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When I write dialogue, I tend to use the parenthetical a lot to describe the mood of my characters or the change in their mood. Also when I have a scene with two characters talking a lot, I tend to put lines of action between the dialogue describing the characters actions while they talk, such as shrugging, smiling, etc. How do you feel about this? Should I just let the actor find out how to react or should I control it by writing more specifically their actions during dialogue?

–Øystein Håland

For those who are unfamiliar with the term, parentheticals are small bits of scene description within blocks of dialogue. For example:

The (reeling) and (beat, causally) are parentheticals. They help communicate the pacing and intention of the dialogue. Without them, the lines read very differently.

Some actors have been known to automatically cross out all parenthetical comments in their scripts, lest their performance be shackled by the writer’s limited vision. If that makes the actor feel better, fine. But there’s nothing inherently awful about the parenthetical. Properly and judiciously used, these comments are an important writing tool.

Screenplays are meant to be read-by directors, producers, editors and countless other creative types-and it’s the screenwriter’s job to communicate crucial details about how the movie looks, sounds and feels.

But that doesn’t mean you script every look, every turn, every smile. Screenwriting is the art of economy, and overusing parenthetical comments will not only break the flow of the dialogue, they’ll drive the reader crazy. If you find you’re using three or more per page, look at whether the dialogue itself is giving enough emotional information. If characters are obviously arguing in a scene, an (angrily) comment is probably unneeded, but you might need to highlight a line that is (sympathetic) or (withering) when it could read either way.

Sometimes these little bits of description end up as free-standing sentences (or fragments), rather than in parentheses. I’ve never heard a good name for these snippets of interjectory description, but every script has them:

Generally, these little text chunks communicate some important piece of action. What only screenwriters understand is that sometimes you need a bit of screen description to break up a long section of character dialogue, or to give breathing room. In screenplays — unlike stageplays — a page full of only dialogue is considered poor form, so an occasional line of action helps put the reader at ease.

Learn more about the basics of parenthetical usage here!

How would you go about writing two scenes in a script
that run at the same time in split screen, but don’t necessarily have
anything to do with each other? Basically like a scene from the movie
TIMECODE.

–John

That’s a real challenge to do in standard screenplay format. While someone
watching a movie can follow the action happening in multiple sections
of the screen at once, the reader simply can’t. Reading is a left-to-right,
top-to-bottom process. So you’re going to have to figure out another
way to communicate the same idea.

Your approach depends on how crucial the split-screen timing becomes.
For instance, in an earlier draft of the first CHARLIE’S ANGELS, there
was a chase sequence between Alex (Lucy Liu) and the Thin Man (Crispin
Glover), in which they were both trying to get to the roof of the building
in order to reach the satellite dish that Eric Knox was using. The chase
started with the two characters on opposite sides of an iron fence, which
formed the dividing line down the middle of the screen. We then followed
each character on separate, sometimes overlapping paths, as they fought
their way to the roof. Finally, Alex kicked the Thin Man "through" the
center dividing line.

In this example, the exact timing of who-is-where-when was important,
so I chose to write the action as two parallel columns on a horizontal
page. It was a pain in the ass to format, because Final Draft couldn’t
handle it, so each time I printed out the script I had to make sure to
leave blank "filler" pages in which to insert the properly-formatted
side-by-side pages. Still, it was a fun challenge.

Ultimately, the split-screen stuff was dropped and the sequence became
about Alex and the Thin Man kicking the crap out of each other.
For TIMECODE, Mike Figgis apparently didn’t work off a traditional screenplay
at all. The entire movie was rehearsed and reshot more than a dozen times.
To figure out who-is-where-when, Figgis used musical score sheets.

For your script, since the two sides don’t necessarily have anything
to do with each other, I would recommend writing the scenes out straight.
If it’s important to indicate to the reader that certain scenes are playing
side-by-side, just put a note in parentheses in the first line of a scene’s
description. It’s not a perfect solution, but in most cases that’s as
straightfoward as you’re going to get.