because we understand that as soon as the episode ends everybody resets and goes right back to the who they were before the episode started.

**John:** We’ll also put a link in the show notes to a GQ article by James Grebey about why aren’t there more Thanksgiving movies, which is a good question to ask because we have so many, so many, so many Christmas movies, and Thanksgiving does not seem to have very many of them. Yes, there are a few which are generally about the road trip to get back to Thanksgiving, or everyone coming back to this house. I think his argument is that while we know how Thanksgiving works there aren’t enough beats to Thanksgiving. And there aren’t enough characters around Thanksgiving. It’s just sort of it’s a moment in time. It’s a meal. But it’s not actually – there aren’t enough discreet events around it as opposed to there’s all the traditions of Christmas that you can sort of build into. Or New Year’s, there’s all the stuff that goes around New Year’s. There’s just not that for Thanksgiving.

**Craig:** Yeah. And also nothing really happens on Thanksgiving. You just eat. Even on Halloween you dress up and you go out and you trick or treat and there’s I hate to say it an entire Spooky Season now.

**John:** Yes, there is. A whole Spooky Season.

**Craig:** So angry. It’s my Angry Season. I walked into CVS the other day and I’m like, ugh, Megana. [laughs] It’s happening.

**Megana:** Well I’m furious because they’ve already started putting out Christmas stuff.

**Craig:** Because they’ve got to get ready for a real holiday. You know, when god was born. Oh boy. Anyway, it’s ridiculous. So, there is a day, a single day. The day before Thanksgiving is meaningless, so there’s no Thanksgiving Eve. The day after Thanksgiving is meaningless. That’s just I don’t feel so good day. And then Thanksgiving itself is just a lot of cooking and eating.

**John:** But there’s so many Thanksgiving episodes of TV shows for exactly that same reason because it’s just one moment.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** And so it’s everyone coming together. It’s a good excuse for all of your characters to come together to have a disaster trying to make the turkey.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** And then watch the football games.

**Craig:** That’s exactly right. And then everybody goes back to exactly who they were before that. The Thanksgiving story itself has I think at this point crossed into deep problematic-ville. Yeah, we’re celebrating a holiday where people helped us and then we leave off the part where then we murdered all of them. So, America.

**John:** I still very much like this idea of Thanksgiving. I like the idea of taking a day to sort of be thankful for everything we have. I think we just need to maybe divorce it from the mythology of pilgrims and Native Americans all coming together. Because even if a meal happened it was not indicative of the overall experience.

**Craig:** And also nobody is giving thanks for anything on Thanksgiving. Legitimately.

**John:** I’m giving thanks. My family.

**Craig:** Sure. You guys do the thing. But I’m saying 98% of American families are watching football, eating too much, and yelling at each other.

**John:** Megana makes an absolutely amazing mac and cheese and green beans for Thanksgiving. And that’s why I love it so much.

**Craig:** That’s it?

**John:** Oh, those are two highlights of a Thanksgiving meal for me are Megana’s dishes.

**Craig:** Maybe I’ll steal Megana. I’ll steal her.

**Megana:** I can make enough green bean casserole for everyone.

**Craig:** It’s not the casserole Megana. It’s you. If one year John is like, oh, it’s Thanksgiving and you’re like, oh, oh my god I can’t make it this year, I’m so sorry. And then the next week I’m like, ugh, what a Thanksgiving I had.

**John:** [laughs] Megana cheated on me with Craig.

**Craig:** Oh yeah. Oh yeah. All right, I’ll work it out offline.

**John:** All right. The other topic I wanted to get into this week, this is based on an email that Megana and I got this past week. It was a real life person because we can actually apply what we learned from this email to many fictional characters is blind spots. And the person who wrote this letter clearly had a giant blind spot about sort of her place and her career and sort of things that were going on around her which we can very clearly see because we had eyes. And yet blind spots while frustrating for real life people are so helpful for our characters. And we think about the characters we use especially in movies, but also in TV as well, they tend to have these giant blind spots and through the course of the movie is getting them to see their blind spots, or in the course of a TV show like Michael Scott is him never actually acknowledging or having the insight to see his blind spots.

So I want to talk a little bit about blind spots today. And metaphorically we can talk about blind spots while driving which is that part, that space that you can’t see over your shoulder. On a strictly physical level it’s that space in your eye that actually gets no signal and so therefore your brain fills in the details and you don’t realize what you’re not seeing.

**Craig:** And do you know why that space is there, John?

**John:** Because it’s where the nerve connects, right?

**Craig:** Yes. Yes! Yes!

**John:** You’re so excited so that I have some basic – I remember that from like seventh grade biology.

**Craig:** Yes. It’s important that we retain these things.

**John:** But I also knew the APA definition of blind spot which I thought was actually great and very useful for our characters. They define it as a lack of insight or awareness, often persistent, about a specific area of one’s behavior or personality. Typically because recognition of one’s true feelings and motives would be painful. This is regarded as a defense against recognition of repressed impulses or memories that would threaten the patient’s ego.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** I like it.

**Craig:** I think typically because recognition of one’s true feelings and motives would be painful is the part people could argue with. There are a lot of people who can’t see a certain aspect of who they are because they can’t see a fake aspect of who they are. The brain has trouble examining itself the way a microscope has trouble microscoping itself. And so I think for some people they’re missing these things because they just don’t realize. They just don’t hear it the way other people hear it. Somebody mentioned to me, and we all have phrases and things that we say all the time, and we’re not aware of them ourselves.

So Neil Druckmann the other day said, “You know, I’ve started saying correct like you. It’s really annoying.” And I said what do you mean. And he said you say correct all the time. And I’ve now started – I hear myself now saying correct. And I’m like I say correct. Really?

**John:** You do.

**Craig:** Apparently I do all the time. And now I hear myself saying it. So, after that I would say correct, oh fudge. It’s happening. But until it was pointed out to me I was not repressing anything. It wasn’t painful. I just didn’t see it. I wasn’t aware of it.

**John:** Craig, how much do you know about EST and the movement of sort of like because it’s kind of anti-self-help? My recollection of sort of people talking about it was that you go into a group setting and people just point out all your flaws to you and that is a way of helping you get past them, but also just breaking you down. What’s your relationship with that philosophy?

**Craig:** I hate it. EST was started by a guy named Warner Erhard who was a car salesman and an asshole. And it became a cult. And it got reformulated and repackaged into something called the Landmark Forum.

**John:** That’s right.

**Craig:** And Landmark Forum – there were some people I knew that were pushing the Landmark Forum pretty hard on me in the early 2000s or late 1990s. And they were like you’ve got to go, you’ve got to do it, and it’s free the first time. And I’m like then what happens? And how much do you pay for it? And then they would tell me and I’m like I’m not doing that. And they’re like but it changes your life. And I’m like I don’t agree. I can just tell you that if it truly changed your life everybody would be doing this and there would be a large company doing it.

It’s the same thing when people come to you and they’re like did you hear colloidal silver will cure Covid.

**John:** Ha-ha. Yeah.

**Craig:** No it won’t. Because if it did Merck would be selling colloidal silver. There are companies much larger than people who chase the money. So anyway EST, no. I don’t believe in tearing people down. I don’t believe in that. I think that that’s harmful.

**John:** I think the reason why it is successful to get people through the door and get them coming back the second time is it’s doing that thing where it’s pointing out to people things that they don’t see about themselves. And the fact that any mirror you look into is not an accurate reflection of you are and it’s not showing you how other people see you. And that really I think is inherent to that idea of blind spots is that you have an overconfidence of who you are and how you’re presenting yourself out there in the world. And so often I think we think about character flaws as being insecurities, that people are afraid to do things, but honestly overconfidence can be a really useful trait in our characters to let them go off into the world, explore, and get knocked down and get back up again.

**Craig:** Yeah. I mean, I think about how I wrote Melissa McCarthy’s character in Identity Thief was she was brutally over-secure.

**John:** Yes.

**Craig:** She knew there was something wrong, was not going to look at it, and instead was going to paper over all of that with this other behavior. And she had a kind of moral certainty that if she wanted to do it then it was good to do. It was fine to do. And I find that characters with these very big, broad blind spots tend to be funny. They tend to work best in comedies. When characters cannot see things in dramas it’s very sad but you almost start to minimize their role in a drama because you can almost put that chess piece aside and say they are no longer capable of dealing with the drama we need to engage in because they’ve lost it.

**John:** So let’s talk about comedy and blind spots, because that’s a very natural fit. I’ve brought up The Office several times. Michael Scott thinks that everyone loves him and he needs them to love him and he doesn’t realize the degree to which his neediness is actually pushing people away and is the source of why people are so frustrated with him. That’s a great character with a great blind spot that he never actually gets over. He’s never going to actually achieve the insight that would let him move past that. He makes little nibbles at the edges, but he is never going to fundamentally get past that.

The characters on Succession. You can argue whether Succession is a comedy or a drama. They’re like fish swimming in the water and have no idea that there’s water around them. They just don’t understand sort of how toxic and dangerous they are to themselves and everybody else around them.

I Love Lucy. She always wants to be the center of the action. Every week she is getting herself into trouble because she just has this overconfidence that she’s going to be able to pull this thing off. And then every rom com, like Clueless which we talked about on the show, Cher cannot see that her actual real love interest is just in her blind spot. And that’s probably every rom com.

**Craig:** Is her much older step-brother. [laughs]

**John:** Yes. Her much older step-brother is the one she should be crushing on.

**Craig:** Oh boy. I think that when we present these things in comedies it’s very helpful for a lot of people, particularly people who are neuro-atypical, because it helps them see the other side of the conversation they never otherwise get to see. They get to see the way people talk about other people behind their backs. And this is very hard for a lot of people who are on the autism spectrum to process. Putting themselves in someone else’s shoes and seeing how things would look or feel from their perspective. So there’s a usefulness to this, to see how things might go wrong or bad, and perhaps then adjust – even if you’re adjusting somewhat synthetically and not naturally, there’s good training there.

I remember feeling like I was learning from watching shows where somebody would say something, like Three’s Company. So in Three’s Company Mr. Roper would walk in, played by Don Knotts, and he would say some ridiculous stuff, and basically all the stuff was like I’m sexy, I’m a crazy swinging bachelor. And then he would leave and then all the twenty-somethings were like blech. And I would think, ah-ha, I don’t want to be like that guy. I don’t want to be the person who leaves the room and everyone goes blech.

**John:** And when you leave the room no goes blech. They might talk about other things that they find frustrating and annoying, but no one is going blech. No one is thinking oh my god that Craig is a letch who keeps trying to be a swinging bachelor.

**Craig:** Yes. They don’t do that.

**John:** No one is saying that about you, Craig.

**Craig:** Good. I think they might say he’s an infuriating human being, but at that point as I’m walking away I’m thinking I’m an infuriating human being. I mean, I know what I’m doing, mostly.

**John:** Absolutely. Mostly.

**Craig:** Mostly.

**John:** We’re talking about Three’s Company and sort of the comedy blind-spotting, and Don Knott’s character in that is such a great example of like no self-awareness, but in drama it’s a little bit tougher. And so Megana and I were trying to think of examples. I was thinking about Queen Elizabeth in The Crown in that she actually seems to be aware that she cannot feel emotions or sort of project emotions that she should be able to do it. And the tragedy is that she kind of recognizes the things she should be able to do that she can’t do it and she’s frustrated. But her frustration is not actually getting her any closer to being able to do this thing that she feels she has to do, which is to feel the emotions of the nation.

**Craig:** You know, to me it feels like that might be more of the frustration of not having a blind spot, but not having ability. I know, I can see I need to do this. I just can’t.

**John:** Yeah. And that’s a very good point because I was trying to think about it for Big Fish as well, because both of the central characters in Big Fish, the father and the son, Edward and Will, both of them recognize that they kind of need to get over their frustrations with each other and we as the audience see they do, but they actually just don’t have the ability to do it. They literally don’t have the mechanisms to get past those things. So everyone around is like just get over it and they can’t.

**Craig:** Yeah. Like I said in drama watching somebody who is steeped in steady denial, who is incapable of accepting any other truth at some point they marginalize themselves from the story. They are no longer relevant because they’re not going to change, they’re not going to admit anything, and they become less and less integrated into the task at hand. It’s a sad thing. Usually it’s sad. We feel for that character. Whereas in comedy we laugh at them and make fun of them, in drama we accept them as just so hurt they can’t handle this.

**John:** I can also think of some villains in dramas that really if you were to dig down essentially they have a blind spot. They basically cannot see that in attempting to achieve one goal they are ruining everything else. And that is an example of a blind spot, too. They don’t recognize the consequences of their actions or that what they’re trying to do is going to have those negative impacts that we can clearly see.

**Craig:** But you know what they do recognize almost always?

**John:** Tell me.

**Craig:** Is that you and I are not so different after all.

**John:** Funny that way. That does happen quite a lot. And I’m trying to remember what the wording was in the most recent Bond movie, but it got really close to that at the end. It was a little bit…

**Craig:** You and I, we have so much in common. They’re now just avoiding saying you and I we’re not so different after all.

**John:** Lastly I want to bring up that it’s not just characters that can have blind spots. It can be whole organizations that have a blind spot. So Titanic, the blind spot is that it’s unsinkable. It’s just an unsinkable ship. It can’t possibly sink. And of course that’s going to happen. It’s a structural blind spot.

Chernobyl, that false confidence that like the system will figure it out. This cannot actually happen at one of these facilities. This meltdown would be impossible. It’s overconfidence.

**Craig:** Yes. And organizations who have that kind of overconfidence are usually represented by a kind of stonewalling attitude. It’s something that you establish and then get back to the people who are not overconfident and who are trying to fix it. Those people are just more interesting than the people who keep saying, nope, everything is fine.

**John:** Yeah. Megana, yes?

**Megana:** So would you agree that in a comedy the audience is ahead of the character’s blind spot? And in a drama the character is ahead of the audience?

**Craig:** That’s interesting.

**John:** That is really interesting. I absolutely agree with the first part. I think in a comedy we as the audience see the character’s blind spot pretty clearly pretty early on because that’s a source of a lot of the comedy. In the second example if it’s a character’s blind spot or even an organization’s blind spot maybe we do delay that and we discover it with our central character. That we expose the blind spot.

**Megana:** Or maybe it’s heartbreaking that they are aware of their blind spot but can’t overcome it.

**John:** I feel like if a character is aware of their blind spot in some ways they are – it’s not really a blind spot anymore. It’s a spot they recognize they’re not seeing properly and maybe they’re looking for an alternative way of dealing with it. What do you think, Craig?

**Craig:** I think that in general Megana your structure sounds right. Comedic characters, we laugh at them because we know way more than they do. We know how ridiculous they sound and look and act. And also we get access to people talking about them. In drama having somebody behave in a certain way and having us wonder why and then we discover why. And then we realize, oh, they have a terrible blind spot because of X, Y, or Z. That is pretty typical. So, yeah, I kind of like the way you phrased it.

**John:** And another thing I think this phrasing brings up is that it can be so tempting to have supporting characters have blind spots because that makes them funny. And I think you can run into that classic problem where the supporting characters are more interesting than you’re central character because your central character is too perfect. And so be looking for ways that your central character can have the blind spot and be the source of the comedy or the drama because of their lack of understand versus putting it all off on the supporting characters.

**Craig:** Agreed.

**John:** Cool. Thank you for that. I think it is time for our One Cool Things.

**Craig:** OK!

**John:** My One Cool Thing is about blind spots I think as well. It’s The Premise by BJ Novak.

**Craig:** Never heard of him.

**John:** He’s a guest on the show. We’ve done so many episodes of the show you wouldn’t remember that he’s ever been on the show.

**Craig:** What show was he on?

**John:** He was on one of our live shows I know for sure. I remember him being on stage with us.

**Craig:** No. No. No. [laughs] I love BJ. He’s the best.

**John:** He has a five-episode series. And what is five episodes? That’s a crazy number of episodes. It doesn’t make sense.

**Craig:** I disagree.

**John:** I guess Chernobyl did it. Maybe he’s trying to pull a Mazin and do five episodes.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** They’re five short episodes though. They’re about half an hour long. It’s on FX on Hulu, so it’s basically Hulu in the US. I’ve watched two of the five. I really enjoyed both of them. The first episode I watched was about a sex tape and racial justice and it was very, very funny. The second episode I watched was the final of the five called Butt Plug and it was about sort of this long childhood bet. And the way it kept going back and forth I thought was just terrific.

I think what I like most about this series is that it’s kind of like nothing else. It just feels like short stories that are filmed. Completely an anthology. There’s no series connections behind anything at all. But I just really loved it. And there’s just nothing else like it on TV. So, check out The Premise by BJ Novak.

**Craig:** Awesome. My One Cool Thing this week is an article in the New York Times, an opinion piece, written by Peter Coy and it is entitled College Degrees Are Overrated.

**John:** I can’t believe you posted this for us.

**Craig:** If you designed it in a lab you would have a hard time coming out with a better headline that would attract me than College Degrees Are Overrated. What he specifically gets into is the impact that college degrees have in the workforce. And this is why people essentially are told to go to college. They’re told to go to college largely so that you can get a well-paying job of your choice I suppose.

And what they have kind of found is that the idea of college degrees as a screening criterion is damaging. Because when you open up your process to look for somebody to hire for a specific job the screening of must have a college degree immediately eliminates a lot of people that would probably be better than the people that you’re going to get. Not all the people will be better than the people you’re going to get, but you’re losing people that are good. And for no good reason at all. You’ve just hit the wrong filter because college degree doesn’t say much of anything.

He’s written another article called Demanding a Bachelor’s Degree for a Middle Skilled Job is Just Plain Dumb. Correct. In fact, a lot of companies would be better served by simply promoting from within regardless of that person’s level of formal education because those people know the system, know the company, know the products or the methods, and have learned a lot of things and have already proved they can work with everybody.

The notion that we attach status to a Bachelor’s Degree is corrosive to our society and it is corrosive to people who don’t go to colleges, or who couldn’t afford to go to colleges, and for everybody else it is ladening them with debt that doesn’t actually convert. He talks to one person who talks about how his father didn’t have a college degree but was hired by a company called Detroit Edison and as he says that’s where our family’s trajectory into the American middle class began. And so this he’s talking by Byron Auguste, not August, but Auguste – much better name. You should switch over. And Byron Auguste whose dad left a job on a shipping dock to study computer programming and got hired, even though he didn’t have a college degree, had a son and Byron, his son, got a Bachelor’s Degree from Yale and a Doctorate in Economics from the University of Oxford and then eventually worked for President Barack Obama as Deputy Assistant to the President for Economic Policy.

We don’t get there if originally Detroit Edison says, “Meh, no college degree, no. We don’t care if you’re good at computer programming. Even though we’re hiring you for computer programming.” So this is its own little mini bonus episode. I think I’ve done it before. I’ll keep doing it again. We have to just stop this nonsense. Companies need to look at the skills that they require for a job and then look at the skills the applicants have. That’s the way to go.

**John:** So Craig I put another piece of bait in the Workflowy there for you. This is a piece done by Flourish and basically they’ve looked at 30,000 people with Bachelor’s degrees and looked at the return on investment for those Bachelor degrees from different universities and for different degrees.

**Craig:** Oh wow. That’s a whole lot of negatives. Woo.

**John:** Yes.

**Craig:** Oh my god.

**John:** So I’ve just ruined the rest of your day because you’re going to spend a lot of time probably digging through that and looking for – so you can search for your actual degree that you got from Princeton and see what the return on investment was for that.

Clearly there was a time where you could say like a person with a Bachelor’s degree earns this much more money. And that was probably true. All the other biases were sort of a part of that, too. It’s like the people who could afford Bachelor’s degrees were going to make more money anyway. It’s not so clear now. And I think people really need to be thinking about whether it makes sense for them to get this degree, but also especially when you’re hiring do you need to have a person with a degree in that job. Because there are people who work for me who do not have college degrees who are invaluable and just terrific. So I think we need to move past our conceptions about a college degree being required.

**Craig:** Yes. Let’s leave the certification Ponzi scheme behind.

**John:** All right. That is our show for this week. Scriptnotes is produced by Megana Rao. It is edited by Matthew Chilelli. Our outro this week is by Andrew Ryan. If you have an outro you can send us a link to ask@johnaugust.com. That’s also the place where you can send longer questions. For short questions on Twitter Craig is @clmazin sometimes. And I am @johnaugust.

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**Megana:** Thank you.

**Craig:** Thanks John.

[Bonus segment]

**John:** All right, Megana, start us off. You have a question here to kick off our conversation.

**Megana:** Yes. So Ted asks, “How do you balance your work and personal lives? In addition to writing, Craig plays videogames and does his crosswords. John watches movies, TV, and reads books. You both play D&D. You both have families with kids, participate in speaking events, and give your time to charity. How on earth do you do all of that and still focus your mind to write and do it well? What advice can you give writers to better structure their days? I’m specifically interested in knowing what your day to day looks like.”

**John:** So as I said in the setup for this we are recording this on a Sunday because both of us were too busy to record on a normal weekday.

I don’t know that I have terrific work/life balance. I guess having a family forces me into a little bit more of a schedule, so I can’t work all the time. But Craig you are so busy right now. So do you feel like you have any work/life balance?

**Craig:** Well yeah, I have a balance. Is it a good balance?

**John:** Is it healthy?

**Craig:** You know, I find that it’s not so much the time. I mean, things like production are extraordinary and you’re not in production all the time if you’re a writer. If you’re a first AD, oh boy, you sure are. If you’re working on a crew you’re in production all the time. That is a question I’d like to ask those folks how they manage these things. But for us when we’re not in those crazy periods I think after all these years the answer is I don’t think about it.

What happens is at some point there’s something in me that says you’re in trouble. You have to write. I don’t know what you call that. Super ego? Whatever it is, my need to please or just my need to accomplish something, but at some point something happens and I say I cannot, absolutely cannot do this nonsense.

There are also times where I say I’m doing nonsense today because I want to. I earned it and I deserve it.

**John:** And by nonsense you mean like play a videogame and do your crosswords?

**Craig:** Fun. Exactly. I want fun. I’m being cutesy about nonsense. It’s just as important as everything else. But I want to have fun. I deserve to have fun. If I don’t then what’s the point? I’m not here to fulfill other human being’s demands of me. I’m here to fulfill myself. And I do derive quite a bit of fulfillment from writing. But in the way I derive fulfillment of it.

I will say the most toxic aspect of being a writer is how intrusive it is in your mind. And I find myself on a drive with my wife going somewhere and suddenly it just happens. Like my brain goes wandering into a scene and I figure something out. And then she’s like you’re not – did you hear anything I just said? And I didn’t.

**John:** And from my experience in television that is much more pervasive, because you’re constantly responsible for keeping that world going in your head 24/7 because you’re always writing new stuff, which is different than a feature which you’re going to be on, but then you’re going to be off and then you’re going to be on and then you’re going to be off. I remember when I was doing my first TV show I was just this giant filtering mechanism. Everything that would come to me like could that be in the show? That song, could that be in the show? I was always gathering for this. And as writers we are always gathering but I think it is especially attenuated when you are doing your job right now.

**Craig:** Yeah. A lot of what I do, the whole story is laid out, but a lot of what I find myself doing is when I’m not writing is just thinking in the back of my mind I don’t think I have the right opening moment. I don’t know why I don’t like it, but I don’t like it. And until I like it I’m going to be a bit miserable. Because it’s like a thorn in my side that I need to remove and replace.

So the dangerous part for me is less about the time that I spend doing one thing or another, and more about how attentive and present I am at any given point. It’s scary sometimes.

**John:** Now one of the things I think you and I both do is we prioritize some free time, non-work time. So an example would be D&D. So we’re playing D&D almost every week. That hasn’t always happened because of this, but that’s three to four hours where we are just doing that and 100% of our focus is on that because you’re DMing this and I’m playing and we’re not doing the other stuff. And it’s OK partly because there’s a social contract that we’re going to try to play every week it becomes a priority and we’re not going to sort of bail on it.

So I will even on my daily schedule I’ll try to make sure it’s not just all crap I have to do, but there’s things on that daily schedule of things I want to do. So looking at my list today, I need to watch What We Do in the Shadows. And it’s like do I have to watch it? No, but I really want to watch it. And I want to watch that last episode. So that’s going on the list of like a thing that’s on my daily to do list. And it’s not just work stuff. It’s stuff that is fun for me.

**Craig:** I think we can lose sight of what brings us joy because writing is a little bit like – it’s the way carbon monoxide can take over all your red blood cells, hijack them. Our red blood cells like carbon monoxide much more than they like oxygen. And that’s why it’ll kill you. And writing in your mind can be a little carbon monoxidic – I just made up a word – because it can just choke out every other interest. The dopamine hit you get from solving a writing problem is really intense. And we have to be careful to not let it just weed through the garden of our life. We have to put it aside at times. And I mean mentally. Because everyone is sitting there going it’s easy for me to not write. Yeah, but is it easy for you to not think about the thing you’re supposed to be writing? Is it easier for you to not think about the characters or the situations or why they aren’t working or what you’re supposed to do? To me that part is the tricky part.

**John:** Some other useful advice I would offer to Ted who asked the question is having some structure in your life that gets you away from work. And so that could be that you’re going to have dinner with your family every night, which I’m able to do. That you’re going to exercise a certain amount of times per week and that you’re going to prioritize that and you’re not going to bail on those things. Because those are things that keep you present in the actual moment where you’re having to be doing the thing right now and not be off in your head writing that thing or worrying about writing that thing can be super helpful.

And as we said on the show many times don’t expect that you’re going to do eight hours of writing a day. You and I know many writers and very few people are actually writing eight hours a day. That’s just too much for your brain. You’re going to write in blocks and then you’re going to do other stuff. And make sure that the time you’re giving yourself to do other stuff is actually free time where it’s not just that pause. It’s not just the coffee break before you have to go back to it. Let yourself have some joy in those moments as well.

We’re also doing a very solitary job sometimes. Like Craig is there with a crew, but most writers are working by themselves. Make sure you’re finding some time for social interaction with friends and going out to get a drink or do whatever you need to do to get out of your head.

**Craig:** Megana, you have a writing life and a work life. Let’s hear it.

**Megana:** Oh, that is true. But I have also spent the past couple of years observing you, both of you, because it feels like you’re bending physics to do all of the things that you guys accomplish in a day. I think something that is maybe your guy’s blind spot is you both have a really strong sense of yourself. You have a strong sense of what you care about, what you don’t care about, and John doesn’t have any mugs in his house that don’t look exactly the same and it kind of like simplifies things.

**Craig:** That’s terrifying.

**Megana:** But I wonder because you guys have such clarity about the things that you want to focus on by not just wasting energy on worrying about what clothes you’re going to wear or stuff like that you guys are able to channel more energy into – no offense.

**Craig:** None taken.

**John:** None taken.

**Craig:** I have zero worry about the clothes that I wear. Zero.

**Megana:** Yeah. Like every morning when I get dressed I’m like, ugh, how am I going to wear something that’s going to reflect my internal state of being? And you guys don’t necessarily have that.

**Craig:** No.

**Megana:** But it’s nice. And you’re able to express yourselves more creatively through your writing.

**Craig:** That’s fascinating. Here’s what I have Megana. What I have is I’m looking at the Workflowy and I see that this segment is called Time Management. And while you’re talking I notice that your name is in it backwards. So that’s what happens to me. That’s where I waste my time and my energy on things like – and I didn’t ask for that. I didn’t for Megana to appear in the backwards in management. But there it is.

**John:** Oh yeah. Now I see it. That’s all your crosswording, sorry, all of your puzzling has gotten you to that.

**Craig:** Thank you. I’ve got a real problem. But I think that’s really interesting Megana that you have these other things – and by the way I would say to you that’s OK. I don’t think you should be beating yourself up for the fact that you put care and interest into what you wear because you derive joy from it one would imagine.

**Megana:** Well I mostly derive joy when John’s daughter compliments my outfits.

**Craig:** Well there you go.

**John:** Because I have no idea what she’s wearing. I could not tell you anything about her clothes.

**Craig:** No.

**Megana:** Yeah. John recently asked me if I have gotten a haircut since I started working for him. And I just cut off eight inches of my hair—

**John:** No idea.

**Megana:** And he had no clue.

**Craig:** I did notice when – so Bo had her full Covid hair, it was like past her butt. And then she did cut it and I was like, OK, I did notice that. I noticed that like a foot or two of hair—

**Megana:** Yes, she has a very cute bob now.

**Craig:** OK, I wouldn’t have known how to describe it. I would have said shorter. Her hair is shorter. But I don’t notice what she wears. I don’t notice what anyone wears. I just don’t.

**John:** So I want to circle back to a point that Megana made about blind spots is that I think I do have a blind spot and someone on Twitter was pointing out that I can have a blind spot where I assume that everyone else can do the things that I can do. Things that are easy for me I assume are easy for everybody else. And I need to recognize that it’s not easy for everyone else. And sometimes my ability to get a lot of stuff done or to juggle 15 things at once is not normal for other people and I need to not expect that of other people. And so I think I can have too high of expectations because I just have really high expectations of myself. It sounds self-congratulatory, but like Megana what do you think about that?

**Megana:** Well I would also say something that I admire in both of you is that you have really good executive decision-making where you will make a decision and use the information that you have at the time and then you don’t beat yourself up about it or waste time spiraling about that decision. You kind of like move on. And I think that momentum helps keep you guys juggling all of these things.

**Craig:** That’s an interesting point.

**Megana:** I have decision remorse about every single decision I make. And you guys are just powering through.

**Craig:** I feel like therapy is in order.

**Megana:** [laughs] I think it’s probably a generational thing. No, I can’t blame everything on generational stuff.

**John:** I see a lot of folks in your generation describing that same thing. There’s a self-confidence in your generation but there’s also a sort of weird self-doubt or an after the fact self-doubt. Or it may just be not even your generation. Just at our age you just don’t kind of worry about that stuff especially.

**Megana:** And you guys both have very different writing schedules.

**Craig:** Yes.

**Megana:** John, I am very familiar with your writing schedule, and Craig I’m sort of familiar with yours from Bo. Like when you’re not in production some days it’s just puzzles and some days it’s doing a lot of writing, whereas John is a little more every day has a little bit of both. And I think because you guys are a couple of years older than me you have–

**Craig:** Couple decades older than you. Go on.

**Megana:** You just know what your process is and then you can plan around that. And you do a good job of planning around that. Whereas I think for people starting out you kind of have to figure out what time of day your mind works best for certain things.

**Craig:** Yeah. And you do as you go on give yourself a break because you have had the experience of taking a day or two off and coming back and the world doesn’t fall apart. Megana, your generation does have this challenge that is somewhat new that I don’t think we had, John. And that is you’ve grown up in an era or an age of optimization. Where you can go on YouTube and find a “hack” for anything. And everybody is constantly sharing tips of how they do things better than everyone else to improve the way you peel an apple, take out the garbage. Everything is designed to be optimized.

So of course as you move through your day you’re constantly asking yourself was that the best decision, was that an optimal decision, could I have made a better decision? Should I have done it more like this? Should I have done it more like that? And I wish I could, and maybe this will work, free all of you from that. The answer is you can’t. You cannot optimize your life. You are inherently flawed. You are going to do the best you can which means you have to accept the failure aspect of who you are, which is really hard to do.

And you must embrace the following quote from the great Dennis Palumbo who is our friend from Episode 99. “There is no perfectible you.” And that is the opposite of what everyone in our culture tells you. There is no perfectible you. That means you make decisions, they might be wrong. Well that’s going to happen. Keep on moving.

**Megana:** Well also to your One Cool Thing, have you guys read this book The Kids Are All Right? Or The Kids Are Not All Right I think.

**Craig:** Oh, that’s a different book. That’s a very different book.

**John:** It was really a response to The Kids Are All Right. Basically it was the pro and the con. They had a heated argument on the page.

**Megana:** Basically the premise is that millennials and the generations younger than us have been primed to be these productivity machines so that they can go to the best college and optimize their resumes and then once they go to college they can get the best jobs.

**Craig:** Yes, I’ve read this. I read this and obviously you know how I feel about this. This is not new. It has accelerated and worsened, but when I was in high school there was still this intense pressure to take all these AP classes and to get a perfect 1600 on your SAT which was what it was back then. The standardized tests were incredibly important. There was really only one that anyone cared about, so you didn’t even have choices.

Your grades were incredibly important. And it was a miserable process and you were meant to feel like an absolute failure if you did not get into the school of your choice. It has only accelerated since because in part an industry grew up around this to optimize it. They optimized how you apply. They optimized what your essay is. They optimized which schools–

**John:** US News and World Report rankings. Now they’re doing it for public schools which is just crazy.

**Craig:** It’s disgusting. And I say this as somebody who went to a college that US News and World Report repeatedly lists as number one. And I’m saying no it’s not. And US New and World Report should stop it. It’s just corrosive and meaningless. What the hell does that even mean? All of it is designed to rank-ify. It is very Internet. It is very Silicon Valley. Rank everything. Status-ify everything. And then game-ify everything. And that will make you sick I do believe.

**John:** My last point on time management is that time management is impossible. You can’t manage time. Time will just keep going. So all you can manage is your choices. And so Ted’s question could be rephrased as like how do you make good choices with the very limited amount of time you have. And I think you’re picking how much of your life you’re going to spend doing the work and hopefully making meaningful work, and how much of your life you’re going to spend having fun, which is playing D&D and chatting with friends. And that’s the best you can hope to do.

**Megana:** Aw.

**John:** Aw.

**Craig:** I agree.

**John:** Craig, Megana, thank you so much.

**Megana:** Thank you.

**Craig:** Thank you [management spelled backwards].

**Megana:** I’m never going to be able to look at management again.

**Craig:** Good. I’ve done my job.

**Megana:** I do like that my name is backwards though, because it does showcase that I’m bad at management. [laughs]

Links:

* [Rust Movie Set Shooting](https://www.nytimes.com/2021/10/21/us/alec-baldwin-shooting-rust-movie.html)
* [Netflix to Change How It Measures a Title’s Viewers Post-‘Squid Game’](https://www.hollywoodreporter.com/tv/tv-news/netflix-change-public-viewer-reporting-1235033741/)
* [There Is No Such Thing as Bragging Too Much About a Kidney Donation](https://slate.com/technology/2021/10/bad-art-friend-kidney-crisis-donation-altruism.amp)
* [Episode 480, The Wedding Episode](https://johnaugust.com/2020/the-wedding-episode)
* [The Premise by BJ Novak](https://www.fxnetworks.com/shows/the-premise)
* [College Degrees are Overrated](https://www.nytimes.com/2021/10/18/opinion/college-degrees-employers.html)
* [What is the Financial Value of my Degree?](https://public.flourish.studio/visualisation/7583742/)
* [Kids These Days: The Making of Millennials](https://www.amazon.com/Kids-These-Days-Making-Millennials/) by Malcolm Harris (not the Kids are Alright!)
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Scriptnotes, Episode 521: Action Density, Transcript

November 8, 2021 News, Scriptnotes Transcript

The original post for this episode can be found [here.](https://johnaugust.com/2021/action-density)

**John August:** Hey it’s John.

**Craig Mazin:** And Craig.

**John:** So this podcast has some of the most swearing I think we’ve ever done on a podcast. It wasn’t intentional. It just ended up being a really high density of swear words. Just I wanted to warn you about this ahead of time.

Hello and welcome. My name is John August.

**Craig:** My name is Craig Mazin.

**John:** And this is Episode 521 of Scriptnotes, a podcast about screenwriting and things that are interesting to screenwriter. Today on the show we’re exploring how writers describe action on the page, looking at both samples from movies you’ve seen and brand new three-pagers sent in by our listeners. We’ll also follow up on IATSE which may or may not be on strike as you’re listening to this. And check out more updates on a certain predatory writer.

And in our bonus segment for–

**Craig:** [laughs] What a great intro. You don’t want that to be the way people describe you in a topic.

**John:** A certain predatory writer.

**Craig:** A certain predatory writer.

**John:** I’d like to introduce you to my friend, Bob. He’s s certain predatory writer.

**Craig:** A certain predatory writer.

**John:** In our bonus segment for premium members we will talk scary movies and our experiences with them as writers and as viewers. And I think Megana is also going to expand the topic into sort of things that were scary to you as a child that are no longer scary to you, or interesting to you as a child that you’ve moved on past. Because we got into a big discussion of the power of the Pyramids which was a thing that I knew of that Craig you probably did but it’s a generational split. She had never heard of this.

**Craig:** Yeah. I mean, it was pretty marginally even when we were kids. I think at least.

**John:** I think it was tied up with the Egyptology boom, with Tutankhamun’s tour.

**Craig:** Ah yes. Of course. Makes sense. I mean, it’s Spooky Season. We should try and fill that stuff out as much as possible.

**John:** We have to sell people on the premium content. Guys, this is how Megana’s salary gets paid. So we’ve got to keep up the premium content.

**Craig:** So two of you are making money off this. That’s great.

**John:** That’s the whole goal.

**Craig:** It’s awesome. Two of us are making money.

**John:** But money is also at the crux of the IATSE negotiations.

**Craig:** Segue Man.

**John:** So as we’re recording this on Saturday we have no idea what is happening in the negotiations. Will they reach a decision by the Sunday deadline? Will IATSE go on strike on Monday? Craig, I was thinking maybe we could just record versions of the possible outcomes and we’ll just use the correct one or all three of them in this.

So let’s lay out the three scenarios here and maybe Matthew in post if you could just put a little ding on the one that actually was the correct thing that actually happened so we’ll know what it was.

**Craig:** Ding.

**John:** Ding.

**Craig:** Ding.

**John:** Craig, were able to reach an agreement on Sunday night.

[Ding, Ding, Ding]

Tell us what you think about the agreement they were able to reach.

**Craig:** Not a surprise to me. This is what I’d predicted all along. And it is by and large an agreement that gives IATSE what they needed, not necessarily what they wanted but what they needed to put a pin on striking for now, but I do think that they have figured out just how powerful they are which is a huge deal.

So congratulations to IATSE. And to our industry for continuing on. This was a big win for them and honestly a win for everybody that cares about a reasonable humane workplace.

**John:** Scenario two. So an agreement was not reached and it is now Monday, or Tuesday as this episode comes out. We’re two days into a strike. Craig, tell us what you’re thinking and feeling right now?

**Craig:** I’m pretty stunned. I had predicted that this would not happen. The reason it happened is because the AMPTP is out of their goddamn minds. They are insane. What the IATSE was asking for was reasonable. They couldn’t figure out how to give it to them so now we are toast. And we’re not toast for a little bit. We’re toast for a while. And furthermore IATSE is never going to stop striking until the AMPTP gives them what they want, as they should, and will. So eventually they’re going to get the deal that the AMPTP could have just given them yesterday, or two days ago.

So AMPTP, you idiots.

**John:** Absolutely. So in this scenario two environment we should also say that future episodes we’ll talk about the impact that is on writers and also the guidance being provided to writers in writer’s rooms. All of the stuff that script coordinators and other folks who were IATSE members in those writing environments we’re doing which are now not being done. So we’ll get into that. But let’s move into scenario three which is that we did not reach an agreement but we did not go on strike because they are still talking. Basically they kicked the can for a little bit. So, Craig, now that it’s past this deadline but we’re still not on strike how are you feeling?

**Craig:** There’s not going to be a strike. They needed extra time to work out the deal. But you only ask for extra time in a situation like this when you absolutely know you really need it just to finish off what’s going to be a win for IATSE. They were pretty clear that they to put a hard deadline on it. They wouldn’t be extending it if they weren’t super-duper close and just dotting Is and crossing Ts. That’s my feeling.

**John:** So obviously all negotiations are about money, the IATSE negotiation about money, but it’s also about the incredibly long hours that crews are working on these shows and on these sets and how dangerous that can be. And the devastating impact it can have on family life and the ability to have a life that is meaningful. We got a couple emails in this week. I wanted to single out one which is about the very long hours being worked on a movie that’s in production here in Los Angeles and a car accident that happened as a member was driving back from set after an incredibly long day.

I remember driving against rush hour traffic as the sun was coming up. I know how dangerous that is. It seems like an exaggeration to talk about life and death scenarios here, but it really is dangerous to be working so many hours, especially at the end of a long week. And that we really are talking about basic safety things here.

**Craig:** Yeah. Unlike most people who work late shifts, crews don’t regularly work late shifts. They just work them sometimes when the show needs to shoot stuff at night. So when you’re in production you go into these short term late shifts. Sometimes they last three days. Sometimes they last three weeks. In terrifying instances they last longer. But it is incredibly disruptive to your mind and body. And then when you add on top of that absurdly long working hours it’s a recipe for disaster. And remember not only are crew members driving to work and driving home from work, but a lot of them are working with dangerous equipment on set. Scissor lifts and cranes and all sorts of stuff. And you don’t want to mess with that sort of thing when you’re exhausted. I mean, there have been enough studies to show that when you are severely sleep deprived you are just as bad as somebody who is drunk.

This is not surprising to me. There’s an entire documentary about it by Haskell Wexler. That’s what kills me about this whole thing is nothing that IATSE is talking about is new. I mean, the Writers Guild comes up with new things to talk about because our business changes and suddenly there’s SPAN and mini rooms and stuff. This has been going on forever. Forever. They’re finally – I’m so happy that they are doing something about this. It is nuts. It’s nuts.

**John:** One thing this letter writer wrote in about is that there is a policy about getting hotel rooms for crew members after the end of a long day which is not a great solution to the real problem. It’s a Band-Aid. Because no crew member is showing up to set thinking like this is what’s going to happen that I’m going to take a hotel room. They’re doing it for the basic safety thing after too long of a day. So get those hotel rooms and make them available, great. But basically don’t go to those hours where people need to use those hotel rooms is a better plan.

**Craig:** Yeah. Nobody is leaving to work packing a bag because they think they’re going to be staying overnight somewhere else. Plus they have wives, they have husband, they have children. They want to go home. Sometimes they have to go home to take care of children. It’s unconscionable. And it’s unnecessary.

**John:** Agreed. More follow up. Last week on the show we talked about a Twitter thread by Ariel Relaford and she was describing this older writer who had brought her in on possibly false pretenses to work through this character and this thing he was writing. He was trying to give advice and it became clear that it was a bad situation and that she was not alone in the situation. Other writers had the exact same experience with this one guy.

This past week we got at least two emails in from other writers who this guy had similar encounters with. So we now know the guy’s name. We’re not going to say the guy’s name because we don’t want to get sued. But we’re going to call him Frank for the purposes of this show. We know his credits. His credits aren’t great. And I want to talk about him specifically but also as a general case because if this guy exists there’s other people like him and to just help point out what he’s trying to do and how to be on the lookout for guys like Frank.

**Craig:** We aren’t going to say your name this time, sir. But you can’t be sued for telling the truth. And the truth is we have received a number of communications regarding you. Naming you by name. So, if we were to report that we received those that would just be a fact. So consider this all a shot across the bow and a warning to cut it out because we know who you are.

**John:** So let’s get into some specifics.

**Megana Rao:** Eli writes, “I wanted to write and give you a little more context about how he operates and how I got pulled into the cult. I’m an aspiring writer trying to get my foot in the door. Right after college I went to Asia and worked in a big Asian film hub as a story development intern at an entertainment company. When I returned to LA I had a hard time finding an entry level job. They all required one to two years’ experience answering phones, managing schedules, etc. Then someone presented Frank to me. The deal was I go to Frank’s house and do three hours of personal assistant work. In return he would read my work and give notes. It sounded like a chance to fill out a resume while learning from someone with more experience than me.

“He has anywhere from six to 12 assistants at a given time. I signed up. I did the assistant work and sent him work for review. His notes were tough but mostly fair. But he also left little barbs that would make me feel shitty about myself. I wrote it off as the shitty feeling one gets after receiving any notes. He also does brain trusts several times a week. These are three hour sessions of notes and feedback on his work. The reward was 10 to 15 minutes of him giving notes on our work. He didn’t require these and we didn’t have to stay the whole time.

“He cultivates a feeling that if our work impressed him enough he could get us a foot in the door. I tried to stick it out. I’d give him notes on his projects and would take whatever good notes he gave. I walked away from every meeting though feeling like crap. I resisted going to the next session that made me feel like a failure who couldn’t handle notes from a dick. It also made me feel like I might be missing an opportunity. He was a squatter in my brain and I just couldn’t shake him loose. My wife saw through him right away. When she heard the podcast she said bravo I feel so vindicated. Fuck that guy.

“She asked me to write you an angry thank you letter and by the way he also uses Final Draft and pushes his minions to buy it as well.”

**Craig:** OK, well this means war.

**John:** [laughs] Terrible behavior to individuals is one thing, but pushing Final Draft on helpless people? Come on.

**Craig:** It’s a war crime. Couple of things that jump out. One is that this is sociopathic behavior. So normal people who experience things like shame and empathy don’t enlist six to 12 human beings to work for them for no money. This is not an individual we can tell you that is particularly prominent in our business. In fact, I would suggest marginal is the best description. Whatever doors he could help people get feet into I don’t think they’re particularly impressive. And generally speaking people who cannot afford to give money to assistants aren’t real.

Personal assistant work is ultimately useless for any kind of Hollywood experience. And what he’s giving in return isn’t even anything in return because what he’s saying is I’ll give you notes on your stuff and you’ll give me notes on my stuff. That’s the fair trade. Where does the “and also you’ll be my personal assistant” fit in? What? What?

**John:** So, Craig, I look at this and I think back to interns and sort of how interns were used and the horror stories we’ve heard about people working as unpaid interns in places and just doing menial grunt work. And sometimes interns at least they felt systematized. There was some sort of umbrella thing over them that was either an academic program or some sort of corporate system here. But this is just a one-on-one relationship with this person and the cult leader thing is I think a useful way to think about it. Because he’s negging you. He’s counting on you feeling a bit like shit, like you’re maybe not worth it. That you have imposter syndrome. That you just don’t believe that you actually could do this thing. Whereas he has really minor credits, but seems to know what he’s talking about.

And you know what? Maybe some of his notes are good. And I remember early on in my screenwriting career there was a person who was senior to me who would read my script and she would give good notes, but she also kind of wanted to insert herself into my life in ways that were not healthy or good. And I recognized this as, I don’t want to say sociopathic, but it’s problematic behavior. And this guy or any other person who is trying to do this kind of thing with you, you’ve got to be on the lookout for it.

**Craig:** Well I think that people are. The problem is that they get suckered in by something that seems to make sense. Everyone is drowning out there looking for some kind of life preserver and this is a guy disguising himself as a life preserver. But he’s not. And you’re absolutely right. There are lots of unpaid internship programs that you and I believe take advantage of people who ought to be paid for what they’re doing. But at a minimum they are typically at a place of business. So you are being exposed to meetings and decision-making and interoffice memoranda and possibly production. You’re learning something hopefully.

**John:** Yeah. You’re literally in the room where it’s happening, where stuff is going on and you can sort of pick it up by osmosis, but if you’re just going over to this guy’s house and like, you know, reading a script and he’s reading your script, you’re not getting any place. You’re not getting anywhere.

**Craig:** You’re learning where the local dry cleaning places are because you’re going to take his clothes there and bring it back. And at this point I’m like I hate him so much. OK, so, hopefully we didn’t hear anything else and nobody else had any complaints. Is that right, Megana?

**Megana:** Unfortunately not. So this one actually came from a friend of mine.

**Craig:** Oh, OK.

**Megana:** And she said that she was listening to Scriptnotes and she’s been burned by the same guy. DM’d one of the girls on the Twitter thread and confirmed it was the same person. She says, “He seemed to have stepped up his game. He put a call out for writer’s assistants for a project he had in development. Of course I put my hat in the ring. But effectively he negged me so hard into the fact that I had no experience in TV in LA despite the fact that I had been an intern page and assistant at NBC, Letterman, and PBS. He said I was totally unqualified and I clearly needed mentoring. He proposed that I do some light personal assisting work for him in exchange for mentoring hours.”

**Craig:** Oh my god.

**Megana:** “I thought to myself, screw it, you never know. So I did it. After 30 hours of doing things like picking up his dry cleaning and picking up dog shit out of his carpet.”

**Craig:** Oh god.

**Megana:** “It became apparent that he was dodging my request for even one single sit down. He suggested I get a graduate degree in screenwriting at the program he, surprise-surprise, was an instructor at. I literally have my MFA from NYU. Fortunately I happened to get offered a day job and called him to inform him that I would no longer be able to do this work. He screamed at me and told me that I wasn’t taking any of this seriously enough and I was destined to fail.”

**Craig:** You can’t do this to people. You can’t. You can’t pretend like you’re somebody that matters when you’re not. And you certainly can’t have people picking up dog shit out of your carpet in exchange for what. You’re not even paying them.

**John:** That’s what I’m talking about the umbrella of an institution, like yeah there are bad teachers at schools but if this friend of Megana’s was taking a class there and he was not a good professor or his notes were weird, OK. There’s a social contract there in terms of what a professor and student are doing. This is not an acceptable social contract for you to be doing this grunt work in exchange for hopefully getting some read on your material.

**Craig:** All he’s doing is just suckering people into painting his fence. That’s it. He’s just like come on over, do my dishes, do my dry cleaning, pick dog shit out of the carpet. Do stuff I don’t feel like doing. And in return I’ll give you something that is ultimately valueless which is my mentoring. Trust me, you don’t need this guy mentoring you. He needs somebody to mentor him.

**John:** I wonder if he listens to the podcast.

**Craig:** I hope he does. Because now we know dude. Now we know.

**John:** Well we know your name. So write into the podcast and tell us your side of the story. I’m fascinated to hear it.

**Craig:** Yeah. Even better, come on the show. Come on the show because it always works when people–

**John:** It always works. I remember the Final Draft episode. It did wonders for Final Draft.

**Craig:** Yes. You love Final Draft. Why don’t you do what they did? Come on the show and look me in the eye and explain all of this. I’d love to hear it.

**John:** Yup. All right. Let’s get into our marquee topic here which is about the density of action writing on the page, because this is a thing that we’ve talked about obliquely over the course of 500 episodes, but we really talk about the feeling of reading a page and sort of how intimidating it can be to have a big chunk of action there. And as a reader you might be tempted to skim or skip over pages. So we tend to argue for shorter blocks of action lines.

But our mutual friend, Kevin, sent through this great thing this past week which was these scenes from classic movies and the trick behind this is you’re supposed to identify what movie it was just based on like one paragraph of the action.

**Craig:** Can we do it? I want to play the game. Because I didn’t look at any of these.

**John:** Oh, great, fantastic. So because I not only prepped for the show but also read emails that our friends send–

**Craig:** Weird.

**John:** I know the answers to these things. So what we’ll do is we’ll put in the show notes links to these and these are just images of screenplay pages and you read through them and you figure out what is this moment from. So this first one is going to be very easy. We’re looking at a single paragraph and I’m not going to read the whole thing out loud.

**Craig:** First word gives it away. So the very first word is Satipo. So that’s Raiders of the Lost Ark.

**John:** Yes. So but the paragraph below it I think is really interesting. So this is a Lawrence Kasdan screenplay. Lawrence Kasdan has come on the show. And we’ve done a whole special episode on Raiders of the Lost Ark. This is a very dense single paragraph of scene description and action talking through the moment in which Indiana Jones is deciding how much weight to put in the bag as he puts it on there to take the idol off. And it’s just describing what happens there. It’s actually a great description of it, but it’s not sort of our typical advice about sort of how dense a block should be because it’s super, super dense.

Craig, what are you reacting to as you read this.

**Craig:** It’s brilliant. It just needs a couple of carriage returns as we like to say. A couple of paragraph breaks. But obviously back in the day I guess people had longer attention spans. There was no Internet so everybody could read a little bit more than they can now. But it’s beautifully written, even though Larry you misspelled the word altar. I’ll allow it. But it’s a great description. Lots of directing on the page which I love to see.

And it also includes reference to sound, which I love. Really terrific.

**John:** Yeah. So he balances the bag a couple times in the palm, concentrating. It’s clear he wants to replace the idol with the bag as smoothly as possible. So you really get a sense of exactly what’s happening and why it’s happening in ways that we should be able to see it when we see the movie, but if we didn’t put it here on the page we might not really get.

**Craig:** Yeah. It’s beautifully done.

**John:** The next sample that Kevin sent through, and I should say that this was all from a trivia competition called Learned League. And so it was a thing that they sent through. So these are scripts that they found but they curated them. We’re drafting off of their hard work.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** The second sequence is much more like what I think you and I are classically describing when we’re talking about action writing. So this is talking about a character named Butcher. There’s a lot of dash-dashes to separate out single lines of things. The biggest paragraph we see here is four lines long. It’s full of we sees and we hears. And we continues. There’s so much we in here I can’t believe that this is a screenplay that anyone would take seriously.

**Craig:** [laughs] It’s really hard, right? I mean, it just doesn’t seem possible. This is almost certainly Hurt Locker.

**John:** It is Hurt Locker.

**Craig:** And this is somewhat typical, like you said, action writing. It’s very reportorial. It’s bullet-y. And it’s beautifully done. Lots of directing on the page which I love. And color. Motion. The world around the action. Really well done.

**John:** It’s just great. And I would say you and I grew up in time when we were reading James Cameron scripts. This very much reads like a James Cameron script in the sense of the flow on the page and how we’re getting into the action and being really present in moments. We’re not inside a character’s inner mental state, but we really are describing what it feels like to be in the audience seeing this thing on a screen.

Now a completely different example, Craig this is pretty short. Do you want to read this next one aloud?

**Craig:** Sure. It says, “He wears rider jeans, cowboy boots, a plaid western shirt, and a worn beige Army jacket with a patch reading King Kong Company 1968-70.

“He has the smell of sex about him: Sick sex, repressed sex, lonely sex, but sex nonetheless. He is a raw male force driving forward; toward what, one cannot tell. Then one looks closer and sees the evitable. The clocks spring,” it says sprig but I think it means spring. “The clock spring cannot be wound continually tighter. As the earth moves toward the sun,” then it’s redacted name, “moves toward violence.”

**John:** What do you got there?

**Craig:** Well, this is a guess. And I’m guessing just from the Army jacket that this is–

**John:** I’m 90% sure it’s Midnight Cowboy.

**Craig:** I don’t think it’s Midnight Cowboy. You might be right. I think it’s something else. The reason I’m embarrassing myself is because he doesn’t wear a plaid western shirt as I recall, nor does he wear rider jeans or cowboy boots. I think you’re probably right that it is Midnight Cowboy and he’s describing Jon Voight I guess. But I’m just going to take a swing and say Taxi Driver.

**John:** So different Craig. This is not a kind of thing that we typically see here. He has the smell of sex about him. It’s not a scratch and sniff movie, so smell seems like a weird thing. And yet this is such a useful character description and a useful way of establishing this is a very different kind of character than we typically see in a movie. This is what he feels like. If this were a Three Page Challenge I guess we would be responding a bit to sort of like you’re putting a lot there on the page that’s hard to film and yet I do like it. I like that I’m getting a sense of what is unique and special about this character.

**Craig:** Yeah. I mean, there’s a lot here. And I guess you could sort of take it as inspiration for casting more than anything else. There is no way to film “the clock spring cannot be wound continually tighter as the earth moves toward the sun,” which by the way it doesn’t. It moves around the sun. But regardless “as the earth moves toward the sun this person moves toward violence.” There’s no way to show that. So that probably would just be demonstrated through the reading of the script. But this is not uncommon.

I think in the ‘70s and ‘80s there was a bit more of that than there is now. Going off of nothing more than Army jacket, literally nothing more than that, I’m guessing Taxi Driver.

**John:** That is a fair bet. I was originally guessing Midnight Cowboy because I got too tripped up on the sex thing. I thought it was a sex worker kind of thing. It’s not the kind of character description we’re used to. I was wrong, it was Taxi Driver rather than Midnight Cowboy, but you’re describing the central character who we’re going to be spending a lot of time with. It’s worth it to spend those extra lines to describe what it’s going to feel like to be with this character.

**Craig:** I got to tell you what’s really interesting about this is that the first part I don’t recall in Taxi Driver that he’s wearing cowboy boots or a plaid western shirt. He might have been. I definitely recall the Army jacket. The second paragraph just for me is not reflected in the movie that Scorsese made. You don’t get the smell of sex about Travis Bickle. You get the smell of loser and anger.

**John:** Yeah. You get repression and lonely. But yeah.

**Craig:** Yeah, this feels a little thrusty. It feels a little too thrusty to me. Yeah.

**John:** This next example, see if you can guess what this is. But we’re opening in this hotel. We see this family come into this hotel. Do you recognize this? Or you may have seen this in the movie itself.

**Craig:** Let’s see. It’s a family that arrives in a hotel. There are two children. No, I don’t know who this is.

**John:** Do you think it’s a relatively recent movie or an old movie?

**Craig:** This feels newer.

**John:** And why does it feel newer?

**Craig:** Because the way that the – well, I’m cheating a little bit. There’s a slug line here which looks fairly newish. And the reveal in all caps is something that I do all the time. The capitalizing of raining heavily and two children and dripping wet feels more modern to me. So that’s why I feel like it’s more of a modern–

**John:** This is Crazy Rich Asians. So it’s a very modern script.

**Craig:** Oh, incredibly modern.

**John:** And this is absolutely 100% a script you would read in 2021. This is very much how things feel on the page. And so the paragraphs are, there’s some four and five sentence paragraphs, but nothing feels like a chore to get through. There’s a good use of upper case to call things out, not just sound effects, but really focus attention here. It’s great and it reads really well. “REVEAL we’re in the lobby of an ostentatious hotel.” So again a big movie that did great. Got that we in there.

**Craig:** Love the we. We feel so good.

**John:** Yeah. This next one is a favorite of mine. Maybe I’ll read this one aloud. “Hot city night montage. The block. We’ve seen it in daytime, but now we see it at night. Even though the white hot sun is gone nonetheless the heat is still stifling. And in a peculiar, funny sort of way it’s worse. You expect it to be hot during the light of day when the sun is beating down on the cement and tar, but at night it should be considerably cooler. Well, not tonight. It’s hot. All the residents of the block,” names redacted, “all the people we’ve seen throughout the day are now coping with the nighttime heat. Plus it’s humid as shit. Everyone is outside sitting on stoops, on cars, and you know the kids are playing, running up and down the block. Now is the hottest night of the year.” Underlined.

**Craig:** Sounds to me like Do the Right Thing.

**John:** It’s got to be Do the Right Thing.

**Craig:** Got to be, right?

**John:** And it’s just so great. And this is a moment that’s transitioning between the daytime and the nighttime. There’s so much here you can film but it’s also just so important to show this transition, this change from one thing to the next. It is labeled as a montage so obviously there’s going to be shots within it. I just thought it was great writing.

**Craig:** Yeah. For sure. And again in the modern format this would be broken up more on the page. It wouldn’t be a big long paragraph. But it does a great job of using weather which is an enormous factor in Do the Right Thing. And so it’s established here and it is filmed, it is played beautifully. And also it used, I don’t know if you noticed “Now we see it at night. All the people we’ve seen.” Huh. If it is Do the Right Thing how did Spike Lee ever get past the no “we see” rule?

**John:** There’s also second person pronouns. “You expect it to be hot during the light of day when the sun is beating down.” He’s go the we’s, he’s got the you’s, he’s breaking all the rules.

**Craig:** Oh my god. Breaking all the rules.

**John:** Breaking all the rules. But it’s great. And it is dense. You would not typically see this thick of a block of text in a script in 2021. And yet it still works. And I think if the rest of the script around it is great and you got to this moment, this is probably 80 pages into it, you’re going to keep reading. Because it has confidence, too. There’s a voice to it. The scene description has a voice. It feels like the movie has a point of view which it clearly does. It’s just great writing.

**Craig:** Agreed. Well that was fun. I like that game.

**John:** That was fun. Yeah, I like that game. So there’s lots of different ways to sort of show action and scene description on the page. And in each of these cases just these moments without dialogue, without character names in them really did feel like the movies that they came from. There’s other examples we could include. There’s a moment from the end of The Usual Suspects which McQuarrie does a great job of making you feel like you’re in that room as you’re piecing together what must have actually happened and what story was being told.

We talk about how important the word choices you’re making on the page are. These are just really three good examples of those.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** All right so those were examples from professionally produced screenplays. Let’s turn our attention now to the three page challenge which is where we invite our listeners to send in three pages from their screenplays. Craig and I discuss what we see on the page, what was fantastic, what could be better. I remind everybody this is invitation only, so these are people who wanted to send pages to us. Megana reads through all of them. And this time Megana specifically wanted to see scary scenes, spooky scenes, scenes that could be in a thriller, a horror movie, so we’re going to try to be a little bit season focused here because it’s really about the Spooky Season.

**Craig:** Spooky Season. God.

**John:** Now Megana one thing you did notice in here which actually prompted our discussion of action on the page, a pattern you saw about people having too dense of action lines, or how they were breaking up stuff on the page.

**Megana:** Yeah. So I read through about 180 of these.

**Craig:** Good lord.

**Megana:** And they were super creative, like really great. So fun to read. But something that I just kept running into was that I was getting very dense paragraphs of action lines. And I couldn’t tell if it was because people felt pressure to jam a lot into these three pages. But you know it’s something that you talk a lot about in visual art or poetry, like the way that form and content meet each other. And even though a screenplay is not the final piece of art I was hoping that you guys can talk about how the screenplay format can lend itself to also create a sense of rhythm and movement as you are reading them.

**Craig:** Yes. Yes. Yes!

**John:** We’ve been harping on this really since the beginning which is that you’re trying to create the experience on the page of what it would feel like to be in that movie theater seeing it. And when there is fast-paced action that’s why we go to shorter lines. That feeling like you’re right there in that moment. Also I see here on the Workflowy you have links to the Friday the 13th script, the Scream script. Take a look at those and they’re really good writing on the page and they’re not big blocks of action. It’s very much I think what we’re describing in terms of like a modern screenplay format of shorter, tighter, punchier action.

**Craig:** It’s especially important when you’re writing scenes that are scary. Everything is about silence in between noise, about suspense. You can’t just dump a bunch of words on the page and think that you’re going to be creating the tone you want to create. So the shape of the page, literally what the page looks like can help set the tone for what the movie will feel like. I believe this in my bones. I think about it all the time. I spend a stupid amount of time sculpting these pages to look correct. And it is very important I think when you’re dealing with scary stuff to use white space. The white space on the page is your friend. It’s the silence between the notes. It’s incredibly important. It’s the rest in the measure.

And so while you can certainly “get away” with these big bricks of text, they are less likely to be problematic or objectionable in say a kind of heavy historical biopic than they would be in something like a horror film.

**John:** Yeah. Now we have three examples here to look through. We’re going to start with Fractal Forest by Nicholas Nyhof. And if you’ve like to read along with us we’ll have links in the show notes to the PDFs so you can actually see the real pages here. But if you’re just driving in your car Megana could you give us a quick description of what happens in these three pages?

**Megana:** Mike and Jen hike on a forest trail. They see a deer. Mike takes out his camera to take a picture which scares the deer away. As they continue walking they excitedly banter about their future child. Suddenly, Jen discovers Mike has disappeared. She walks off the trail searching for him. She sees flashes of him in the distance through the trees. Meanwhile, Mike zips up his fly and returns to the trail but discovers Jen is missing. In the woods Jen has caught up with the Mike figure who keeps his back turned to her. The figure yells that Mike will abandon her and she will be a terrible mother. We cut back to the trail where Mike unsuccessfully tries to reach Jen’s cellphone.

**John:** Great. Looking through these pages, let’s start with the density of action on the page. It’s not that the paragraphs are too dense. There aren’t any paragraphs that are more than three or four lines. A problem I had, Craig, and see if you felt the same thing is that Nicolaus was interrupting his dialogue too often with action lines and I had a hard time getting any flow of dialogue actually happening because we’re constantly interrupting things.

So if you look at my red markup on the page I’m moving his action lines around a lot to sort of keep them together so we’re in dialogue or we’re in action but we’re not breaking stuff up so much. What were you feeling about the rhythm on the page?

**Craig:** I tend to agree with you. There are times where you must break up the dialogue. I’m particularly not a fan of what I call ticker tape screenplays where it’s just streams of people talking without any interruption or action or description or anything. But there are certain spots where – here’s a good example. On page two, Jen says, “Mike?” Then there’s an action line. “No response.” Paragraph break. “She walks towards where he left the trail. Next, “Mike, come on, don’t play around.”

The no response and she walks towards where he left the trail should be on the same line.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** Because no response isn’t enough to be on its own line unless there was more of a decision that she makes in the next line which would make the next line more interesting. And also she laughs I think could just be in parenthesis laughs.

So, yeah, I mean, there is such a thing as too much white space. Although I did not really – that was not a major issue for me on this.

**John:** Here’s an example. On the first page of actual scene here, “The deer skitter off into the woods. Jen says, ‘Good going.’ She starts walking down the path. Mike, ‘I don’t think it was me.’”

Moving that she starts walking down the path after the Mike “I don’t think it was me” actually keeps his line more connected to what’s going on there. Plus they’re going to keep walking. We’re going to stay on Mike. There’s reasons to keep the action together a little bit more, not necessarily as one big block, but just so if there’s a couple of dialogue keeping those things together a little bit more helps your dialogue make sense. We’re not jumping in and out of dialogue constantly. Just be looking for that.

There’s also an opportunity I felt at the bottom of this first page for a time cut. So “He jogs to catch up to her and they continue to walk along the trail with walking sticks in hand.” The walking sticks appear kind of out of nowhere and I had a hard time figuring out he’s holding his camera, seems like a bigger camera, but now has a walking stick. I thought there was an opportunity for a time cut here. It felt like a natural kind of thing to do a little time cut instead of having it be one continuous scene.

**Craig:** Yeah. You want to jump this ahead. Pick a different part of the woods and you see them walking through and they’re having this discussion. I think it will also help the discussion itself. Because when you don’t do a time cut, she was concerned that he was scaring the deer away with his camera. He doesn’t think it was him. And she says, “Come on, we’re almost at the site.” Perfectly good time to jump ahead to another thing. But instead he catches up with her and then she says, “I hope our kids like nature.” Why? Where did that come from?

**John:** And that’s exactly the kind of line that’s so much easier to get into if you’ve jumped forward in time. You can imagine we were in close-ups and then we got back to a wide shot at a new place. Some time has passed. And you can start a new conversation, “I hope our kids like nature.” You can believe there was a line before that actually set that up. And so there’s definitely an opportunity there.

Backing up really to the start of this whole scene, it says, EXT. FOREST TRAIL – DAY. “The forest is dense. Lush trees and overgrowth give life to an already stunning view.” I don’t know what kind of forest this is though. Forests can be the rainforest. This can be the Pacific Northwest. The Appalachian Trail. There’s an opportunity here for a little bit more specificity about what kind of forest we’re in. Just give us a sense of how dense it feels. This is where all three pages are going to be taking place so spend an extra moment here to anchor us into one kind of forest.

**Craig:** Yeah. And sometimes all you have to do is just describe the trees and that will do it. Let’s talk about what’s working here. There’s a nice misdirection and there’s a nice confusion about what’s going on. I think – my recommendation Nicholas would be to take Mike’s little scene where he’s peeing and connect it to his other bit. So stay with her where she says, “Mike where are you going?” And then cut to Mike, he’s finishing peeing, and then he’s like, “Jen, I’m ready. Wait, where are you? Jen? Jen?” And then cut back to her as she catches up with this fake Mike. And then they have the scene. Instead of doing two Mike, because we’re going from Mike to Mike to Mike to Mike. So, there’s too many Mikes. It’s not as enjoyable as figuring out that there’s a second Mike.

**John:** Yeah. And I do want to stress that the overall idea of the scene is completely right and appropriate for the start of this kind of movie. Sort of guessing this is a movie. Where it feels like there’s something freaky going on. You’ve established well at the start that the deer are not actually looking at what you think they’re looking at. The deer are frightened by another thing but our characters aren’t there with them. That’s good. And so I think tightening the writing on the page. I would look at sort of the yada-yada dialogue at the top of page two where it is a thing where characters will have bullshit nonsense dialogue a little bit, which is sort of spacer dialogue. It’s OK here. I think it could be better before we get to the actual sort of real event that’s happening here.

So I think it’s the right idea for this kind of scene. I think there’s a better version of it that Nicholas could find.

**Craig:** I liked – so this bit where she comes face to face, even if we don’t, with creepy Mike was very Stephen King-ish. So one of the hallmarks of Stephen King is that his monsters talk. And they fuck with your mind. That’s what they do. They get right into your psyche and start discussing the things that you are ashamed of or guilty about. Very Stephen King-y which I love.

And that’s what’s happening here with monster Mike. I think I would probably get rid of that last line personally. When he says, “Do you really think he doesn’t know,” that’s very scary. And I don’t want him to say anything else. And I don’t want her to say, “No!” I just want to go from that and her face like oh my god I’m doomed.

I assume that the big secret that monster knows is that she’s no longer pregnant or never was. Or maybe, yeah, I assume it’s one of those. Because it says you would have made a terrible mother anyways, which is a really cool line. So I think there’s a lot of cool stuff here.

**John:** We end on “He hangs up, then a deep CLACK-CRACK-ACK-ACK-ACK comes from deep in the woods followed by a PIERCING SCREAM that echoes all around him.” Great. And I love the onomatopoeia of describing out what that sound is like. It’s bolded and italics and it’s all appropriate to put that big weird noise there. It gives a feeling of what it would be like to be in that theater hearing that.

**Craig:** Yes. I’m not a huge fan of screams. Because they’re a big silly. To me at least less scary than nothing. But that’s a taste thing. But I think that there’s a cool scenario. So you’ve laid out a cool scenario here. And anything involving babies and demons and such, it’s Megana-bait is what it is.

**John:** So a change we made over the Three Page Challenge over the years is we now ask for a log line just so we actually get a sense of what the whole thing would be like. So this is what Nicholas describes as the whole movie. “A search and rescue trainee is dropped in the middle of the woods for his final navigation assessment but while on route to the rally point he quickly finds himself being hunted by creatures manifesting the horrors of his past.”

So my guess is this is an opening segment that is not connected to the search and rescue trainee, which is great. Totally appropriate.

**Craig:** Pretty standard.

**John:** Cool.

**Craig:** I like it.

**John:** Next let’s get to The Other Side of the Night by Ellen Apswoude.

**Megana:** Laura and Joshua cook dinner while the nightly news plays in the background. There are three children playing and stomping upstairs. When Laura yells up to them to stop running the children either claim it wasn’t them or apologize. Laura starts sweating. She looks flush. A news announcer in the background mentions that night’s lunar eclipse. Joshua begins to panic. He looks for a phone to confirm that there is in fact a lunar eclipse at night. When he points out to Laura that she is sweating they both look terrified. Laura starts to transform. Her teeth bleed.

Joshua runs upstairs to protect the children from her.

**Craig:** She’s clearly not flossing.

**John:** Yes. Laura is probably lying to the hygienist when they say, “Oh, are you flossing?” “Oh yeah. I floss all the time.”

**Craig:** She’s totally flossing. Yeah.

**John:** I’m actually a good flosser. It’s going to surprise no one listening to this podcast that I’m a really good flosser and that does actually point that out.

**Craig:** Do you have problems with your teeth?

**John:** No, I have great teeth.

**Craig:** I’ve never had a cavity.

**John:** I think you’ve said that on the podcast before. It’s a good trait.

**Craig:** It’s weird. It’s weird to have this one area where you just are completely disconnected from other people’s experiences. It’s just genetic obviously. It’s weird.

**John:** But it could also be that you are a werewolf like Laura apparently is in this show.

**Craig:** She is.

**John:** So I like where this got to. I didn’t like the journey of me getting there. So I think it’s a really compelling, interesting idea. I just think there’s a lot of stuff that Ellen could be doing to create a stronger moment to get us up there. Because really what she’s trying to do is a misdirect where it’s just like a normal household family and we think that the threat is going to come from outside. And the surprise is that it’s coming from inside. That Laura is the problem. Love that.

**Craig:** This is one of those areas, Ellen, where I don’t have a ton of comments about the format or how you’re laying things out. My problem is that the content is a bit fakey. So everything that’s happening on page one and two doesn’t feel real. Particularly just having been married and having kids and all the rest, the conversation that the two of them are having at the bottom of page one feels like – and the fact that they’re laughing at each other’s not that funny comments, it just feels like fake marriage and not real marriage.

I thought that there’s – OK, I’m just going to say – I think there’s a better way to do this. Because what happens is Joshua is like, wait, hold on, I just heard over the news the three key words. Eclipse. Once in a lifetime. Which you never want that.

Because here’s what actually happens is somebody is going to have to come to you and say what do they say in between, because why are those two words the only ones we hear. But even then he’s like, what, oh my god, no. And then it’s a lot of “we couldn’t have known, the kids, blah.”

So, Ellen, have you seen the movie Raw by Julia Ducournau? John, or Megana, have you seen it?

**Megana:** I have not. But I’m looking it up now.

**John:** I have not seen it. So tell us about it.

**Craig:** It’s the most amazing thing. I mean, she just won Cannes with Titane. She’s a remarkable filmmaker and I’m not going to ruin anything. I’m just going to say you guys should see it. It’s highly disturbing in the most wonderful way. But what I love about it is how grounded the supernatural aspect is. And so what I’m saying Ellen is if I were doing this I would have them making dinner. I would have them eating and being happy with each other and talking about the kids and having a conversation the way parents talk about their kids and all the rest. Very mundane. And then, well, we got about 15 minutes, we should probably get you downstairs. And then they put her downstairs and they lock the door and they padlock it. And you’re like what is happening? That would be the way it would work, I think.

**John:** I feel like I may have seen some version of that before. And so what I did like that Ellen was doing on the page here was she’s flicking her collar because she’s sweating and that was interesting. And it was a bit of a misdirect because they’re cooking pasta so that’s probably what we’ve got there. What you said that I completely agree with is that if this husband and wife have three little kids they’re going to end up talking about the kids and since the kids are supposed to be in danger let it be about the kids being in danger. Let the kids be part of their conversation so that it’s really about that. And it could be like mundane school stuff or whatever but I didn’t buy the relationship stuff or this is the conversation they have all the time. It didn’t feel like married parents’ conversation to me.

**Craig:** No. Definitely not. We are way more tired and used to each other than that. [laughs] Way more.

**John:** Going back to the problem I had in the first sample with the woods or the forest, here it is INT. FAMILY HOME – DUSK. “We are in the throes of an ancient nightly ritual. Making dinner.” What is a family home? I don’t know what that is. And so this is a suburban track house? Are we in the city? Are we rural or out in the middle of no place? It’s going to matter because it’s going to matter for the story. So give us a sense. Anchor us someplace here because I don’t know what a “family home” is like. You’re giving us some details in terms of it’s bustling and there’s winter coats on the backs of chairs. Boots lay abandoned at the front door. OK, but I need more specificity because this could be a cabin in the woods or this could be a mansion. And I need to know more about it so I can really get a sense of what kind of movie I’m in.

Megana, can you tell us what Ellen says the script is about?

**Megana:** So Ellen’s log line is, “What happens when the horror movie ends? After Laura kills her children and husband during a supernatural event she must prove the existence of werewolves to a courtroom.”

**John:** I’m not sure this is a perfect setup for what that would be. But I guess I can see it. And in some ways it is – what is the dingo ate my baby.

**Craig:** I don’t know if it is. [laughs] Because the dingo definitely ate the baby in this case.

**John:** That’s Cry in the Dark, right?

**Craig:** I think. You’re going to say to a court, “No, no, either you think I murdered my family or you think I murdered my family as a wolf.” But either way, I mean, it’s not a great defense. I’m a werewolf is not a strong defense. All right, not where I thought it was going.

**John:** No. Not where I thought it was going. Yeah, so Laura is really your central character there. Everyone else is meat.

**Craig:** It could be amazing.

**John:** It could be amazing.

**Craig:** We don’t know. We don’t know anything.

**John:** We’ve read three pages.

**Craig:** We’ve read three pages. What do we know? Nothing.

**John:** And I would say that I was intrigued by the end of three pages. I would have kept reading even though I wasn’t fully sold, I was certainly curious.

**Craig:** Right.

**John:** All right, let’s get to our final Three Page Challenge. This is Big Evil by Lance Baughman.

**Megana:** We’re in the Sandstone Hills of Oklahoma. A conquistador, Gaspar, hacks at the vines. He’s followed by another conquistador, Hernan, and one-eyed priest, Father Ojo. They’re searching for gold. They approach a clearing. Before then a pile a human skeletons surround a 50-foot log tower. They start scavenging the skeletons for treasure when Father Ojo cautions them that there’s something unholy here. Father Ojo stumbles backwards into a pool of black oil. Before the conquistadors can offer help oil covered figures surround them and attack them

We then jump to an upscale grocery store in sunny Hollywood where a woman asks employee Rick about a cheese display.

**Craig:** Oil is bad.

**John:** Oil is bad.

**Craig:** Bad oil.

**John:** Big, bad, evil oil. Here’s what I liked about this is once we got to the pile of bodies and the monsters coming out of the muck, and I liked Father Ojo coming out of the oil, that I can see. And I get why this is a disturbing horror movie start of things. Page two I’m liking. Page one and the conversation between the conquistador and everybody else, I didn’t buy it. It felt like, I don’t want to slam on comic books, but it felt like the kind of comic book writing where certain words in a line are bold faced to get that sense of we’re here to find this….I didn’t believe that they were having this conversation. It felt like they were having this conversation for me as an audience to establish why they were there.

**Craig:** Yeah. And sometimes the only way to do this is to embrace it and make a point of it which is to not say it offhand at some point, but to sit this priest down, get really close to him, and say, “Let me make this clear. Here’s what you told us. Here’s what you’ve delivered. Here’s what’s going to happen if I don’t see this place in the next two minutes. Do we understand?” You don’t run away from it, but you make it interesting.

And generally that’s what I prefer to do. The danger of these things, of “Hurry,” he’s being sarcastic, “surely the Seven Cities of Cibolla lie straight ahead.” He’s mocking Father Ojo. But we know what’s happening. It’s not clever enough. So we know that you’re trying to be clever by hiding the exposition, but you didn’t hide it.

The thing I wanted the most, Lance, was just to know where the hell this was. It says Sandstone Hills. I don’t know where that is. Where is that?

**John:** And so it makes sense later that Megana says Sandstone Hills of Oklahoma, I get that now. But I assumed this was Mexico. I assumed this was Central America someplace. Because when I see conquistadors that’s what I’m thinking. I’m not thinking of North America at all.

**Craig:** No. And also you don’t have to machete your way through Oklahoma.

**John:** That’s true.

**Craig:** It says green foliage and he’s hacking a sword at a maddening, thorny vine. That’s jungle stuff. That’s not Oklahoma. Nobody has to hack their way through Oklahoma. At least as far as I know it’s flat. It’s the flattest state in the world.

So, I think you could just walk around it, or over it, I don’t know.

**John:** I think Lance has an interesting idea of tying oil into evil. And that is a primal thing that is bubbling up from below. That’s kind of interesting and I’ve not sort of seen anything that could take place in Oklahoma with the sense of like oil as a primal, evil quality. Great. And the fact that you’re marrying it to this giant company that’s done the drilling there, I think that’s really interesting.

Where we land at the end of the third page is in the least believable Hollywood supermarket that I get really frustrated when I see. She asks, “Is this cheese nondairy? Is it vegan? Is it locally sourced?” It feels like–

**Craig:** No one does that.

**John:** No, no one does that. It feels like stock dialogue from something else. And it doesn’t help your story.

**Craig:** Yeah. I agree. It’s just a caricature of a fussy white lady I guess. But generally speaking people don’t walk up to a cheese sample tray with a picture of a cow behind it and say is this cheese nondairy. Nobody asks if cheese is nondairy. It’s not a question. If cheese is nondairy it’s being very clearly stated because cheese is dairy. Anyway, little things.

**John:** The first character who I believe probably persists in this story is at the bottom of page three. “RICK SCHNABLE, 32, listens patiently. Rick wears an apron and the fitted shirt that looks better on less pudgy employees. He brushes back his floppy black hair and smiles.” Great. Love that.

**Craig:** Yeah. Although he needs to answer the questions. So he can’t smile at questions. He has to have an answer. I got a little nervous about the overt nature of this because Lance you probably don’t want my reaction at first to be oil is bad. But you laid it on pretty thick.

**John:** It’s a thick crude oil.

**Craig:** The funnel that was driven into a guy’s head, that was sort of one bridge too far on the oil front I thought.

**John:** You know what? I guess I would say that there’s a convention in horror movies to actually be kind of super overt. I mean, not just the toxic avenger, but you kind of put your themes in this is a stand in for this kind of very much up at the top. And so I can imagine a version of this that would work. But I’m not quite sure tone wise whether this is going to be a pointed commentary on like clever and sort of self-winking version of oil is bad or what Lance is trying to do here.

**Craig:** Yes. I think good horror movies are a little more subtle. Also, just a logic thing, Lance. Your credit montage can be cool. What you’re showing us is a book, pages from a book. And the cover of the book is Spanish Petroleum, The First 100 Years. And it includes things like headlines announcing oil and an outdoor party, and oil derricks and smug oilman Uncle Frank Standish. But it also includes crying children on a reservation. You don’t put that in the Spanish Petroleum, The First 100 Years book. Yeah, you’re going to want to not put that in there. So I would suggest perhaps instead of limiting yourself to whatever the Spanish Petroleum Oil Company would put in a book you just show images of that time. You don’t need the book closing.

**John:** Agreed. So Megana can you tell us what is the whole script about.

**Megana:** OK, so his log line is, “A struggling filmmaker, his scream queen girlfriend, and her misfit son travel from LA to Bartlesville, Oklahoma to shoot an industrial for an oil company’s anniversary at the founder’s creepy ranch where all is not as it seems.”

**Craig:** Oil monsters eating people.

**John:** Oil monsters. I think there’s an opportunity here for some self-aware commentary and pointing to the nature of the form a little bit. Because if you have a filmmaker and a scream queen girlfriend you’re in a universe that horror films exist, so I’m wondering if that’s what he’s going for.

**Craig:** Yeah. I feel like there could be a cool meta thing going on, but if that’s the case the opening is not at all meta.

**John:** No.

**Craig:** It’s just straight up. So, hard to say from these three pages. I think that it’s a cool notion and it was well described. Yeah, some logic issues that we need to just take a peek at.

**John:** Absolutely. What I will say about all three of these samples that Megana picked – thank you for reading through all hundred plus entries for these.

**Megana:** Of course.

**John:** The ones that made it through, first off there were no typos that we caught. Love that.

**Craig:** Yup.

**John:** And they read OK on the page. There was no place where it was like ugh I can’t even get my eyes down this page. It all worked and I could see what the concept was by the end of the three pages. So successes all around for the three entries this time on those levels. So thank you for everyone who sent stuff in this time, but also for our three brave participants this week.

If you would like to send in your own pages so Megana can read them and they could possibly be picked for a future segment go to johnaugust.com/threepage. That is where you can find the form where you can attach your PDF. And it could end up in a future episode of Scriptnotes.

It has come time for our One Cool Things. Craig, what is your One Cool Thing this week?

**Craig:** My One Cool Thing is, are, local school boards.

**John:** Oh my.

**Craig:** I have been very involved in the public school system in the town we live in, La Canada, for a long time, for 20 years basically. And for as long as I’ve been there in La Canada people have always appreciated our school system for what it is which is public and excellent and it’s always had very good stewardship through the school board. So the school board are locally elected citizens who set the policies of the school board in concert with the recommendations of the superintendent. And this is the way it works all across the United States. And what has happened in La Canada and what is happening all across the United States is that idiots, full-on morons, are showing up and harassing school board members because these morons are full of both misinformation and utter bullshit regarding Covid. And also have no concept of how governance actually works. They are showing up at the wrong place to yell at the wrong people about the wrong things, all of which is motivated by their horseshit Facebook accounts spreading nonsense and idiocy.

Meanwhile people are dying. And what is unconscionable is the way that all across the United States school board members are being harassed, threatened, abused by idiots. And they’re not even in the majority. These idiots are not in the majority. They are in the minority. But they have apparently nothing else to do except yell at people who are volunteering their time to be civically responsible. It is outrageous.

So to everyone who serves on a local school board, I salute you. Well almost everyone. If you’re an idiot I don’t. If you think that vaccines are microchipped and Covid is a plandemic, then no, fuck you. But assuming you’re normal I salute you. And I want people who do serve on school boards to know how appreciated they are by the vast majority of Americans. Maybe not vast. Let’s just go with majority of Americans. It’s tragic.

**John:** Yeah. And incredibly frustrating. I think back to Parks and Recreation and there are always scenes on that where there are public hearings and people come up and say crazy things. And that was outside of a pandemic. But those are paid officials whose job it is to listen to the public. School board members are not paid. They’re volunteers. Out of the goodness of their hearts they’re trying to do something to keep the schools in their communities excellent. And to find them being threatened or worse is unconscionable.

**Craig:** Oh, I mean, when you’re being yelled at because you’re not doing something that you know you can’t do because it’s illegal or not in your authority to do things take on a surreal pall. And when school board members explain to members of the public that what the public wants is illegal, or what the public is demanding is not within their purview. The public doesn’t seem to care. They just like yelling because they’re from Facebook.

You know, John, if you Google how to delete Facebook there are some excellent resources.

**John:** It’s entirely a possible thing that people can do.

**Craig:** Indeed I have done it. I did it years ago. It was a joy.

**John:** Yeah. I deactivated my Facebook account. I still use Instagram which I know is complicit. But [unintelligible].

**Craig:** I have an account. I never look at it. I’m withdrawing from everything. Soon I won’t know anything.

**John:** Anything. Love it. My One Cool Thing is a new podcast by Gavin Purcell. It is called Way Too Interested. There’s two episodes out as we’re recording this. The first one is about jigsaw puzzles.

**Craig:** Ugh, they’re not puzzles.

**John:** With Roy Wood, Jr.

**Craig:** That’s very funny. But they’re not puzzles.

**John:** Very funny. Very talented man.

**Craig:** Yeah, not puzzles.

**John:** Second one is about the true origins of Bible stories with Felicia Day talking with Dr. Malka Simkovich. Just a delightful idea for a podcast. So essentially Gavin brings on somebody who is – it’s not their job to focus on this topic but they just become sort of obsessed with a topic. And so they chat about it and they bring in an expert to fill in the actual details of things they don’t know about that topic. And it’s a good idea.

So if you’re looking for a new podcast that is short and enjoyable, Way Too Interested, just waytoointerested.com is where you can find the link to the podcast.

**Craig:** I can’t believe people listen to podcasts.

**John:** I know. It’s crazy to listen to podcasts.

**Craig:** It’s insane.

**John:** That is our show for this week. Scriptnotes is produced by Megana Rao. Thank you again for reading all those pages. It is edited by Matthew Chilelli. Our outro this week is especially spooky and it’s also by Matthew Chilelli. If you have an outro you can send us a link to ask@johnaugust.com. That’s also the place where you can send longer questions. For short questions on Twitter Craig is @clmazin. I am @johnaugust. Craig is on there sometimes. I’m on there more often.

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**Craig:** Thank you, John.

**Megana:** Thank you.

[Bonus segment]

**John:** Craig, what was the first scary movie you saw?

**Craig:** Oh, god, it’s tragic really. I was in fourth grade. I was nine or ten. And a friend of mine had something called WHT. So if you grew up in New York City one of the weird quirks of growing up in New York in the ‘70s and early ‘80s is that we didn’t have cable television. Cable television came to other places much sooner. In New York we didn’t have it because, I don’t know, it’s New York go fuck yourself cable. Instead there was this weird closed circuit broadcast thing called WHT that was around for a couple of years or so. And they would play movies. And you had to get a descrambler box, which we didn’t have, but my friend did.

And we saw The Exorcist.

**John:** Oh my god.

**Craig:** And I was permanently damaged. Permanently.

**John:** Yeah, about the same age I saw Amityville Horror, where I saw snippets of the Amityville Horror as long as I could watch it and then have to turn the channel because I got too scared. I think my parents were out at a concert someplace and for some reason I was alone in the house at night. And I started watching The Amityville Horror which was on broadcast television for no good reason. And I found it so incredibly terrifying. And I think it probably rooted me into my fear of someone being in the house is probably my number one kind of supernatural fear. It’s not like a monster. That there’s someone in the house.

**Craig:** The call is coming from inside the house.

**John:** Megana, what was your first horror movie experience?

**Megana:** When I was probably like seven years old my mom left and my brother was supposed to babysit me. And she had rented 101 Dalmatians for me to watch upstairs. And my brother and his friends were watching Scream downstairs. But I got way too scared being alone, so I remember being like OK well I’ll just feel better if I’m around them, even though I know this isn’t a little kid’s movie.

And I hid behind the couch and I watched this whole movie and was so terrified and I’m still terrified of garage doors.

**Craig:** Of course.

**John:** Oh yeah.

**Megana:** But I recently reread the script and it’s so funny, but obviously that was lost on six, seven-year-old me.

**John:** Every time you say six, seven-year-old Megana watching Scream it makes me feel just incredibly old. Because Scream I see as a relatively contemporary movie to me. So it feels strange that you’re referencing that as that old movie you watched.

**Craig:** I’m glad that she was alive for Scream.

**John:** Sure. Now I have written some scary stuff. I’ve helped out on some horror movies and done some work on them. And I wrote one thing which is probably truly a scary movie. Craig, you obviously wrote the Scary Movie movies, but have you written horror? Have you written anything that is in the genre itself?

**Craig:** I mean, I’ve gone and done some rewrites and things. Some of the stuff that I’m doing now for The Last of Us is legitimately scary. But even then not really in the genre of what we would call horror. It’s not specifically a horror film. I don’t think I’ll ever write just a horror movie, or a horror show.

It’s too scary.

**John:** It’s scary to write. It’s scary to edit. And not having been through the whole process of it I do wonder if at a certain point when you’ve seen this scene on the editing bay for the 100th time if it can actually have any impact again. I wonder if it’s like comedy where it’s like you know it’s funny but it’s not actually funny to you anymore. I’m curious like the folks who make this stuff if they actually are scared by the stuff they’re doing at any point.

I would say because as a writer I have to sort of enter – I try to enter emotionally into the place that I’m at for when I’m writing the sequences. Writing scary stuff is kind of scary to me. I do enjoy being scared up to a certain point, but I want to be able to get out of it at any point. And sometimes when you’re writing I can freak myself out very easily. And I don’t sort of like living in a state of heightened anxiety.

**Craig:** Yeah. When I’m thinking about scary stuff I try and think about things that are actually really, really distressing and upsetting to me. I don’t really – monsters, like I’m not scared by monsters. And I think maybe the reason that The Exorcist fucked me up so deeply is because she was just a girl. It was a kid. Even though there was a monster inside of her and what it was doing to her, it was through a child. And the child was saying things that adults say. That’s the part that was so horrifying to me.

**John:** Also I see here on the outline things that were scary to you as a kid that are no longer scary to you, or things that were sort of a part of your life that have just disappeared. This is a meme I’ve seen a lot. I feel like I spent far too much of my childhood worrying about quicksand. What am I going to do if I encounter quicksand? Never encountered quicksand in my actual life. And I was a scout. I was out there in the wilderness. Never saw any quicksand. Not a thing that people are going to be stumbling upon.

**Craig:** There was a huge thing when we were kids. In cartoons I think people were constantly falling into quicksand. When I was a kid growing up on Staten Island there was the legend of the Cropsey Monster.

**John:** All right.

**Craig:** This is very local. If you know about the Cropsey Monster, 70% chance you grew up on Staten Island. 30% Brooklyn. It is really local. And the Cropsey Monster was basically a legend of a guy who had a hook for a hand. He would go around and he would cut you up. And I was just poking around on the Internet looking just to see if there were any more details about the Cropsey Monster that I’d forgotten and a couple of people made a documentary about the Cropsey Monster, both the urban legend and also the real story of this murderous janitor who worked at Willow Brook which was the infamous institution where they housed a lot of children who were severely disabled and it was – Geraldo Rivera, before he was an idiot, actually exposed that whole thing and it was quite the story.

So there’s a documentary about both of those things. But what was kind of nice to see was that one of the people who made the documentary was a woman named Barbara Brancaccio, which by the way is a terrific Staten Island name. Barbara Brancaccio. I went to school with Barbara Brancaccio. She was in my fifth grade class, or my fourth grade class, or both. So that was nice to see. Well done Barbara Brancaccio.

**John:** Now, Megana growing up in Ohio did you have any local terror legends, any things that were specific to your environment?

**Megana:** There was a series of books called Haunted Ohio and as Craig was saying that though the sort of details of the Cropsey Monster feel like those were the same details on all of our local urban legends, too. The man who escaped from asylum with a hook for a hand. Why are hooks for hands so popular with that? Was that a common surgery that people were having back in the day?

**Craig:** No. No one had hooks for hands. No one. And also hooks, like if you’re going to be a creepy murderer, not really efficient.

**John:** No.

**Craig:** You know? Something that is just more pointy or maybe just a simple sword, but why the hook?

**John:** I think hooks were probably practical at a certain point, because you could do some pirate stuff with them. You could use it to pull ropes in or do some stuff.

**Craig:** I don’t think you can. I think – I’m going to ask you to pull a rope with a hook. I don’t think pirates were good with hook hands. I don’t think anybody ever wanted a hook hand. I don’t think it was a thing. I know that it’s in, what’s in, the new one with the bees and the guy with the bees?

**Megana:** Candyman?

**Craig:** Candyman. It’s in the new Candyman. It was in the old one, too. He has a hook for a hand. And the Cropsey Monster had a hook for a hand. And Captain Hook had a hook for a hand. I don’t think anyone has a hook for a hand. I don’t buy it.

**John:** Do you want to see horror movies now? Do you actively seek out horror movies, Craig?

**Craig:** No.

**John:** Megana?

**Megana:** No. I feel like there was a period from 13 to 17 where I just inhaled them. And ever since that point I have become too much of a chicken to be able to keep watching them.

**John:** Yeah. I’m not a big horror movie person either. So I’m going to see Last Night in Soho which is kind of a horror movie. And I’m excited to see that. But it’s not a thing I sort of go out of my way to go see. Although I loved Scream and I loved the meta quality of Scream and the re-analysis of horror movies as a form, but I’m not a person who rushes out to see Halloween every incarnation that comes out.

**Megana:** Well, I think like I definitely enjoy them as an experience, but now I dread seeing them because I know how scared I’m going to be afterwards. And I think it’s because probably true for all three of us that we have really vivid imaginations and scary dreams. So I just don’t want to add any more fodder for that.

**John:** What was the most recent scary movie that you saw?

**Craig:** I don’t see them. [laughs] I don’t see them.

**John:** Megana, because you and I saw Midsommar together. But that’s not really a horror movie.

**Megana:** I was just going to bring that up. I watched The Haunting of Hill House and all of the Mike Flannigan horror stuff. Oh, I guess I watched Halloween pretty recently. But I’ve seen it before.

**John:** So Hereditary was the last true horror movie, which was before Midsommar. And I like to bring this all the way back to the beginning and to close, it was like me watching Amityville Horror in that I could only watch it in small segments. And so I watched it ten minutes at a time, then I would stop and I would leave the room, and then I’d come back and watch another ten minutes of it because it was just so overwhelming to me. I just can’t–

**Megana:** Did you watch it in your own home?

**John:** I watched it in my own home. That’s why the house is cursed, Megana. All the monsters are here.

**Megana:** I mean, my trick is I like to watch horror movies on flights.

**John:** That’s a good choice. Because then you can scream on a flight and everyone appreciates that. [laughs] Oh, Megana, Craig, it’s never terrifying to record a bonus segment with you.

**Craig:** [laughs] That’s nice.

**John:** Thanks and have a great rest of your weekend.

**Craig:** You too guys.

**Megana:** Thank you.

**Craig:** Bye.

Links:

* [Hollywood Strike Averted As IATSE & AMPTP Reach Deal On New Film & TV Contract](https://deadline.com/2021/10/hollywood-strike-averted-iatse-amptp-reach-agreement-on-new-film-tv-contract-1234850563/)
* [Learned League](https://www.learnedleague.com/thorsten/whatis.php)
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* [Fractal Forest](https://johnaugust.com/index.php?gf-download=2021%2F10%2FFractal-Forest-3-Page-Challenge.pdf&form-id=1&field-id=4&hash=09ef60e375578582dcaf52e8f9abc7c61c3157fd593804d7ac3406965b747fdf) by Nicholas Nyhof
* [The Other Side of Night](https://johnaugust.com/index.php?gf-download=2021%2F10%2FEllen-Apswoude-The-Other-Side-of-Night-Three-Page-Challenge.pdf&form-id=1&field-id=4&hash=0ad0aadf23eb71cd8ef81f83e1610df5b0a502f1d92ec36c8f80417a66f79f03) by Ellen Apswoude
* [Big Evil](https://johnaugust.com/index.php?gf-download=2021%2F10%2FBig-Evil-Three-Page-Challenge.pdf&form-id=1&field-id=4&hash=7b50f3984902b4c0662a6dc94ab68a7670d3e4f814932d3682929318f8a0e742) by Lance Baughman
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Scriptnotes, Episode 520: You Can’t Even Imagine, Transcript

October 22, 2021 Scriptnotes Transcript

The original post for this episode can be found [here](https://johnaugust.com/2021/you-cant-even-imagine).

**John August:** Hey, so on today’s show Craig says the F-word a couple times because he gets angry about a writer who is taking advantage of people. So that’s a warning if you’re in the car with your kids or someplace where you could just put in headphones, do that.

**Craig Mazin:** The kids need to know, too.

**John:** The kids need to be warned about Svengalis.

**Craig:** That’s right.

**John:** Hello and welcome. My name is John August.

**Craig:** My name is Craig Mazin.

**John:** And this is Episode 520 of Scriptnotes, a podcast about screenwriting and things that are interesting to screenwriters. Today on the show the screenplay is often described as the blueprint for a movie, but how do the artists and craftspeople who actually make movies use these blueprints. We’ll look at some of the most important people to read a script and how they do their jobs. We’ll also talk about predatory writers, getting in over your head, and what it’s like to have no visual imagination.

And in our bonus segment for premium members, fine, let’s get into that whole bad art friend situation. The thing that was all over my Twitter that Craig sent to me as an – ugh, now I had to read this.

**Craig:** I mean, kinda.

**John:** Kinda. You sort of kinda had to read it. You missed out on the episode where I think Liz Hannah was on the show and she and I talked through the Cat Person discourse. And so it’s another round of that. And Cat Person is actually referenced in it, so it’s all nesting dolls of appropriation.

**Craig:** Yeah. It’s pretty screwed up. Yeah. I enjoyed reading about. And I enjoyed not being a part of it more than anything.

**John:** Yes. I really enjoyed not being involved in any of those text chains.

**Craig:** My new sort of joy is not being involved in things.

**John:** Yes. Love it. I love that for you. It’s a good look. But first some follow up. Last week we discussed the upcoming IATSE strike authorization vote. Craig, what was the result of the strike authorization vote?

**Craig:** A resounding yes. Not only did 98% of the vote come back in as a yes, which is not uncommon for these things, but the really fascinating number was that 90% of IATSE actually showed up to vote. If 90% of the Writers Guild shows up to vote that’s a pretty great number, but it represents a few thousand people. If 90% of IATSE shows up to vote we’re talking tens of thousands of people.

**John:** Yeah. Good sized towns of people.

**Craig:** Yes. So there is no question about IATSE’s willingness to go on strike. And this was not kind of even a show vote. They weren’t even doing the thing that the Writers Guild annoyingly does where it’s like you have to vote yes. They were like, no, no, no, everyone was like, please, give me the ballot. I insist on voting yes right now because there is a pent up demand for action. And it is justified.

So, what happens is they go back and they sit down with the AMPTP who at this point would be beyond foolish if they didn’t arrive at a place that thwarted a strike in my opinion.

**John:** Absolutely. Because we recorded this show on a Saturday and it comes out on a Tuesday maybe it will all be resolved by then and we’ll again be living in the past. So, for our listeners who are living in the future, hey, tell us what happened because we don’t know yet.

**Craig:** Yeah. I mean, my gut tells me there will not be a strike. I still keep thinking that because I feel like the impact of an IATSE strike is so dramatic. And because it would open that can of worms permanently. I just feel, I feel like the companies are going to have to give on a number of issues. If they don’t it is almost tantamount to them declaring that the era of unionization of labor in the entertainment business is over and that the Amazonian era has begun. And we don’t want that.

**John:** No, we don’t.

**Craig:** No.

**John:** In last week’s episode we wondered aloud why Netflix was choosing two minutes as the threshold for viewing a program. Craig was mocking them and asking, hey, why are you doing that. Several writers wrote in with possible answers. So, the first one really comes down to intentionality. Doug writes, “Viewing something for two minutes is long enough to say ‘that person was interested in this’ and that is a valuable metric for Netflix because the constant release of curiosity-worthy material is enough to keep people subscribing, even if they don’t finish everything they start.”

So if you clicked that and you’re watching it for two minutes you meant to click it and it wasn’t accidental. This was something that you thought was going to be interesting to you. And so that’s really kind of what they’re most concerned about. Because remember they kind of don’t care whether you watch the whole thing. They’d be delighted if you did watch the whole thing. They basically don’t want you to stop subscribing to Netflix. That’s really their goal.

**Craig:** Yeah. I get that completely. But I think Doug is stating something as fact in which I don’t really know if it is. If everybody constantly watched just two minutes of stuff on Netflix and went “garbage, moving on,” and then never found stuff that they really, really loved at some point people would turn it off. The two minutes is not a threshold – I mean, we’re acknowledging there is a threshold that implies interested in. But at that point why is it two minutes? Why isn’t it one minute? Why isn’t it 40 seconds?

It seems to me that there has to be a number that implies interested in and appreciated to some small amount. And two minutes ain’t it. At all. So I would suggest that Netflix has picked two minutes because more than anything it makes their numbers look amazing. That’s why.

**John:** That’s very, very possible. I would also be certain that if people are actually watching two minutes, if there’s that kind of churn from program to program to program to program Netflix has a whole team that’s studying that, too, to make sure that that’s not going to be a person that we’re going to lose. So, they certainly have their data scientists there. Another listener wrote in to point out that when you buy a ticket to see a movie in a theater no one kind of cares whether you actually sat through the whole movie. So it’s like buying the ticket is sort of the intentionality. That’s the money coming into the thing so that’s kind of all you care about. And so it’s not about did this person watch the whole thing.

**Craig:** Yeah. It’s also a weird point.

**John:** It’s a weird point.

**Craig:** Because we don’t pay per view on Netflix, we pay for months. It’s really more akin to you got a MoviePass, remember those John?

**John:** Oh, I remember MoviePass. Yeah. Why didn’t that work? I was rooting for MoviePass.

**Craig:** It seemed like a great idea. The fundamentals were sound.

So if you got a MoviePass and then you hopped into a movie and then walked out after two minutes should Universal declare a victory? I don’t think so.

**John:** Well, I think Universal got paid, though. They got the money from MoviePass for it, so.

**Craig:** Yeah.

**John:** MoviePass was not happy.

**Craig:** In general I don’t think they can suggest that this is a victory for them or a hit. I mean, the whole point is you want more, don’t you want another, you want a second one, you want a third movie. I don’t know. Anyway, at some point this is what happens. The Internet tries to gaslight you into believing that people watching something for two minutes and then turning it off is a good thing. It is not. Stop it.

**John:** It’s not an artistic triumph.

**Craig:** No. You’re writing into a podcast for writers. And you’re suggesting that we should be happy that people watched our thing for two minutes and then went, “Nope.” I don’t think so. It’s just not great. It’s not great for them either. They don’t – by the way you know they adjusted it. It used to be a much longer number. And then they adjusted it. Because now they can say four billion people watched a show.

**John:** Yeah. I think I probably referenced this obliquely in the past, saying like there’s a Broadway producer who is notorious for showing up for like ten minutes of a show and then walking out. And I probably didn’t give his name because I didn’t want to anger him, but now it’s Scott Rudin, because we can just say his name. Scott Rudin was notorious for just first-acting, second-acting things, or having people buy a ticket and just watch ten minutes of it and then walk out. And so frustrating as a person who is making theater, but that’s what you got with Scott Rudin.

**Craig:** Yeah. He’s a bad person. There was a wonderful little story out last week. Elijah Wood, who is an excellent person. We ought to have him on the show. He’s a lovely guy. Have you met Elijah Wood by the way?

**John:** I’ve never met him.

**Craig:** He’s fantastic. He was saying that originally Bob and Harvey Weinstein – so Miramax had the rights to Lord of the Rings. Peter Jackson wanted to make three movies. And Harvey said he only wanted to make two. And eventually New Line got the rights. And Peter Jackson really did not like Harvey. No one did. And so there’s an orc. Somewhere in those movies there’s an orc that is modeled after Harvey. And I’m like I’ve seen those movies so many times and I’m like I’ve got to watch again just to find the Harvey orc now.

**John:** Yeah. I’m sure Elijah could point you to him, maybe.

**Craig:** I’m going to ask him to do that. That’s fair.

**John:** Wrapping up our Netflix talk here, Quinn my friend pointed me to this Twitter thread by Trung Phan who looks at how the thumbnail artwork for a show on Netflix is generated and how it is tested. And I know they were procedurally done. I knew there was some A/B Testing. But it’s actually much more complicated than you would ever think or believe. And there’s a reason why those things are designed in the rule of thirds. They know based on what you’ve done before, what you’ve looked at before, this is what’s going to appeal to you about this particular show. So even though this actress is only in like two out of ten episodes, she might be the marquee face that they’re going to show you for that program because they know that you like her face.

So it’s a fascinating sort of dystopian look at how they make their decisions.

**Craig:** Yeah. Market research is a barren wasteland where no soul can thrive. It’s effective. There’s no question about it. We’ve always known that. It’s nothing you. You see a trailer for a movie and it makes a big deal about an actor being in it and they’re in it for two seconds. This is pretty standard stuff. But it’s a bummer.

**John:** Yeah. Normal real marketing, like when you have a movie coming out, it’s not like it’s some artistic we’re making this poster for all the right reasons. It is such a workplace of committees and random opinions and that executive hates the color blue. It’s a mess that way, too.

**Craig:** It’s a mess. And they do test everything and eventually I think if you’ve been around enough testing you start to come to the inevitable conclusion that you can use the testing to justify any answer you want.

**John:** Mm-hmm. Yeah.

**Craig:** And that pretty much is what happens.

**John:** Yup. All right, so this past week I was listening to the Slate Working podcast which I highly recommend and they had a guest on, she was a costume designer named Dana Covarrubias. And she was talking about how they came up with the wardrobe for Only Murders in the Building. And Craig you don’t watch a lot of TV, so you probably have not seen Only Murders in the Building.

**Craig:** No.

**John:** I think you would genuinely love it. It is a Steve Martin, Martin Short, Selena Gomez. It is like a Serial true crime thing, but also a comedy. It’s all in this upscale Upper West Side apartment building. It’s really, really well done. And the costumes are fantastic and they’re so smart and so specific. What I loved about the conversation on the podcast though is they were really talking about what is the process of getting started to think about costumes. You would think that, oh, she must talk to the director or the showrunner or the actors. And it really starts with she reads the script. And she talked about her process of sitting down, reading the script. Reading it once just for pleasure. And really just getting a sense of the tone before she then approaches like, OK, now let me think about days and nights and where is this character coming from, where they’re going to, and building out full threads on who this person really is and why they’re making the choices they are doing.

And you and I have talked so much about hair and makeup and looks and all the other things that a writer may be thinking about for characters and for their scripts. But I don’t think we’ve talked about all the other people who are getting handed that script and having to make choices based on what they’re reading there even independently of the other folks they’re talking with. So I really want to take a look at the script as a blueprint and then look at all these incredibly talented people who have to take this blueprint and figure out how to build the thing.

**Craig:** I’ve always struggled with the word blueprints because blueprints are rather bloodless and they’re incredibly thorough in that they tell you exactly what to do. This goes here. This goes here. This goes here. And it is absolutely true that every head of every department working on a television show or a movie if they’re good, and one would hope that they are, they do read to understand. They are trying to get inside of the heart of it and they’re trying to see how it functions from a character point of view. At some point they’re going to have to put other hats on.

It is remarkable to see how essential it is to everybody that works in our business creatively to also be organized. Because each department has to feel it with their soul and understand why and how they should be dressing people a certain way, putting hair on a certain way, stunts in a certain tone, but also they need to figure out how to actually pull it off with the money they have, the time they have. And people who can do both at the same time are worth their weight in gold and that’s what makes the good ones great.

**John:** Yeah. So as you approach doing your TV shows, or as you’ve been involved in movies too, it always is striking to me that in order to get these people signed on they’re generally reading the script. And so they have known who else was involved, but they have to read the script and they have to really respond to the script. And they have to say, OK, this is a project I want to work on because I think the project will be good on the whole. I think it will turn out well. I think I will be proud of the work I can do here. And I think it will present interesting challenges to me. These people may not be taking the easiest jobs, or the jobs that they’re used to, but OK this offers some cool challenges for me. Because I know sometimes the projects I want to take as a writer are also the ones that are like, wow, I’ve never gotten a chance to do this before and this is exciting to me.

And so whether it’s a costume designer who has never gotten to do this period before, or a cinematographer who has never gotten to shoot in these environments, that’s really compelling. And the first experience about what that’s going to look like, feel like, be like is going to be in that script. And that’s why it’s all so important. It’s not just these are the scenes, these are the characters, this is what’s happening. It’s what the script feels like because that’s their first vision of what the final movie hopefully is going to be.

**Craig:** Yeah. You know one of the things they’ve been saying in terms of the IATSE action right now is that for those of us who are below the line we tend to think of production as something that comes along every now and again, for people who do these kinds of jobs they’re in production all the time. They’re either in prep or they’re in production. And so you’re absolutely right, the notion of being able to show off a different muscle, a different kind of vibe, that would be incredibly attractive to them. But that means they need to understand what makes it special. So, there are situations also where just the size may be attractive to them.

But size and novelty will wear off. And also size and novelty only maybe inspires you to say yes to the gig. It’s not going to help you design it.

**John:** No.

**Craig:** Ultimately you do need to get inside the tone and that means you need to also have a relationship with the one or two people that holds that knowledge inside. And you need to get in their heads and you need to share it.

**John:** Realistically on most features the person who is going to be making a lot of those decisions is going to be the director. But on something like a television pilot that showrunner/creator and the pilot director will have a lot of very direct connection about this is what the vision for how we’re going to shoot this is going to look like. This is what we’re going for. This is tonally what we’re going for. And that will radiate from all the departments. And so ideally early on in the process you’ll hire on a production designer who is responsible for like, OK, here is the very big swatches of color kind of look for things. This is the time. This is the general look. And then those decisions will then radiate through to the other costume departments and art departments and props and everybody else.

But if that vision doesn’t actually match what’s on the page in the script it’s going to be a real challenge to sort of be going back and forth between like this is what we’re seeing on the art boards versus this is what’s on the page. How do we actually marry that? If there’s a grand vision for sort of these giant 1930s cityscapes but it’s all taking place on interior sound stages that’s not going to actually work.

**Craig:** Does sound like the person who wrote the script should be involved, doesn’t it?

**John:** Doesn’t it sound like it?

**Craig:** Yeah, which is why I do find working in television now so satisfying, because that’s what I do now. And it is nice to be able to say, ah, here’s what I think. And here’s why I think it. And wonderful early discussions that bore a lot of fruit while we were in prep on The Last of Us, we’re going through the choices we could make. I mean, there have been a lot of shows that occurred after the apocalypse. So, you know, in talking with our costume designer, Cynthia Summers, about how we wanted to do this. Neil and I, we obviously had things from the game that informed us, but we also had general philosophical notions and ideas that are a bit different. It’s a very similar thing that we did with [Unintelligible] and Johan Renck and I. And it’s a wonderful thing to talk about that stuff. I love talking about that. Entirely within the framework of tone.

Costumes will blow up or preserve or reinforce tone. So will hair. All of it. It’s all essential. And the more you dig into the details the more you appreciate the people who do read the script and care about the script. And it’s the ones who don’t who can be tricky sometimes. Sometimes they’re brilliant, too, but they need more attention.

**John:** Yeah. And we should say that there’s a certain point in sort of the hierarchy on the set where like maybe it’s not essential that this person knows the overall vision for the movie or for the series because they are there to sort of get this day’s work done. And literally moving the lights and getting this lit they may not need to know the grander scheme of things.

But I also had the experience of on movies, big movies, where I really kind of felt like, oh, they only looked at the scene in a vacuum and didn’t really notice what was happening before and after and so they lit it as sort of the wrong kind of dawn. And like, oh, that actually doesn’t track with the shot that’s going to come directly beforehand. And that’s something that an editor in reading through the script would have noticed like, oh, it’s going to be really important–

**Craig:** Sorry, I have to interrupt you. An editor read through the script? [laughs] Where is this magical editor? I would like to meet this person.

**John:** So I want to have a whole discussion on postproduction because editors are notorious for not reading through scripts. And just like, oh, I found the movie as it came in. It was like documentary footage that sort of came across the transom and I decided to cut something together.

**Craig:** They do exist. I’m joking. They exist. But a lot of them really are sort of infamous for not reading the script.

**John:** But I would say that editor would notice like, oh shit, this could have been an amazing transition if you’d actually lit it the way it was sort of written on the page and you didn’t notice that. And so that can be a problem because it can become very atomic when it gets down to production where they’re just looking this scene, this scene, this scene, this scene, and not seeing the overall flow. And one of the things I so appreciate this costume designer Dana talking about her plan for things is they really are looking – costume designers are really good at this – looking for like where was this person earlier in the day. How did they get to this place? Because they are always worried about continuity and making sure that they had a scarf there. They would still have that scarf.

**Craig:** Ah, yes.

**John:** That stuff is remarkable. And they are building out these boards and notebooks that actually detail all of this.

**Craig:** I’m just laughing because Cynthia Summers is our costume designer, but on the day-to-day work on the set we have two gentlemen, the two Steves, and the two Steves are in charge of both handling the application of wardrobe to our actors on the day, but also preserving and maintaining continuity. Considering continuity and the attention to detail there is startling. And they will occasionally walk up to me and say, “Quick question for you. Seven months from now we’re going to be somewhere,” and then I’m like oh my god, oh my god you guys. But it’s essential. And it doesn’t matter what you do. If somebody is wearing the wrong shirt from one cut to the next it’s over. It’s done.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** It’s funny actually. I looked over the shoulder. They watch the video feed. And they don’t have contacts, our little portable, they don’t care what anyone is watching at all. They’re watching moving clothes. And I said to you this shows just clothing moving around and they’re like, “Yeah.” And it’s awesome. And they’re really great at it. It’s remarkable to watch.

**John:** Now back in the day they would all be taking Polaroids. Now I’m sure they’re using their iPhones or they’re screenshotting what they’re seeing there so they can have references for this. But another reason why this is so important, like you can have a plan going in, but then a pandemic can stop production for a year and then you have to pick up scenes that you started shooting before you shut down. And they can just do it because they can. Because they’re remarkably organized and talented. It’s that creative brain which you absolutely need to do these jobs, and also this meticulous detail brain which is so essential. And I think many screenwriters don’t appreciate the importance.

**Craig:** I mean, nothing gets shot in chronological order. Inside of an episode things are being shot out of order. And then even episodes themselves may not be shot in order. We had to shoot slightly out of order episodically because of weather. Just accounting for how the weather would impact the episodes we were shooting. So, sometimes you’re shooting things and then you realize, ah, stuff happened in between. What needs to happen to the clothing, the hair, the makeup?

**John:** Oh yeah.

**Craig:** The scars? The bruises? Whatever it is. All of that math has to be done and it’s constantly being figured out and thank god these brilliant people that we have are so dedicated and committed to getting it right. And they really are. And we would be utterly lost without them.

But I will say this machine that processes details – that’s what it is, a detail machine, and it’s like details is its fuel and it’s just churning and churning. It needs detail fuel. If you don’t write the detail people are just going to fill it in for you. And this is my constant refrain. If I taught a class at the University of [Gibberish] it would just be called Details. That’s what it is. It’s how to write details. Because if you don’t then you’ve failed before you started.

**John:** Yeah. And again one of the biggest challenges of screenwriting is kind of knowing all these details and recognizing how many details you can put in before you sort of choke the life out of scenes. Where like those details get in the way and people stop reading. And that’s challenging. And that’s the craft.

**Craig:** It is. And there is a certain amount of detail that the viewer can’t take in. So there’s an amount and then there’s a kind of way to inform detail without spelling it all out. You know, if you say this room is full of blank-blank era stuff, most of which was heavily used but has been brought back to life, that guides everyone. Props. Art direction. All of it.

**John:** Just like a fight sequence does not label every punch. You’re not labeling everything on the shelf. You’re just making sure that you’re creating a space where there would be shelves full of things.

**Craig:** Yes.

**John:** Now, before we get to editors, because we should talk a little bit about editors and scripts, the person who is staring at the script the entire time is the script supervisor who I know we’ve talked about scripties before on the show, but I do want to sort of call them out again because the same way that hair and makeup and wardrobe is keeping track of all these continuity things, the scripty is keeping track of every line that is said, every take, making sure that as you cut from angle to angle it’s actually making sense, that things aren’t drifting.

They can be an absolute godsend. So I just want to speak up for the script supervisors on set.

**Craig:** Have we talked about how crazy that job is, even that it exists. It should not be one job. I just want to run down the things the script supervisor has to do. First, they need to make sure that the actors are saying the lines as written, or that somebody signs off on a change. Second, they need to record what lines are being said on camera and what lines are being said off-camera while it’s happening. Third, they need to handle all continuity. That means what things have moved, drinks and glasses, did you pick it up with your right hand or your left hand. All of it. When did you turn? On what line did you open the door? All of it needs to be recorded. Every single take.

Then they also need to record what time the first shot of the day was. They need to record what the lens. They need to record what camera roll you’re on. They need to tell the camera assistants if we’re going up a letter in takes or if we’re staying on take six. They have to do all of that, plus they have to time the whole script out ahead of time to see what the timing would be. It’s crazy. And eye lines. And that’s the other thing. They need to know on a scene where you’re shooting 12 people sitting around a table, when you get to a particular line should they be looking to the left of the camera or the right of camera. This should be 12 different jobs and it’s a job for one person. They are essential.

**John:** And they’re heroic. And we should say when we say recording all this is happening they’re literally taking notes in pencil on a script page. And so there’s a whole coding system they use and squiggly lines for like this take, this take, this take. This is where we moved to 6A and this is 6B. They can do all this stuff. And so a script supervisor can look back at those notes and say like, OK, this is how we did this thing and the reason why you’re keeping track of lens sizes and such is so like OK we need to go back and reshoot something or fix something you know exactly how you did it.

**Craig:** Even later in the day when you’re like, OK, we’ve turned around. It was hours ago. What lens we’re we on because we have to match it on this side? It is I would say probably rare to find a script supervisor that is still doing it with pencil and paper. There are some excellent programs that people have been using for a long time. And now I think a lot of it is done on iPad. Our script supervisor works on an iPad and sometimes I just sort of peek over and watch what he’s doing and it’s crazy. I was talking to him, I’m like how does anybody survive doing this job for the first year as you’re learning? And you know he said, “You kind of just make it up.” He said early on there’s no way, there’s no way you can do it. So you’re sort of like, yeah, they were holding it in their left. And then you’re like, oh boy, I hope they were holding it in the left hand. Because it just takes time for your brain to expand, to firehose that much information constantly all the time.

But, yeah, I mean, look, there’s a reason why it’s practically in my contract that our script supervisor on Chernobyl is the same one on The Last of Us. And I intend to have him by my side always. Because he is too good. He’s just too good.

**John:** Absolutely. And of course in modern productions it is theoretically possible to sort of go back and say, OK, we can actually check the tape and see – when I say pencil notes, I’m thinking back to like Go and it’s literally shot on film. So there’s no record, there’s no way to actually look at sort of what hand someone was holding it in. So we would just have to look to our script supervisor and ask her what was it. And she knows. Because she’s always right by the camera lens, even if you’re on a dolly truck going down a street in Downtown LA. She’s there because she has to see everything with her own two eyes. So, it’s a remarkable job.

**Craig:** It’s pretty amazing.

**John:** Now in theory all of those notes go to the editors who obviously they have to take the footage and then break it into the proper bins and start assembling the movie. And in theory you’d think like, oh, they can just look at the script pages and see what the scene is supposed to be. In practice a lot of times they sort of look at all the footage and then start cutting scenes their own way.

**Craig:** Yeah. Which is understandable to an extent. You don’t necessarily want to deprive yourself of their instincts. And when they look at footage they may feel something and they may drift toward it and that makes total sense. However, I do always appreciate and ask of my editors that they do read the scene carefully before they start cutting it because there are as I like to call it clues buried all over this thing. It’s like a little clue book.

**John:** It’s almost like someone wanted you to find your way out of this [unintelligible] box.

**Craig:** Absolutely. Sometimes you’ll sit there and they’re like “I just didn’t quite know what to do in this moment.” And I’m like did you check the clue book? And then they look and they’re like, “Oh, that’s what that is.” Yes. It’s in the clue book.

The other big clue book is in fact the notes generated by the script supervisor. So a lot of times what will happen is I’ll be sitting there and I’ll go why don’t we have that shot where he turns and looks at her in the wide? And they’re like we didn’t do it. And I’m like we did. No, it’s not there. Yes it is, I know it. And then we look in the script – oh, there it is. We found it.

**John:** There it is. It’s right there. One of the things we also notice that the script supervisor is doing is marking which of the takes are, we used to say “print the takes,” because now everything is basically printed. But circling the takes is like these are the ones we think have the performance that we’re actually going after. So if you shot five takes, takes two and take five may be the ones that have the stuff that you want.

**Craig:** Yeah. And that was something we used to do when it actually cost money to print takes. So you would say, OK, well that obviously was a garbage take. But now what I’ve discovered along the way, and I’m thinking probably everybody sort of figured out early on, too, is even the takes, you sometimes have to go into that bin of the castoffs because what you needed was somebody just looking up and then looking to the left.

**John:** 100%.

**Craig:** Yeah. One of the best bits of directorial advice I can give anybody is wait longer than you think you have to before you say cut. Because stuff happens back there that could just be gold.

**John:** All right. So some takeaways from thinking about how other people are using the script is just to remember that I think so often as writers like, OK, I’m going to write this script and then I’ll hand it into the studio and the producer will read it and we’ll get a director on board. And then I guess the actors will learn their lines. But that’s not even the beginning of the process really.

**Craig:** No.

**John:** Everyone else has to take this thing and actually make it a thing. And blueprint may be the wrong term for it, but I guess you can have a blueprint for how you’re actually going to physically build the building, but that’s not furnishing the building. That’s not doing all the other stuff that sort of makes a place you can actually live inside. And that’s what all these other amazing artisans and craftspeople are doing is really making this thing be a place you can live inside.

**Craig:** Yeah. A long time ago when I used to have a blog, do you remember back then?

**John:** I do remember that.

**Craig:** I wrote a thing called You Can’t Just Walk Into a Building. Because if you say somebody walks into a building, which I think a lot of writers do, somebody has to figure out what building. Where? What does it look like? How does it function? And if you haven’t designed it, meaning you haven’t described what the function and nature and feeling of the building is then as I said other people are going to do it for you. And so the more you can participate in the direction, and when I say direction I don’t mean film direction. I mean creative direction.

**John:** The design.

**Craig:** The overall direction of the film or television show the better off that film and television show is going to be. They need the benefit of all the things you know and you will always know more than you can fit on the page.

**John:** Now Craig you are making my segue way too easily here. Because back in Episode 519 Craig said, “I am a huge believer in the visual imagination of the space. I need to know what it looks like, how close they are together, whether the lights are on or off, if there’s a fire in the fireplace, if it’s warm or hot.” And we got a couple of responses back on this and a whole new branch of things to talk through. Megana, could you read us what Dave wrote for us?

**Megana Rao:** So Dave wrote in, “A year or so ago at age 51 I discovered I have aphantasia. This means I’m unable to visualize, or put another way I have no mind’s eye. It was a surprise to me as I have a strong sense of imagination, work in creative fields, and write screenplays for pleasure. The latter being the reason I discovered Scriptnotes. For me imagination is narrative and conceptual, but not visual. When I read a book and the character description says she was tall and had blonde hair I know what this means but don’t form a picture in my head. It’s the same when my yoga instructor asks me to imagine a balloon inflating and deflating as I breathe.

“This revelation has led me to realize many things about my life. For example I now know it takes me longer to learn new things, especially physical ones because I’m reading through a set of instructions rather than playing back a video clip or looking at pictures of the activity. And when it comes to my writing I see now that I tend to over-describe because I want to make sure people see the character or place as I see, or in fact don’t see them. It’s suggested that perhaps 3 to 5% of people are aphantasiac. So perhaps as many as 2,000 listeners to Scriptnotes could be. I wonder how this affects their personal and professional lives. For me it’s not at all.

“There are some notable examples of aphantasiacs working in Hollywood, such as Ed Catmull, formerly at Pixar, which might suggest this to be true for others. Anyhow, keep up the good work. I’m always inspired by your weekly discussions, even if I can’t picture any of the things you touch upon, which in the case of Sexy Craig might not be a bad thing.”

**Craig:** Oh, you don’t have to see anything. You just have to listen. That’s all. Dave, you just got to listen.

**John:** Let Sexy Craig wash all over you. I really thank Dave for writing in with this because I’ve seen this term a little bit popping up on Twitter and I didn’t really know what it meant. And it’s not a disorder, it’s the range of how people imagine information and how the visual system works for people. But it is really interesting because I think I just have bias to assume well everyone’s brain works the way my brain works. And my brain, I can absolutely picture things in my head. I can imagine smells and textures, and tastes. I can sort of completely put myself in a place pretty easily and I set myself there and I write what I see. And that’s writing for me. And that’s not going to be the same experience Dave is having.

**Craig:** No. And I want to call out the most important word I suppose in the quote that Dave brings up here, and that’s the word “eye.” I believe in it. It certainly works for me. It’s important part of my process. But here’s another thing I know. Dave, I cannot draw at all. I can’t illustrate. I mean, my hands work. But a cube is barely within my reach. And only because I practiced it. So I can imagine things very vividly and very accurately, but I cannot reproduce them through drawing at all. And then there are people I think who may be able to produce things by drawing perfectly but perhaps don’t see them in the mind’s eye.

So, this is not a prison sentence by any stretch as you yourself have noted. However, I will say because it is a visual medium, and we know we’re telling a visual story, you need to have some method to create specificity and completion of visual work. Whether it is happening in your mind or whether you are sketching it out in a series of storyboards, your illustrations, or whether you have a really specific connection to words and the words connect to images as you write them. Whatever it is you need something because ultimately it’s film.

**John:** Yeah. I do wonder if someone who is writing strictly a stage play, with characters on a stage talking, it would impact their process less if they didn’t have to see the whole thing, but it was literally just about the words and the talking and sort of how this all goes. But there’s also, and we can look up what the actual term is, but the same way that some people don’t have a mind’s eye, there’s people who don’t have a mind’s voice, or they don’t have a voice in their head. They don’t have the ability to imagine conversations. And that would probably be a greater hindrance to doing the kinds of things that we’re doing because so much of what we do as screenwriters is think, OK, if they say this then that’s the answer – it’s putting yourself in the middle of imaginary conversations. And that’s a sort of crucial skill. And I think it’s also a source of anxiety and sort of negative repetition.

I do find that so often I will have arguments in my head with people and it’s like well that’s just really stupid because they’re actually not here to hear the other side of this argument.

**Craig:** Yeah. That’s crazy. You should stop doing that.

**John:** Because Craig you never do that. You never actually–

**Craig:** I don’t really.

**John:** Have imaginary arguments?

**Craig:** I don’t. No. You’ve said this before. In fact I believe, because I remember it making quite an impression on me, it was one of your New Year’s resolutions to stop having arguments with people who weren’t there. I mean, I’ve definitely had the thing, there’s a German word for it, where you walk away from a conversation and then you think, oh, I should have said this or this.

**John:** The staircase thing, yeah.

**Craig:** The staircase logic. But it’s rare that I will sit and have a debate with somebody who is not there because they’re not there. It seems like a total waste of good fighting.

**John:** Yeah. But again it’s a range of experiences. And so I think, you know, there’s people who are going to be, I think there’s a term hyperphantasia, people who have extremely visual internal lives and that can be great, but it can also be challenging because apparently it ties into PTSD and other things. They kind of keep re-seeing these things. And it’s not just a reported phenomenon. Like one of the things I liked in this New York Times piece that we’ll link to, they actually can do scientific studies where they say, OK, we want you to visualize a bright white triangle and while they’re doing this they’re measuring your pupil dilation and people who have a situation where they don’t have a mind’s eye, their pupils will not contract where other people’s pupils will contract. And so it really is a thing – it’s a deeper brain thing and not just how people report the experience.

**Craig:** It’s a good reminder that what we do is brain work.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** And everybody’s brain is different and I don’t necessarily think, unless we’re talking about specific injury, or clear malfunction, or dysfunction, some of these things are just a question of how the imperfect system is balanced.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** I mean, you can only say that you are hyperphantasic if we have a number that is a normal amount of phantasic.

**John:** And we don’t.

**Craig:** We don’t. It’s a spectrum, like you say. There’s a range of brain function and, you know.

**John:** Here’s I think what might be useful for listeners though is if you feel – if you listen to our conversation and say like, OK, they describe as seeing yourself in a place and imagining all these things around you and that doesn’t even make sense to me. I don’t even know how a person does that. That could be a sign like, oh, maybe you actually are on this edge of this experience. Maybe it’s good to know, because if it is your situation then look for ways to address that. You may not be doing something wrong. It may just be how your brain works.

**Craig:** Yeah. Like I don’t understand why anyone believes in god. My brain doesn’t work that way. And wouldn’t it be amazing if I got to judgment day and stood before god and went, oh, whoa.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** You’re real. And he said, or she said, “Yes.” And I said but I just – even now I really don’t quite believe. And then he or she said, “Yeah, that’s because you had a brain problem.”

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** And then I would say, OK, so does that get me out of burning in a lake of fire for eternity? And I suspect that’s where they would say, “No.” [laughs]

**John:** But then again the question is well then who designed your bad, broken brain? It all sort of snaps back. As you were describing that were you visualizing?

**Craig:** Of course I was.

**John:** Of course.

**Craig:** Of course I was. I can see everything. I could see all of it. I think I might be hyperphantasic.

**John:** I think I might be as well. And I wouldn’t be surprised if it’s a common trait among screenwriters and writers in general.

**Craig:** Makes sense.

**John:** When I was doing the Arlo Finch books because as a screenwriter we’re only looking at what we can see and what we can hear, like texture, and taste, and smell, like those are not things that we’re actively describing in our scene description, but suddenly in a book I was doing all of those things and I did feel like my world had gotten a little bit more full. It was nice to be able to look at those senses that I normally can’t describe on the page and everything did just feel a little bit brighter for it.

**Craig:** Nice.

**John:** Nice. Let’s get to some more listener questions. Megana, what have you got for us?

**Megana:** Great. So Stupid Luck asks, “I found myself in the most wonderful but terrifying situation. A pilot that I helped to develop and write was sold earlier this year and despite my having zero experience working on a TV show beyond assistant gigs nearly 20 years ago I have been given a higher title than I surely deserve, leapfrogging several low and midlevel positions. Am I doomed to fail? Will my complete and total ignorance of how this all works make me seem irrelevant? I’ve already been included on a ton of conference calls but besides weighing in on the development and my take on writer’s samples I pretty much stay silent. I’m trying to learn and absorb as much as I can, as quickly as I can, but the learning curve is steep. Any advice on how to approach this situation? How to balance my inexperience with the desire to contribute in a meaningful way? How to show appropriate deference to those who have been doing this a lot longer than I have while still taking my shot?”

**Craig:** Wow. Stupid Luck, you are kind of a dream. You seem to have missed the memo that in order to succeed in Hollywood you have to be a total psychopath with no shame and who has no problem talking when you don’t know what the hell you’re talking about. You know, I think this is actually really good news, the fact that you’re even thinking this way is really good news. No, you’re not doomed to fail at all. Don’t be fooled by the militarization and rankifization of the television business. There are people whose value, experience level has nothing to do with their title, both for good and for bad. You are where you are, now forget about it. It doesn’t matter.

In any meeting the best idea is the best idea. And the person who is the most impressive is the person who impresses the most. So it makes total sense to listen and to learn, but you shouldn’t be afraid to weigh in. You should not worry that people are going to judge you. And if you make a mistake you make a mistake. You have a natural humility about you. As long as you don’t take things personally and you keep moving forward and you show other people respect and you don’t trample on them in an effort to get somewhere they will be OK with that. They will be perfectly fine. It’s the only way you can learn. So I think you’re doing great.

**John:** Well let’s imagine another scenario in which Stupid Luck developed and wrote this thing, it was sold, and then comes in as a staff writer on it. That also would not make sense because you are the person who co-created this project. You are naturally going to be up a few ranks there because you are going to have some decision-making capability. You helped create this world. You know things about this world that no one else does. So you’re not going to enter in at the bottom.

When I sold my first TV show I was brought in and my first title was Co-EP, but I was really the showrunner but I really didn’t know what I was doing. I had the disaster that I think you’re fearing that you may have. But it sounds like you have people around you who really do know what they’re doing and can actually support you and sort of make all the stuff happen. I wouldn’t worry so much about it.

Or my first movie, Craig you probably had a similar experience, the first time being on set for a movie, you kind of don’t know a lot.

**Craig:** No.

**John:** And you’re scared like am I allowed to eat at crafts service. It’s all kind of new. But you do have a place there. You do belong there. It’s finding out how you can be useful and how to get out of the way when literally they just need to turn the set around.

**Craig:** And people actually want to help. They want to teach. Nobody walks onto a production and knows what’s going on just naturally. No one. It’s very weird. A lot of it is strange and there are things still to this day I get confused by. I’ve been doing this forever. I run my own show. And I repeatedly confuse who is in charge of beards.

**John:** Oh yes.

**Craig:** It’s hair or makeup depending whether it’s this kind of beard or that kind of beard. All the time these things happen and then you just go, OK, right, sorry, let me…

And it’s perfectly fine as long as you don’t bluster about and take it out on people when they gently correct you. And you’re going to be fine. And, by the way, don’t say Stupid Luck. I would say there is no such thing.

**John:** Good Fortune, sure. But you also worked hard to get there.

**Craig:** You worked hard. And you did something. And it is something that is now employing lots of people. So, I wouldn’t say Stupid Luck. I wouldn’t say it was inevitability either. I would say you achieved something. You should be proud of it, while staying humble, and move forward.

**John:** Agreed. Megana, can you give us another question here?

**Megana:** Casey writes in, “I’m a screenwriter based in LA who has yet to break in but I have had a pilot in development for the past couple of years. I wrote it on spec for producers and we have an older, more established writer attached to showrunner who has guided me through the development process. I wrote the pilot but we worked together to create the pitch. It’s been years now and I’m beginning to feel emotionally detached from and frustrated with the project. In working with the producers I have less and less confidence in their ability to get this thing across the finish line. And I have also come to discover that the showrunner and I have very different world views with regards to race, social justice, and gender.

“I also keep being asked to do free work on a project that hasn’t gone anywhere in two years. My question is am I shackled to this project until it’s officially dead or until it gets bought? How do I navigate this strange situation?”

**Craig:** Hmmm.

**John:** Casey, I wish I could tell you this was a strange situation. There are sort of like zombie projects that aren’t really alive and aren’t really dead that are just kind of always out there and you have to decide, you know what, I’m done. I don’t believe this thing is going to move forward. I don’t believe it’s going to move forward with these people on board.

You wrote this script, this other showrunner person helped you, or helped guide you through the pitch. Maybe contractually they’re involved. You can see. My hunch is that you have a good writing sample that you should be using to get you other jobs. But this project is dead is my guess.

**Craig:** Dead or alive, it’s your decision. That’s the good news. You’re not shackled to it. It’s yours. You own the copyright. You haven’t sold it. You’ve written it on spec. No one has bought it. So, you could just do whatever you want with it. And, you know, as far as the showrunner, the showrunner is not the showrunner because there’s no show. That’s just a person. And if you don’t like the person and you don’t feel connected with them then you make a change. Because it’s your material. They can’t go on without you.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** Because they haven’t sold it yet. And when you say being asked to do free work, you’re not being asked to do free work. There is no work, meaning employment. You are choosing – this is what it comes down to, and this is a hard one to hear Casey, but you’re choosing to continue to work on something that you own. It is your property. The day you sell it is the day everything changes and the work is about employment and then it is a question of being taken advantage of by people who should be paying you because you’re not a copyright owner but you’re an employee. Until that day you have to act like the person you are in this situation, which is believe it or not, the boss.

**John:** Yeah. I will say that emotionally you may have moved on from this project as well. And so I want to give you permission to say like I learned some things from that and now I’m going to step aside and Craig and I both have things that we’ve wrote that’s just like I like this script, there’s things I like about this script, but it is not going to be worth my time to pay any more attention to it. It’s on the shelf now and I’m moving forward with new things. Just give yourself permission to say this is not what I’m interested in working on right now. And that’s great. Don’t feel like you have to finish everything.

**Craig:** Yeah. Just make sure that your lack of interest is not a lack of interest in people as opposed to material. If you’re still interested in the material but the people are wrong it’s time to find different people. And, of course, the other ones may say, well, if you sell it then we get a title and we get money. OK, well we’ll figure that out down the road. But in the meantime it sounds like this marriage has come to an end.

**John:** I think so. I have a thing that’s actually not a question, but I want to point to this Twitter thread by Ariel Rutherford about this white male writer with credits who puts out a call for a diverse female writer to help him on a project and then he tries to swing this kind of Svengali mentor situation where he’s like I’m creating a writer’s room and stuff. I’m not going to go in depth on the Twitter thread, but there’s a link in the show notes, so click through this link. Be warned that this kind of behavior exists out there. Especially because it turns out another writer @awkwardgirlla had the exact same situation with the exact same writer. So it’s a guy who is just doing this repeatedly.

This is just shitty behavior. And I don’t know who this writer is, but this writer should not be doing this. And it was just a new spin on sort of like a person with some credits taking advantage of writers with no credits. And so it drove me crazy. I just wanted to shine a little spotlight on it here.

**Craig:** Yeah. Anybody that suggests that you should join their mentor group you should view as a cult leader. There are no mentor groups. That’s not a thing. The mentor groups that exist are not generated by individuals like that. There may be something like the kind of thing that you and I have done where there have been organizations that have put together established writers with up and coming writers. And they have a discussion and it’s formalized and then they move on. There is not sort of you join my little mini church and then you also do all of my work for me and you clean my clothes and then eventually I have 12 babies with four of you. This is not good. You don’t want this. You don’t want to go down that road.

You don’t need it. That’s the other thing. Anybody that’s offering you that, it ain’t real. Real mentors are desperate to not mentor people. That’s the god’s honest truth. You or I, we’re not looking for extra people to do this stuff with. We have to be asked. We have to forced and shamed into it.

**John:** And so here I think is this guy’s clever trick, it’s almost like it’s a negging kind of thing he’s doing, those pickup artist books. Basically he’s saying like, “Hey, I need help. Would someone out there want to help me?” It’s almost like a white guy in a van saying hey would you help me find my lost dog. He’s asking for help and so then someone will say, “I can help you.” And he’s like, “Oh, you’re actually not good enough, but I think you could get better if you just come join my writers group.” That’s what drives me crazy. Because it’s not even the normal scam which is that like, oh, we’re going to help you polish up your script. It has that first level of I need help because I’m a white male writer who needs a diverse female voice on this thing.

**Craig:** Also, if you’re a white male writer and you’re on the Internet asking randos to help you be less white, fuck off. Go do your own work. Do your work. Research. Figure it out. Study. Interview people. Don’t make them do your work for you. Don’t ask that. What is that? That is something you pay people for. It’s called writing or producing or consulting. It’s a job. It’s not free.

Geez, fucking guy.

**John:** I should say also that he was offering pay at the start. So basically the hook was like oh I will pay you to be a consultant on this thing.

**Craig:** Yeah, but like what? When I say pay I mean like you work for Fox or Disney and you get paid, like a real salary. Not like some guy is like, “Here you go. I guarantee you $100.”

**John:** All right. Now it’s time for our One Cool Things. My One Cool Thing is a thing I did last year which I highly recommend for people in LA. It’s called the LA County Adopt a Family for the Holidays program. It’s done through the county and you go to a really boring website, a poorly designed form, but you put in your information and they match you up with a family in LA County who receives Medicaid or basically needs some help because they would not be otherwise able to buy Christmas presents for their kids. And so you get matched up with a family. You exchange text messages to find out who they are and what their kids are like and what their situation is. You buy some presents. You wrap presents. Everyone knows I love wrapping presents.

**Craig:** Oh my god. You’re so good at it.

**John:** I love wrapping presents. And then you drop off the presents and then you go and it’s lovely and it’s nice and it’s such a good thing. A friend tipped me off to it and I’m sending out the word to other friends. It’s just a really good, smart program. So if you are a person in Los Angeles who feels like you know what I’d love to buy some Christmas presents for people who could really stand have a better holiday, really recommend the LA County Adopt a Family for the Holidays program. And we’ll put a link in the show notes to it.

**Craig:** That does sound pretty good.

**John:** It’s pretty good.

**Craig:** I can probably steal that. You know, I don’t know how to wrap gifts. Did you know that?

**John:** Oh.

**Craig:** I don’t even know how to do it. Melissa does it.

**John:** I love, I genuinely love doing it. I didn’t realize people didn’t know how to do it until Rawson Thurber, who was my assistant at one point, just literally could not do it and so I would wrap all of his presents.

**Craig:** So basically I start to wrap something and then everything goes wrong. It’s sort of like me and drawing. I can wrap it in a square and then there’s the extra part sticking out and I know there’s some folding involved, but the folds don’t work right. And inevitably it ends up looking like a large Tootsie Roll inevitably. I just start twisting the ends. Megana, do you know how to wrap gifts.

**Megana:** I’m really bad at it. And it’s so embarrassing to bring something that I’ve tried to wrap in front of John because I can just feel his judgment so heavily.

**Craig:** He’s pretty judgy.

**John:** But Craig I don’t know if you know that Megana actually draws really well. She’s actually, give her a pen and some time and she can draw you up something lovely.

**Megana:** I do like to doodle.

**Craig:** I know that because Megana got me one of the nicest things ever. She made a painting of my dog.

**John:** She made a painting of my dog, too. That’s your thing.

**Megana:** It actually really wasn’t. You guys are the only two that – I’m like what do these guys care about? And the answer is consistently your dogs.

**Craig:** I have another dog now, Megana. I’m just saying.

My One Cool Thing is Megana’s ability to draw my dog.

**John:** That’s a very cool thing indeed. And that’s our show for this week. Scriptnotes is produced by Megana Rao. It is edited by Matthew Chilelli. Our outro is by Layn Pieratt. Really good outro. Thank you, Layn.

If you have an outro you can send us a link to ask@johnaugust.com. That’s also the place where you can send longer questions. For short questions on Twitter Craig is sometimes @clmazin. And I am always @johnaugust.

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[Bonus segment]

**John:** Oh, Craig. Oh Craig. All right, so welcome all our premium members. You are true friends. You are true art friends. And we would never turn on you in our text channel, our text thread about you. Craig, can you give us the briefest recap of the situation between these two women and this writer community?

**Craig:** Yeah. So this has been zinging around and there’s a big article in the New York Times Magazine. Long and short of it is there was a woman who was more of an up and coming writer. And she decided to donate a kidney to a person that she didn’t know. A little bit like the way you just adopted a family. But this was a rather extreme thing. She was like I decided just to be a really good person. I’m going to offer my kidney to somebody in need of a kidney. And just somebody. And in fact there was somebody in need and she did in fact have the surgery. She donated her kidney. And she talked a lot about it. She talked a lot about it on a Facebook group. Facebook, of course, root of all evil.

**John:** Mm-hmm.

**Craig:** And while she was talking about it she had an acquaintance, or she thought was a friend, was another writer who is a little bit more of an established writer who wrote a story that included something about a woman who donates a kidney to somebody. And the kidney donor was a bit irked because initially she just didn’t feel like this other woman was paying enough attention to her kidney donation.

**John:** Yeah.

**Craig:** Which is where I got stuck. Cause I think it’s sort of like that’s not why you donate a kidney. Anyway, and that writer, Sonya Larson, said, “Yeah, no, no, I saw that you donated a kidney. Good for you.” And then later she released this story and Dawn Dorland, the woman who donated a kidney, was aghast and believed and accused Sonya Larson of essentially lifting her story because she included this element of a person donating a kidney. But what was really weird and where this story actually got kind of confusing and muddled is indeed Sonya Larson did lift a sentence or two from an email that Dawn Dorland had written, or a Facebook post, one of those two. I can’t remember.

So actually there was sort of like a little bit of technical plagiarism there. But not much. And this story has lit up everyone. I guess you either are Team Dawn or you’re Team Sonya, or as somebody on Facebook [unintelligible] what this story really shows more than anything is that writers are annoying. [laughs] And that is absolutely true. So, OK, John, Megana, what do we make of this?

**John:** So I’ve only read the Robert Kolker New York Times story, so my only point into it. I know there’s a discourse that goes well beyond the edged the edges of this because it’s 2021 and the discourse has to spill everywhere. And like these people themselves are probably also involved in the conversation.

God, it made me – as you start to read the story and you start to see Dawn saying like why aren’t people commending me enough for donating a kidney. That is a great character. That is a great moment.

**Craig:** Nuts.

**John:** And at the same time I think oh my god you want to use that character in a story. And then it seems like Sonya Larson did that and then also – which was probably defensible as using that idea of that character. But then to actually use those words seems so dumb. And that’s a thing I couldn’t get past.

**Craig:** Yeah. So everybody fucked up to some extent. Although my sympathies will always be with the person who does the work. And in this case the person who did the work was Sonya Larson. The fact that she was inspired by someone’s story of donating a kidney is normal. People are inspired by real life stuff all the time. Nobody owns that. If you donate a kidney to somebody you don’t own everybody’s short story from now until the end of time about somebody donating a kidney.

Yes, she clearly screwed up by cribbing that line from an email and that was wrong. Also, it didn’t really cause any damage because as far as I could tell Sonya Larson’s short story has not led to any kind of real financial success. It was just out there, but it wasn’t some huge thing. Now it’s a huge thing.

And also Sonya Larson appears to be a legitimate writer who is doing work. And so I feel like if you do the work you do the work. So she made a mistake and she has owned that mistake. The other thing that was going on in a very kind of typical Internet way there are a bunch of people who are on this Facebook page–

**John:** Oh yeah.

**Craig:** –where they see Dawn Dorland going on about her kidney donation ad nauseam and wondering why people aren’t telling her more about how wonderful she is for her donation. And they start back-channeling and gossiping about how much they hate her. And I totally understand that because I think I probably would have done the same thing. Totally. I’m like Megana I have to at this point – you seem like the nicest person in the world. Every interaction I’ve ever had with you you seem quite pure. Like you were delivered on angel wings to the world to save us all.

But, have you never just sort of seen somebody acting like this super thirsty annoying person and then kind of back-channeled some catty commentary?

**Megana:** Yeah. I mean, I so sympathize for Dawn because I think we’ve all had that experience of thinking that people are our friends, or that people are saying – you know, just that infuriating feeling of not getting the joke or not being in on the thing is so devastating. Nobody is talking about the violation of privacy here and I would never want my personal private group chats with my girlfriends to be public.

**John:** That is absolutely crucial. So we should say those became public because of discovery. Because there were lawsuits going back and forth between the two of them. And so once it got to that point I’m just like oh my god everything has gone off the rails because there are so many conversations I’ve had with people that I would not want to show up on discovery. And I’ve been through discovery. Discovery sucks. So I don’t want that done. Yes.

**Megana:** But also the context, because sometimes my friends are like really in the wrong, but when you have your friend’s back and you know. I don’t need everyone reading the New York Times how I’m trying to support my friend in that way. I don’t know, it’s just so–

**Craig:** Totally.

**Megana:** Ugh.

**Craig:** It’s a real mess. I do love just how this all started. And the way it started was that she was posting on Facebook celebrating herself and what she did. And then what’s so great is she just looked to see that some of the people she invited into her self-congratulatory look-at-what-I-did group hadn’t reacted to any of her posts. Now, at that point it’s getting stalky. What does she do? She writes an email to Sonya Larson and the email basically is why haven’t you said anything? Mother-fucker, nobody owes you a comment. We’re reading it. And what was kind of shocking was the message to her was, “I think you’re aware I donated my kidney this summer, right?” [laughs] Like what the hell is that? What kind of crazy world is that?

**John:** I want that printed on a t-shirt, please.

**Craig:** I think you’re aware that I donated my kidney this summer. Yeah? Mm-hmm. Like I would have been like, “Mm-hmm.” But Sonya Larson said, “Ah, yes, I did see on Facebook that you donated your kidney. What a tremendous thing,” which is pretty much the polite thing to say to somebody when what you really want to say is, “Yeah, what do you want? What do you want? You want a cookie?”

And then in response to that Dawn Dorland wondered if Sonya really thought it was great why did she need reminding that it happened. Which reminded me of that thing in Airplane. Hmm, he never has more than one cup of coffee at home. So stupid. Like what narcissism. Anyway, it’s kind of like I guess the person who has her kidney is like I don’t care about any of that. I’m alive. So, good on you, Dawn Dorland. But this got crazy. And, look, underneath all of it the reason I suggested it, John, is because I think there is this – as we were talking about parasocial relationships last time, this thing happening with the Internet now where people overshare their lives and then are shocked to find that other humans who hoover up information about humans for their vocation and then recreate them into art are doing so. They can’t believe it. And they feel as though they’ve been violated. And to the extent that a story like this leads some people to think that writers shouldn’t be doing things like this, other than ripping that one line off from the email which shouldn’t have happened, writers should be doing things like this.

I’m very pro-writer in this regard.

**John:** One thing I did want to actually discuss is that idea of iteration. I thought it was interesting point of the Sonya Larson side of it all is that like they were going back to earlier versions of the story. Basically she kept working on the story and revising the story. And earlier versions of the stories might have been closer to this, but when is that story finished? Because it was going to be published this one time, and then she changed it more, and it got changed again. What is the draft that is actually the problem? And at what point in the process can you really say like that was infringement or she just hadn’t done the necessary editing to not make it infringe-y. And that’s an interesting ethical question as well.

**Craig:** What do you think, Megana?

**Megana:** The thing that I was going to say is that in our Cat Person discussion we talked about how easy it would have been for the person to change key details about where this worked, just completely lifting those directly. I think in the same way here, John I think said in Episode 500 like I like to use characters from real life because it proves that those people can exist in reality and that’s a believable thing. But I think you can take the spirit of that without taking the exact details. Like what I also find really troubling is that whether or not Sonya Larson liked Dawn Dorland, like they were a part of the same community. And Dawn was very vocal about this kidney donation. So presumably everyone in Dawn’s life who reads this short story is going to know that. And I just don’t understand why you couldn’t take the extra effort to obscure some of those details. I don’t think it would have changed the feeling of the story, but it would have protected this person whether or not you like them.

**Craig:** It sounds to me like that aspect of the story was fairly minor. That the story was not about kidney donation. It included somebody who had done so. But that the value of the story was in the writing and in the execution as is so often the case. That the concept – didn’t matter what the concept was. So, yes, she could have certainly done that, but I think it’s also reasonable to expect that if Sonya Larson doesn’t know Dawn Dorland and reads somebody’s repost of that and writes a story about it that she doesn’t owe Dawn anything. So what’s the difference?

I mean, basically it sounds like Dawn thought that they were a lot closer than they were and Sonya’s point of view was, yeah, I don’t know you. You know? I don’t know you like that as the memes say.

**John:** Now, Megana, you’re actually in writers groups and Craig and I are not. So has there been a discussion in your writers group about this situation and like what is your feeling about this kind of appropriation or even just we’re writing about the same area or space? Is that a thing that comes up in your group?

**Megana:** I don’t know that I have a great response. Because it is an icky situation and I think that sometimes you see people using similar plot devices or things creep up in multiple people’s works because they’re inspired or they’ve just been talking about it in the group. So, I don’t know. It’s really tricky and I wish that I had a better way of figuring that out. But so far we haven’t really had any conversations about that.

I think we’re also aware that in the process of iterating, yeah, maybe you are using something similar to someone else’s project to figure out a solution, but maybe in your next draft that’s going to be different, so it’s not worth litigating as a group.

**Craig:** Years and years ago I had a drum kit. It wasn’t a very good drum kit but I was learning on it. It didn’t sound great. And I knew a drummer, like a proper professional drummer who came by and I showed it to him and I was like it doesn’t sound that great, but it’s good enough to learn on. And he sat down and he played some and it sounded amazing. It was like the best drum kit ever because it’s not the drum kit. And it’s not the idea. It’s not the concept. It’s not the premise. None of that is what it’s about. That stuff is just the drum kit. It’s the drumming that matters. And in this case it’s the execution that matters. It’s the writing that matters. Anybody in any writing group, everybody could get the exact same prompt and 12 of those same details and you’ll get eight different stories, and you might even get eight stories that are really similar, but only one of them is good.

**John:** Yeah. Like the four gospels in the Bible. Only one of them is good?

**Craig:** Which one is that?

**John:** I’ll tell you off-mic.

**Craig:** Oh, is it John? Because your name is John? Is it John?

**John:** That’s what it is.

**Craig:** Oh, is John the crazy one that talked about the beast and the mark of the devil?

**John:** That’s Book of Revelation. Wow. No. That’s not a gospel.

**Craig:** OK, that’s a different god.

**Megana:** Can I say one other thing about the writing group though? I’m so shocked that no one in this group was like you should definitely change that text. You can’t just lift.

**John:** For all we know someone did. We’re not seeing the whole thread. Or maybe you have gone through all of the documents. Megana has been doing nothing else for the last three weeks. Just going through all this. She found the Zodiac Killer and now she’s figuring out who was the real bad friend in the bad friend group.

People throw this at us like How Would This Be a Movie. I’m going to say that I don’t think this is a movie because so much of what it really comes down to is appropriation of words on a page and plagiarism is not great movie material. If you look at the Melissa McCarthy movie, Can You Ever Forgive Me, was fantastic, but it’s not really plagiarism. It ends up being a very physical, visual thing she’s doing. She’s faking letters. Versus this I feel is just not going to work, to me.

**Craig:** John, question for you.

**John:** Please.

**Craig:** You’re aware that I donated my kidney this summer, right?

**John:** You know, I think it’s such a remarkable, selfless act. I have not been talking to any of my other friends about how much you bring that up.

**Craig:** If you really thought it was that great of an act I’m wondering why you needed reminding that it happened. Curious.

**John:** All right, well thanks. It’s been fun.

**Craig:** See you guys.

**John:** You can log off the Zoom now. Bye.

**Craig:** See you next week.

**John:** Bye.

**Craig:** Bye.

Links:

* [Netflix 2-minute Viewership](https://screenrant.com/netflix-2-minutes-veiwership-numbers-why/) on ScreenRant
* [Twitter Thread on Netflix Thumbnails](https://twitter.com/trungtphan/status/1445768087832182796?s=21)
* [Harvey Weinstein Orc in Lord of the Rings](https://www.theguardian.com/film/2021/oct/05/elijah-wood-lord-of-the-rings-orc-modeled-harvey-weinstein)
* [Dana Covarrubias explains “What the Clothes in Only Murders in the Building Say About the Show’s Characters”](https://slate.com/podcasts/working/2021/10/only-murders-building-costume-designer-dana-covarrubias-creative-process) in Slate Working Podcast
* [Aphantasia](https://aphantasia.com/what-is-aphantasia/)
* [Many People Have a Vivid Mind’s Eye While Others Have None at All](https://www.nytimes.com/2021/06/08/science/minds-eye-mental-pictures-psychology.html?smid=url-share) on the NYT
* [LA County Adopt A Family](https://dpss.lacounty.gov/en/community/volunteer.html)
* [Bad Art Friend](https://www.nytimes.com/2021/10/05/magazine/dorland-v-larson.html) by Robert Kolker
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